|Reviews for The Sun Soul|
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/17
just weird, and a very weak way to show that pokemon are dangerous with that Gyarados. The ratata and zubat story even the snorlax one was way better, that they return to that was just kinda shit. Rofl and the killing of his mom in this event, like common dude its like you're not even trying
| lukejmontier1 chapter 11 . 9/4
Since when did ash have a charmeleon?
| Tenwords chapter 3 . 8/20
Three Pokémon, three tragedies, three chapters. Damn.
| Tenwords chapter 2 . 8/20
The world blows up.
| Tenwords chapter 1 . 8/20
And just like that, Ash is scarred for life!
| lukejmontier1 chapter 2 . 5/13
Holy shit, your moving this fast aren’t you…
| GloriouSin chapter 23 . 3/23
Story cathegory romance, the love interest gets killed 2/3 into the story.
Kid... i don't think you know what romance is ;p jeez the edge; both this story and Triumvirate, both made in the exact sdame fashion near clones of each other both have glaring issues with harbage trope stupidity.
Sad that it's impossible to, without mind reading, design a buttonfor the filters called "no retarded kiddie stories" or "no kiddie teen edge"
It would probably wipe out 99% fanfics but what would be left would be good cos not written by fucking people that are 7-13 year old kids (either physically or more often mentally).
| Gilgamesh50 chapter 19 . 12/17/2022
Musty gets munchlex?
| Gilgamesh50 chapter 15 . 12/17/2022
Ash x clair
Not that i dislike misty but misty is always used as a romance partnermy personal opinion but this ash and misty ship won’t sail far
| Gilgamesh50 chapter 14 . 12/17/2022
Idk how this will sound to you buy a normal person would feel different after finding out your gf is a willing whore (aka misty) if i understood the plot right
| Gilgamesh50 chapter 11 . 12/17/2022
Ash x clair
Not that i dislike misty but misty is always used as a romance partner
| Gilgamesh50 chapter 8 . 12/16/2022
| FrostGlaive chapter 11 . 12/2/2022
I wonder if the savant part has anything to do with Aura. And every time Ash's heritage comes into play, we have the age-old question of who the father is, haha. Giovanni? Red? Riley? Let the conspiracy theories reign.
Also, yes! Our favourite psychic-type! I knew they'd be there sooner or later. (I'm trying not to provide too many spoilers in my reviews, although I've probably already failed on that front.)
I knew we'd lose more Pokémon, but awww. And I really thought you were going to kill James for a minute there; I was incredulous that you'd do such a thing so soon into the story. Heh.
Aghhh and Pokeshipping gets me in the feels, as usual. Teen romance, man.
Wooo I knew it was Agatha! And nice nice, Ash is building up his reputation for when the time comes.
I'm not going to be commenting regularly, by the way.
| FrostGlaive chapter 7 . 12/2/2022
"Is this an argument?"
Best line so far. I cackled for a while.
Ash is still Ash, no matter the universe hahahaha. Also, Misty is having a hard time dealing with the enigma that is the Chosen One, because in a world like this, it's even more evident that crazy things happen when you're around Ash. They didn't see Ho-Oh, though... unless that's in a flashback from when Pikachu and Ash started working together? Also, the Weedle nest was... insanely creepy, but I'm kind of disappointed that they didn't figure out Cade's bug-repellent secrets so they wouldn't have to deal with bugs and Misty's screaming in future.
Since we've already got a fire-type on the team, I guess Ash isn't recruiting Charmander? I'd be lying if I said I wasn't disappointed, but Growlithe/Arcanine is an epic Pokémon and has so far proven his worth. I like him. No, it's not just because I love dogs.
Hmmmm I wonder who Kasumi is. I wonder why Misty is being so quiet. Okay but for real, I wonder if this Ash is savvy enough to put the pieces together?
Also, I suppose that elemental stones aren't needed to evolve in this universe? Since Growlithe appears to have evolved without a fire stone. And evolution seems to be slower than the source material's but still closer to that than real-life evolution.
I'm starting to wonder how much of this is 'Ash is the Chosen One', 'Ash is incredibly lucky', and/or 'Ash is getting help from Mewtwo or some other legendary'. (I am also immensely glad that this story is marked complete, because quite frankly I'm getting a little depressed about how many amazing incomplete fics I've read lately.)
As you might tell, I'm enjoying this a lot so far. You have good grammar and spelling, a compelling writing style, and intriguing premise and execution.
| Red's Melancholy chapter 19 . 10/19/2022
You keep flip flopping Ash's personality to fit whatever plot you have going on and it's annoying. He takes Jesse to go get healed and saves her life, the woman who has murdered countless people and tried to kill him and his pokemon multiple times, but you have him refusing to take in a baby pokemon, Munchlax, because no one has done it before. Ash, you know, the guy you gave some weird genetic evolution to understand all pokemon? And to top it off. you make Misty the voice of reason to save Munchlax, the pokemon responsible for killing her parents. I get you're trying to show Misty's character growth, but don't do it so stupidly where you regress and ignore the other characters personalities. It's just poor writing.