|Reviews for Carnage Necropolis|
| AMG22 chapter 15 . 12/18/2009
once again another good chapter!thats really sad that Misty had to shoot Ash
| Kios chapter 15 . 12/18/2009
You may want to clean under your spacebar soon. Looks like there were quite a few missing spaces throughout the chapter.
Also, I probably won't be able to read the finale immediately, since I'm going to be out of commission for the holidays, so don't freak out or anything.
Well, that was... brief. Well, see you in a few weeks.
| Leone the Infernal chapter 15 . 12/18/2009
The survivors are scarce, but they must stop the world's ending. Memories of the fallen comrades will give them strength. I loved the part where Butch shudders at the mention of the abomination that killed the Tentagator...XD
I don't know who will stay alive at the end of this story, but whoever is left, will be a mental wreck.
| DanielNieves chapter 15 . 12/18/2009
Great Chapter Aiselne! Definitely loved all the Team Rocket interactions, and completed tuned out the headless body in Misty's hands. Everytime you do a flashback to where the trio is still all alive, I keep thinking you're gonna pull a fast one and make it all a dream or such and then I'm thrown back into the pit of despair. Though now that Giovanni has the corrupted L- Ject, I wonder what effect it'll have on this "Khimaira". Later!
| The RoseBlade Ninja Alchemist chapter 6 . 12/14/2009
Well, since my school has a two-hour delay, I may as well finish up this review (since I started yesterday *cries*). Also, since I have more time, I can actually read the chapter more, and give a more thorough review. Anyway…
...I-I can't believe that just happened. You killed Pikachu. My fuzzy little mouse...has died. *cries* I also brought my Pikachu plushie to school yesterday. *hugs Pikachu plushie* Aiselne IS evil!
Anyway, something I noticed just now is you put "FILE #006" before the chapter name. To me, that just kinda seems like all of the horror is just being documented, or something, or it's all just in some report. That whole dream sequence was SO messed up, in SO many ways. I forgot the chapter from the first time I read it, so I thought it was Ash still in Acheron. I was actually starting to think it was real, and that everything seriously was JUST a nightmare, but looking back on it, that wouldn't have been much fun, would it? So, in retrospect, that part was well-written and mind-numbingly convincing. I also liked the part of Ash not getting out of bed and Pikachu taking the liberty upon itself for a morning electric shock. I kinda relate to that (minus the Pikachu part TTTT), but I guess when someone turns on the light to wake me up, it's my equivalent to a shock *shrugs*. I think the first time I read this chapter, I had breakfast shortly after...Good thing no one noticed my ominous staring contest with my scrambled eggs. - Also, the way Ash’s outburst was written when he woke up, I actually heard his voice actor’s voice in my mind. If Capcom and Game Freak made some sort of compromise, something like “Carnage Necropolis” could happen. Of course, that could never happen, but everybody’s gotta dream, right? Anyway, I like the way Ash’s outburst was written. It was worded in a quick way that could be read quickly as well, as the scene permits. I just can’t help but read that part over and over again.
Also, when I got to the part with Team Rocket’s happy reunion, I couldn’t help but plug in my iPod and listen to the Pokemon soundtrack with Team Rocket’s motto. (Also, in the song, Jessie and James’ can really sing) I just had a big smile on my face, but inversely, my heart twisted with Brock being gone from Ash and Misty, it just made the whole moment a big bittersweet lollipop. Pleasant, but weird tasting at the same time. And, I felt so bad for everyone having to go through all of that stench, but I felt bad for Misty the most. Not only is she a girl, who naturally don’t like bad smells, but she had to deal with a bunch of bugs. Toasty bugs, if I may take the liberty to mention. I also liked the door Tentagator was pounding into being compared to Swiss cheese, since I was eating a sandwich with Swiss cheese in it. I laughed, even though Tentagator was probably seconds away from breaking through the door. But…you are just so terrible…for killing Pikachu. Brock! Brock was understandable, yes. I cried during that scene. It’s a good allegory (just learned that word today in English), symbolizing that Brock was the ‘spine’ of the group, and now that he was gone, the two kids no longer had an elder to rely on. Brock’s death was understandable. But PIKACHU? PIKACHU! That is just…the worst thing you could EVER do to poor Ash! After him being all angsty from realizing that Brock’s death was semi-‘his fault’, but now PIKACHU? And it was just so…HORRIFIC. *sobs into Pikachu plushie as well* I mean, the way that part was written when Tentagator first got Pikachu, it made it seem like Pikachu really WOULD survive, and that that part was just another trial, another way to up the drama. But! Once again, all hope is taken away as Pikachu is eaten ‘alive’. Also, with the way “Pokemon” is so kiddified, it’s a little hard to imagine mortal injuries to the characters, but the way you wrote all the injuries…all I can say is kudos.
