|Reviews for You vile, atrocious, horrid teenager!|
| Alliee chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
I really liked your story...the plot line was especially good. BUT, you use way too many adjetives. I mean its good to be descriptive to make your characters vivid and genuine, but you crossed the line and instead of descriptive you became very annoying. You should also try to restrain yourself from refering to your characters as "The Quidditch Seeker" or the "five-foot seven girl" or whatever, cuz sometimes it got choppy, confusing and annoying all over again. Its good sometimes but not ALL the time.
well anyways...good job!
| BlistersOnMyFingers chapter 1 . 9/7/2009
Wow! This was really good! I thought that it was sort of ridiculous to have the kiss in the first chapter, but then I realized it was a one-shot, so it made more sense :) Really liked Evelyn, she was a really in-depth character. Good job :)
| Lady of York chapter 1 . 9/6/2009
Oh sounds good. But I think you started off a little quickly though.