This is such a great beginning to a story. Looks like you haven't updated in almost a year, so I suppose that means you aren't planning to continue? I do hope you'll find a way to get back to this. I love the way you write Vincent - his loyalty, his determination not to fail. So different from Cloud, although they both seem to suffer from similar fates to some degree. And I've always thought that Vincent and Tifa made better sense as a couple, although I'm not sure if that is where you intend to go with this.

But poor Cloud indeed! How much self loathing can one man carry? He's worse than Vincent!

So, I don't know. I hope very much that you will continue with this in some format, if only because I would love to see how Vincent handles Tifa's broken heart. He seems so ill equipped on the one hand and yet, strangely, he's really the best suited for the job too.

I hope you're still planning to update. I would love to read more of what happens between Vincent and Tifa. :)

Oh... It hurt so much to read! Beautiful... It... was amazing. It made me want to cry. Instant Favorite. Thanks!

-Herana

Hmm. Interesting. I was waiting for more, and you did not disappoint. Your writing style is a great improvement over most works one stumbles across on this site, and I appreciate your endeavor to keep all three of your characters in...well, character.

If I might suggest one thing, however: be careful with your use of '$1' words. Overall, your work is elevated above and beyond what is usually seen, but there are moments when you insert a word that glaringly stands out.

Just an observation. Take it as you will.

But I say again: I truly enjoy this story, and I am in the hopes that you will continue it.

-Orisoun

It's good. Really good. Alright, maybe the first chapter was a little too poetic, but the second one was much, much better at getting the point across. The only thing I'm concerned with is how long I'll have to wait to see the next chapter.

Oh...Dark but good. Am eagerly awaiting more.

I look forward to more.

Okay, I'm curious! I like the set up for this. There isn't very much description of the setting itself, but I do get the sense of the heavy atmosphere you're trying to create. I like that you're not selling too much of a woe-is-I Vincent, and despite knowing that Tifa is heartbroken from the preview, she's not the sobbing mess that a bajillion other stories set her up to be. She's been looking for him specifically, and now I'm curious to know why.

Anyway, good job. Although if I may be so bold, I'd suggest toning down on the ominous killer Vincent just a bit. You do a far better job than I could with describing the things that lie beneath the surface, but giving too much away at once could turn out a bit like drinking out of a fire hose for a reader. Remember that what you see of an iceberg is just the tip, 90% is hidden underwater.

I really hope you continue writing this, I look forward to reading more!

oh well written. Looking forwards to the rest.

COOL~!