Anyway, I liked this review a lot more. Maybe it’s because I spent a lot more time on it…For some reason, even though about half the people who read my reviews probably don’t think much of them, I pour my entire mind into them. I guess it’s just because I’m so bent on letting people know what I think. Well, if I have another two-hour delay, I’ll probably use my time to make my next review. But from now on, I PROMISE, my reviews will be much better and MUCH MORE thorough! I better stop blowing off my French homework and submit this review now…Until next review! (which should be sometime within the next day or two…) I’m catching up to the chapters I need to review!
| Magus Black chapter 14 . 12/13/2009
Wow! Now I did not see 'that' comming (and I'm seldom caught off guard, kudos to you); holy-hell Ash is D.E.A.D!
With all that's happened to Misty, her heart/sanity/life are almost dead-to-rights! (horrible Pun - )
YA HA! Continue this epic till the end!
-Magus Black, the Oracle of Blades
| DanielNieves chapter 14 . 12/12/2009
Wow... still a great fic, but you must be ridiculously demented to kill Ash off like that. As if being infected, losing Pikachu, Brock and a majority of his Pokemon wasn't enough, you took his fucking arm... At that point I kinda knew he was going to die, but was hoping for a happy ending. But now I realize that hope is about as useless as Ash's arm and there's no happy ending in this. It kinda reminds me of City of the Dead by Briane Keene where all the humans die in the end.
| Thunder01 chapter 14 . 12/11/2009
Yeah Tetagator's dead. I c an't even spell his name right. Oh well great chapter and great cliff hanger! :) Keep going and I can't wait for the next chapter.
| Spruceton Spook chapter 14 . 12/10/2009
I’ve had trouble finding words for your reviews in the past, but NEVER like this. I’ve been trying to compose this review in my head since like 6:00 last night, ha. And when you get this, probably know that I’ve been working on it for quite a long time, maybe even hours (I’m at work, too, so that always provides distractions [this is more important, though, of course ;)]). If I’d reviewed last night, it would have been brief and full of spontaneous reactions to my emotional state, kinda like the Brock chapter. Which probably would have been what you expected, but this chapter was so much more than what I felt at that moment at the end of it, and you wholeheartedly deserve for me to sit back and gather my semi-coherent, scattered, and traumatized thoughts and review after my head (and stomach, hehe) has settled and I’ve been able to process what occurred.
Too bad that according to my CN canon, this chapter never happened. BUT if it HAD happened, the review would look like this! ;P
I’m kidding, of course. I’m not going to go into denial here. I’ll come right out with you, though: you annihilated my already splintered heart, and you did make me cry (my boyfriend was confused about my emotions when he just-so-happened to call me right after I read the chapter, but I didn’t tell him why because I thought he wouldn’t understand, hehe), and I did kinda function in a funky, distressed state-of-mind last night that actually threw me into a depression of some sorts…but I don’t hate you, and I am NOT going to make Tentagator-style mincemeat out of you. ;) I’m going to congratulate you. Because even though I want to curl into a ball and hyperventilate and pretend that none of this ever happened, AND the fact that this story is not even finished, I’m going to go ahead and proclaim that there is no way in hell ANY other Pokémon fic out there will EVER compare to this. I’ve run out of adjectives to describe what this story is to me, so I’ll just apply an over-used, but very much truthful one: this is magnificent. It is a masterpiece. You’ve totally destroyed me…but you did so in the most beautiful of ways.
Everything about this chapter was…poetic. Sounds like a weird word to use, but it’s true. You laid it all out exceptionally. I had a feeling after chapter 13 that there was no way that Ash was going to survive, and…part of me didn’t want him to, either. If he did, the physical and emotional damage he experienced would have ruined his life, and that is the last thing I would have wanted for him. Just gotta say, though…what I said in a past review? How I can take everything you throw at me now? Hehehe…um, I was wrong. ;; VERY wrong. Because that horrific scene that I’ve decided to block from my memory forever (and you know the one I’m talking about) did me in. I actually had to stop reading it after that and gather myself. That made the rest of this fic look like frolics through a picturesque flower-filled meadow. Despite everything, I can’t believe you did that my innocent, precious, beautiful little boy. I’m placing a blue ribbon on top of your Ash-torture trophy and proclaiming you The One Who Defies All Limits. Because that, my friend, as brilliant and brave and appropriate as it was, wounded me to my deepest inner core. Ow.
