Reviews for Forbidden Desire
TEAM-SETH-1891 chapter 3 . 10/8/2009
Im just a disappointed as Bella right now lol. I was really hoping it was Jacob. If you couldn't tell by my name. i'm just letting you know Im going to be up into the wee hours of the morning re-reading this, so when i'm too tired for work I have you to blame.
TEAM-SETH-1891 chapter 1 . 10/8/2009
so the elephant in the room of this first chapter is definitely the Bella-Giana action going on. what made you think of doing it? Im not disturbed or grossed out or anything, it was probably one of the hottest lemons I've read so far. really, it's amazing right now and I plan to continue to read it.

Hope this little review makes you write and post faster ;)
xxxlookingformyedwardxxx chapter 5 . 10/8/2009
cant wait for more!
sakari-x chapter 5 . 10/4/2009
Poor Edward and Bella, they are truly caught between a Charlie and an Aro. I'm sure whatever Aro has planned for Bella isn't a good thing, major perv that he is. Great chapter, thanks for the update!
TwiliteAddict chapter 5 . 10/2/2009
Bravo! The story looks great! Makes me wonder why you took so long to write your own fanfic - you're a natural. And your lemons shake me up - Slurping will forever be engrained in my mind. Your AU appoach is very refreshing also. Can't wait for the next chapter. Yoda?
diremaidenfair chapter 5 . 10/2/2009
you... absolutely rule

I'll be checking for updates!
janneyt chapter 5 . 10/2/2009
Just found your story, it is so hot. Can't wait for the next chapter!
FreezingFire81 chapter 5 . 10/1/2009
loved it!:)
Amortentia4u chapter 5 . 10/1/2009
Great story! I hope Alice can work some magic for those two.

can't wait to see what happens. update soon
refolin chapter 5 . 10/1/2009
One step closer! I love the effect that their proximity has on each other.

And poor Jake! Even now, he wants her and can't have her.

I like how the plot is thickening...Edward and his tortured, self hating self, and Bella being confused with all these new found emotions she's experiencing.

I also liked that neither of them climaxed when they were listening to each other...I think that is significant. Both are aware of this connection they have but are convincing themselves otherwise and think the other is disgusted with them...oh that lil river in Egypt!

And Charlie and Sue? Dum da dum dum...so these are are in LOVE me thinkst.

Also...I like how Bella watched the love between Emmett and Rose, and what he said to her, how profoundly it affected Bella. I forget that this society has shaped and molded Bella's views on love and relationships and pleasure, and she now finds herself craving a deeper emotional and physical connection from Edward, but not even realizing thats what she really wants.

Great chapter RosaBella! I'm looking forward to these two meeting..I can't wait )

Cheers

Nilo
OPOSOJOJ chapter 5 . 10/1/2009
Wow, this story is unlike any fanfic I have ever read before. I was kind of disgusted by it at first, but I am becoming more intrigued. I think your plot is very innovative and you have a way with words. I can't wait to read more.
refolin chapter 4 . 9/29/2009
Alright girl. This chapter hooked me.

"I had been having the most intense sexual experience of my life with a chestnut-haired beauty and she her begging me to take her when I awoke left me feeling like I had truly missed an incomparable experience by waking." WOW. they had the same dream. I mean, Hello..can we say destined to be together please? I love it. Thats powerful stuff. And it leaves both of them so hot and bothered.

And tortured Edward...poor guy. He hates himself for desiring her, and he's never even seen her face at this point.

What it means to be an Innocent...WOW. That is some serious stuff. Punishable by death for both ppl? WOW. So is she like a geisha? And Aro decides when and with whom she gives her V card to?

"My breathing stuttered to a stop as my eyes were captured by the piercing gaze of the greenest eyes I had ever seen." Gah! I love it!

"I knew to the depths of my being there was no way I could break the intensity of our gaze even if I lived for a thousand years." Best line EVER. Truest sense of Love at first sight...even if it ends up being misunderstood in the end...which it is in this case. It kind of makes me think of what it would be like to imprint on someone. Only she ends up mistaking his reaction and thinks he's rejecting her.

"...he spun on his heel and all but ran somewhat unsteadily from the room." Poor Edward! He's so tortured for wanting her..and this is the first time he saw her face. I can't wait to hear this part of the story from his POV.

E! I love the angst ) Glad EbJ told me about this one!
refolin chapter 3 . 9/29/2009
“I want you. Let me have you.” Gah! I freaking love me Edward. Well, I'm assuming he is starring in this dream. I want to have a dream like this. Damn.

“Take me. Make me yours.” I don't know which line is hotter. Damn. I hope these lines come full circle and are actually exchanged between these two at some point in the future.

"The tears were finally joined by great, wrenching, sobs tearing themselves from my throat as I came to the inescapable conclusion that he was something special, my perfect match even, not because he was someone finding me in my room, but because he was a creation of my own mind."

Already she is changing...just by his mere presence. SO powerful, and they have yet to meet!

" My disappointment was as crushing as my climax had been divine." Don't worry Bella! Your love will find you! Hold on!

I think that moving forward, Bella is going to start re-evaluating her sexual acts with other people...and start comparing these acts to the connection she felt in her dream to her perfect match.

I'm so excited!
refolin chapter 2 . 9/29/2009
Agh! This is great. So I liked how Jacob was introduced. I wonder if he is also part of Aro's collection. And he obviously wants Bella...fancy that.

And interesting twist of canon Aro with his collection of vamps there. I like that. So Aro obviously wants E for his collection too.

And Im betting that Charlie wants Bella to be an innocent so she can find her true love too? Is he just trying to protect her? But wouldn't he know all the things she's going to have to do in this sexually gratuitous lifestyle that he wouldn't approve of? Or is this still better than anything that she would go through on the outside?

I thought her commetn about "coming to care for Charlie" was very telling as far as the state of this society. People have become so self-indulgent that they lack any ability to form lasting bonds. I am eager to see how her response to Edward changes her, helps her develop and mature as a woman, but also as a daughter, bc I'm positive it will do both.

I love that Edward is taken with her, from the second he sees her feet...and she with him, from the second she feels his eyes on her.

Love it!
Natasha37 chapter 4 . 9/24/2009
so far...so good ;) keep it up ;)
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