I know this is an old story and you probably don't look at the reviews anymore by now. But your Bill reminds me a lot of Mordin from Mass Effect.

how rediculous is this plot holy shit i cannot finish this

Great work!

The best Pokemon story I've ever read. Seriously, those first few chapters captivated me like nothing ever did before. Simply sensational. The dark world that you presented seemed so realistic and it drew me in. Just Ash and Misty fighting to survive was incredible to read.

I've never seen any author utilize death as freely as you do, and it hurts when the characters I like die, but I respect you so much for being as bold you as were with death. The most gutting deaths to me were the death of his final Pokemon against Mewtwo - Charizard, Arcanine, and Snorlax.

The story moved far away from its initial concept after they got to Vermilion. It was a surprising shift, but the story was still really good.

Cheers. You've really set the bar.

The one and only time I’ve enjoyed seeing Ash as a ladies man.

just weird, and a very weak way to show that pokemon are dangerous with that Gyarados. The ratata and zubat story even the snorlax one was way better, that they return to that was just kinda shit. Rofl and the killing of his mom in this event, like common dude its like you're not even trying

Since when did ash have a charmeleon?

Three Pokémon, three tragedies, three chapters. Damn.

The world blows up.

And just like that, Ash is scarred for life!

Holy shit, your moving this fast aren’t you…

Story cathegory romance, the love interest gets killed 2/3 into the story.
Kid... i don't think you know what romance is ;p jeez the edge; both this story and Triumvirate, both made in the exact sdame fashion near clones of each other both have glaring issues with harbage trope stupidity.

Sad that it's impossible to, without mind reading, design a buttonfor the filters called "no retarded kiddie stories" or "no kiddie teen edge"
It would probably wipe out 99% fanfics but what would be left would be good cos not written by fucking people that are 7-13 year old kids (either physically or more often mentally).

Musty gets munchlex?

Ash x clair
Not that i dislike misty but misty is always used as a romance partnermy personal opinion but this ash and misty ship won’t sail far

Idk how this will sound to you buy a normal person would feel different after finding out your gf is a willing whore (aka misty) if i understood the plot right