But in a classic display of Aiselne genius, it turned out to be the drastic turning point that Ash needed. You are so clever and imaginative it’s just downright scary now. I have to admit that for a second I had these unrealistic hopes, upon finding out that Ash was infected with an entirely different strain of the virus, that he was going to be able to not only regenerate, but ultimately heal. How silly of me. Oh, and remember what I said last review about fearing developing feelings for Tentagator? Excuse me while I ridicule myself. I think I enjoyed that bloodfest as much as Ash did. The fact that Tentagator could not digest Ash’s blood…it makes sense now that that was the only way. I, like, reveled in that along with Ash. “Instead of treating his infection like a curse, Ash knew the only way he was going to win this fatal fight was by embracing his curse as a blessing. After all, Tentagator did unintentionally bestow onto Ash several advantages over the beast. Tentagator was the “Frankenstein monster” Team Rocket created. Now, Ash was the monster Tentagator created.” UGH! That is just so AWESOME, and just so…POETIC. I’m sorry, that’s the word that just keeps coming to my head. What an outstanding, triumphant, spectacular scene. That I, er, read with one of my eyes closed and the partially covered by my fingers. Hehe. I am so, so, SO immensely proud of my little hero. Whose soul took a straight course to Heaven...I’m sure the angels paved it special for him.
Ugh, I’m ignoring Misty and TR and the UBER IMPRESSIVE details of the virus strains too much in this review. But as an Ash fan, can you really blame me? The heroics Misty exhibited were phenomenal. They way she did away with Vincenzio was a total surprise. I also love the subtle and offhanded way you let us know that the rotting corpse in the room was the wife. But geez, is the old geezer still alive? Why did I use “?” when I should just FIGURE that with you? Haha. I want that psychopath dead because he’s the reason MY LITTLE ASH IS DEAD. Oh yeah, and all those other people. *cough* It’s so brutal for Misty to be just a little too late with the vaccine for a second time. My heart (what’s left of it—sorry, Misty, blame Aiselne) goes out to her. Here I am worrying about the obviously-doomed Ash dealing with PTSD when it’s Misty who is going to need help for a very, very long time. “An overwhelming sense of failure took over the girl; failure to save Brock, failure to save Pikachu, failure to escape and expose Team Rocket, and above all, failure to save Ash.” That feeling is not going to go away anytime soon. In fact, it may never go away. Poor, poor Misty. God.
OMG, now I have to write about that final scene? It’s been almost 24 hours later and I still…I just don’t know how to put my feelings here. To say I am devastated by Ash’s death (I can’t even believe I’m writing that!) is obviously an understatement, but this scene…it was truly beautiful. Of course I don’t mean that aesthetically…but the fact is that through all the gore and misery, this scene was filled with such an abundance of love. And love will always transcend misery. I thanked you previously for keeping Brock awesome to his end, and I have to do it again with Ash twofold. Thank you so much for giving Ash the honor he deserves for the ultimate sacrifices he made. Virus or not, it was the love in his heart that was driving his final moments, I know it. The horror bestowed upon him made his appearance ghastly, but made his heart as beautiful as it could ever be. I’m glad Misty could see that through all the graphicness. Even though I couldn’t stop my head from shaking in denial and disbelief throughout this entire poignant, heart-wrenching scene, there is no denying that I loved it. You did an outstanding job on what was something truly difficult to write, and I applaud you. I hate the thought that Ash did ultimately become a zombie, but it was the best thing you could have done. “His cold lips caressed her neck, sending the strangest chill down Misty's spine.” God, that sent chills down MY spine. In fact, hi! Let me quote this whole amazing part, because it’s necessary: “Misty knew ‘devil’ sounded too malevolent for Ash. Perhaps the kiss was from a fallen angel, which was synonymic for ‘devil’, but sounded kinder. The wings of Misty’s sweet little angel had been ripped from their bones, left to bleed and decay for all undead eternity.” I think that’s what finally drove me over the edge and filled me with such unspeakable sadness. At the same time, your descriptions and allusions were so touching and perfect. And, naturally, the last thing Misty said to Ash was just so fitting, so appropriate, so beautiful… GAH, my heart…damn you, Aiselne! ;_; D: D: D: D: YOU FREAKING KILLED ME. I CAN’T EVEN. A most extraordinary scene. God bless you, Ash. I love you, too.
I can’t wait to see what TR’s response is to all this. Just…for the love of GOD, please let them and Misty survive! *beseeches you* The next chapter is the finale? Good Lord. I hate for this to end, but at the same time, I’m glad! Ha! This nightmare must end. These people can’t endure anymore. I don’t think *I* can endure anymore. My poor little heart is just so broken over my precious little angel…I still can’t believe you did that. What a WAY you did it, though. OK, seriously, this is very long. I gotta conclude. You’re awesome, Aiselne. Even if you did literally affect my entire last 24 hours. Hope you’re satisfied. ;)
| Kyarorain chapter 14 . 12/10/2009
Goodness... this chapter was so dramatic and heartwrenching. That evil Tentagator, doing such cruel things to Ash... at least it's finally gone. It was quite horrifying to see Ash being tortured, and in the end, it was too late for Misty to save him... poor Misty, having to use that last bullet on him after all. At least Ash is at peace now with Pikachu and he won't have to live with what happened that night. I doubt he would ever have been the same again after such a horrifying experience.
| Kyarorain chapter 13 . 12/10/2009
Oh gosh... it was heartbreaking to see poor Brock being treated like that, especially after we've seen him die... and Vincenzio being Giovanni's father was a shock. Didn't see that coming at all. Those poor Pokémon, taken out all at once... it's no wonder Ash finally snapped.
| Spruceton Spook chapter 13 . 12/9/2009
Haha, first off, I was going to yell at you for posting two chapters at once again, because it truly isn’t necessary (especially after chapter 13—that alone is enough to digest!). But then when you said chapter 13 and 14 is really ONLY 13, my jaw just dropped to the ground. The way you can write these huge, bursting-at-the-seams chapters chock full of every flavor of drama and emotion under the sun is just mind-boggling. I mean, my chapters always took off and grew to insane proportions, but I was never able to do such a thing every WEEK! Simply remarkable. _ You are ALL writer, inside and out.
I’m going to skip ahead and comment first on that terrific cliffhanger you left us with (albeit temporarily, heehee! Hey, I’m not gonna complain about the two chapters for MY sake; what are you, crazy? ;P). It’s amazing how you are able to wrap up all the pieces of this intricate plot so significantly and cleverly, yet at the same time still blow us out of the water in shock. Hm, I guess Giovanni settled in quite nicely to his kidnapping? LOL With all the vagueness involved with Pokémon canon, there is nothing wrong with making Madam Boss is “adoptive” mother in this twisted tale. I really feel bad for Vincenzio. Even though what he’s doing is clearly not the sensible answer, at the same time, I can understand where he’s coming from. I love how you had Misty wondering if she, too, would take on the same vengeful, irrational mindset if Ash were to die. None of us could really know unless this unspeakable stuff befell us. Misty’s dilemma is just excruciating. I was practically holding my breath during that entire scene. You did a fantastic job describing her progression of emotions, from fear to intense panic and then to anger, as well as the way she was handling the gun. Heh, she’ll be able to use it if necessary, I have no doubts about that, but dammit, this is tricky. Actually, I’m not quite confident this nutcase Vincenzio actually KNOWS where a vaccine—oops, sorry, G-Ject—is. ;; Ugh, this is unbelievably intense! How in the world is Misty going to convince someone who apparently is just too far gone in sanity that she is who she is and a little boy desperately needs help? Question is, is the fact that Ash IS a little boy, maybe perhaps very similar to Vincenzio’s pre-TR Giovanni, gonna be the factor that ultimately does sway Vincenzio? *thinky thoughts*
Ack, thanks for reopening the barely-healed Brock wound! ;_; That brief scene swiftly became the most powerful and affective for me of the chapter. At first, I didn’t even know the dying teenager was Brock—nice job, you merciless, heart wrenching tale-twister, you. ;) ““I will let you live, boy…” smirked Vincenzio, glaring deranged hazels into the teenager’s mortified eyes. “…Heheheh…but of course…I can’t say…the POKEMON…will be so generous!” Before the infectee could even react, the crazy scientist pushed the weak teenager into the pit of rabid Pokemon. Doors slammed locked before Brock could even scream.” Oh. My. GOD. I, like, sat in stunned silence for like a minute after reading that, my hand over my mouth. Nobody makes me pause in shock like that midway through a fic the way you do. Bravo. But damn you, that HURT! Brock! D: D: D: D: *sobs* To think he could have been potentially saved…I just…ugh.
And please to be stopping scaring me about this Khimaira. :P To call Tentagator a “substitute” for this hibernating monster sends chills down my spine. How the heck do TR plan on controlling these beasts, especially since they’ve had fair warning that Tentagator could be, er, noncompliant? Ever since you started entering the warped mind of Tentagator, I’ve just become more and more frightened that this thing can truly be unstoppable if it’s influenced enough by its taste and desire for blood—ANYONE’S blood. It’s already proved that with Tauris. All I know is, you made it possible for me to feel bad for the infected Pokémon, but PLEASE do not have me start feeling bad for Tentagator! XD I mean, it isn’t its fault that it’s the way it is, it needs to survive like everyone else. With all the damage our brave little hero is currently inflicting upon it, I haven’t felt my heart clenching JUST yet thankfully, but I fear it may! Hopefully, Ash will NOT feel like that at all…I’m so happy and proud for my little kiddo…things are starting to look up at least a LITTLE in his predicament!
As always, the Ash scenes are just getting better and better. I don’t feel it’s simply the virus that’s driving his newfound, bloodlust determination. It’s his survival instinct setting in in a way it never, ever has before. It’s a surge of adrenaline that is unimaginable in the most realistic of tragedies and crises. All the pain, the terror, the shattered heart, and sacrifices is what’s driving him now. And I LOVE it. In no way am I in disbelief over the role he’s forced to take at this point. “For Ash, hearing that beast scream was…intoxicating.” I don’t question or doubt this ONE BIT. This monster has taken too much that was dear to him. And it may take what’s most dear to him. I love how Tentagator eating his backpack with everything he had left (OMG, he has NO more of his Pokémon alive, does he? Eep. ;_;) was the final straw. Ash has reached the breaking point that was inevitable, if the virus hadn’t done him in first. The first line of his scene about his hands scraping along the filthy, sharp floor had me cringing to the point I thought my lips were going to bleed. How this boy’s body has held out so long is incredible, but not unbelievable. He has too much heart and willpower to do what he can to protect what is precious to him to allow himself to succumb. “…if I don’t see it, it doesn’t exist”…how true Ash wishes that would be right now! Love how you throw in some of his desperation to cling on any dwindling remains of his innocence. Also melted at all the voices of his friends and family he had running through his head, instructing him, encouraging him. He has no one there to guide him, so to recreate them in his own mind is just so touching. And having Misty’s voice being the last and strongest one was so appropriate, so REAL. This is true love at work.
Oh God, I hope Ash can hold out. I hope Misty can convince Vincenzio. I hope TR makes it back the hospital in time to help. And I hope to God Khimaira does not make an appearance. And…OMG—I get to find out right now! You rock, my dear. Congrats on another unbelievable chapter.
| Distant-Moon chapter 14 . 12/9/2009
You're going to have another massacre on your hands once all those Ash fangirls get a hold of you. Lol.
Okay, seriously, the Togepi thing was sad and foreshadowy! WRAWR! Poor Misty, having to kill Ash! But at least Ash was able to protect her in the end. I just feel so empty, just like when Pikachu died...-sniffle-
I think I'm going to go drown my sorrows in a milkshake or two. And then I'm probably going to go throw a carton of ice cream just to give the dairy industry that extra boost.
This...is an amazing story! I just can't believe it, though...Oh, God, update ASAP! I need to know the aftermath!
| Distant-Moon chapter 13 . 12/9/2009
WHAT? GIOVANNI IS...? WHAT?
I...never saw that coming.
WAH! ALL THE POKEMON ARE DEAD! WHAT WILL THEY DO NOW? EVEN IF THEY SURVIVE, NO POKEMON NO...um...Johto League, I guess. Plus no show. Ash might give up Pokemon Training after this. Though part of me gets the feeling that it won't matter. If either Ash or Misty survive it will be a major miracle of all miracles.
Still, it shocked me that they could kill the pokemon inside their balls. OH! Brock's pokemon are dead too, now, aren't they! I guess that solves THAT problem...-sweatdrop-
I shall keep reading. AWESOME!
| Cardente chapter 14 . 12/9/2009
I liked it. I liked it alot. I've read all of it and I'm curious about what you do next. I suspect only one is going to survive, or you will incinerate everyone. Keep up the good work!
If you want, have a look at my stories. Some are very old (and suck, fnar fnar), but I'm working on a new story now.
Looking forward to hear from you and your next chapter!