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Gosalyn2007 chapter 1 . 11/2/2013
Name: Miki Lee Sunshine
Gender: Female
Age: 14
Occupation: Trainer/Coordinator
DOB: June 21st
Medical Problems: None
Build: gracefully slim; she has a scar on her back from when she was bitten by a Seviper trying to protect her injured Raichu.
Hairstyle and color: Long royal purple hair, tied into a high ponytail (with flower hair clips similar to a Shaymin's flowers with one on each side of her head)
Eyes: Sky Blue
Skin: Fair skin

Normal Outfit: A lightweight cotton white dress, metallic gladiator sandals, green bangles, a red sarong-since the bottom of the dress is badly torn. She also wears a black coral necklace her Uncle Victor gave her for good luck.

Costume: Hula Girl (Lei necklace, lei anklet, tropical fern leaf wristlet, coconut bikini top, green grass hula skirt, hibiscus hair clip)

region/Hometown: Orange Archipelago/Valencia Island

Family: Luanna (Aunt), Father, Mother, Trinity (Oldest Sister), Marina (Older sister), Travis (cousin), Victor (Uncle), Kaiser (grandfather), Aidan (Uncle)

Battle style: Miki begins each morning with a 45 to 90-minute yoga session with her Pokemon, which helps her get in shape prior to Pokemon battles. Since she grew up on the Orange Archipelago all her life, she uses the natural habitats such as the oceans, mountains, and the forests as training courses


Ability: Static
Nature: Naughty
Moves: Iron Tail, Dig, Thunderbolt, Agility, Surf
Item: Light Ball
Info: Even though he is sometimes aggressive, Raichu is Miki's most loyal Pokemon who is right by her side, no matter what!

Ability: Inner Focus
Item: Focus Band
Nature: Rash
Moves: Close Combat, Aura Sphere, Dark Pulse, Double Team
Personality: Lucario is a strong, proud and powerful Pokémon, but he is arrogant, stubborn and short-tempered and he hates being switched out of battles. He does not get along well with the other Pokemon, and he will growl at them if they come too close to him; however, he has a soft spot for his trainer Miki and he enjoys morning yoga sessions with her where he finds his inner peace.

Ability: Cloud Nine
moves: Water Pulse, Hyrdo Pump, Hyper Beam, Iron Defense, Fury Swipes, Brick Break, Ice Beam
item: Mystic Water
Nature: Docile

ability: Flame Body
Item: Wiki Berry
nature: mild
Moves: Sunny Day, Smokescreen, Flamethrower, Lava Plume, Fire Punch

Nickname: Pele
nature: Modest
Ability: Gluttony
Item: Passho Berry
Moves: Recycle, Incenerate, Fire Blast, Dig, Sunny Day, Acrobatics

Ability: Chlorophyll
Moves: Petal Dance, Protect, Magical Leaf, Sunny Day
Item: Miracle Seed
Info: Bellossom likes to dance whenever Miki plays music.

Likes: Her Pokemon, surfing, Misty, Lorelei, windsurfing, nature, swimming, beach volleyball, spending time outdoors, snorkeling, rock climbing, Brawly, making Poffins, morning yoga sessions, Pokemon, battles and contests, reading, singing, her childhood friend Tracey, her family.

Dislikes: People who are not nice to their Pokemon, manipulative people, people who abuse or abandon their Pokemon, People who destroy a Pokemon's natural habitat, Lapras hunting, people who bribe others to exterminate Pokemon, fried food, fast food

History: Miki Sunshine was born and raised on Valencia Island with her parents and two older sisters where she had lived all her life. She spent her childhood playing near the beach, watching her older sister Marina fish for Pokémon, climbing palm trees and swimming in the ocean with her family.
Miki met and befriended a young boy named Tracey Sketchit when she was in Nursery School and they spent their days getting to know each other. She had been traveling on her Pokemon journey since she had turned 10. Her first Pokemon was a male Pichu (which is now a Raichu), given by Professor Ivy. Pichu wasn't really fond of Miki at first. Pichu did not want to do anything but run away from her, despite Miki's pleading and begging to help her capture a wild Pokemon. However, after she risked her own life to protect him from a brutally raging typhoon, which destroyed her home when it hit Valencia Island, she had won his trust, and Pichu had been loyal to his trainer ever since.
As time rolled by like the waves of the ocean, Pichu had finally evolved into a Pikachu. When Pikachu sensed that Miki was in danger when she was being attacked by a ferocious swarm of Beedrill, he evolved into a Raichu to protect her.

Personality: Miki is a very compassionate, friendly, gentle, kind-hearted, down-to-earth and caring person who is capable of understanding other people's feelings as well as the feelings of Pokémon. She always trusts her instincts, her heart, mind and her soul. She is fun, sweet, cheerful, outgoing, sociable, inspirational, creative, athletic, but she can sometimes be a bit tad unpredictable, talkative and hesitant

Accomplishments: Winner of the Orange Grand Festival Cup. She had received all of the Official Orange League Badges, but she was defeated in the Orange League Tournament. Miki also had received all of the badges of Kanto, Johto, Hoenn, Sinnoh and Unova. She also made it in the Top 8 of the Kanto League, and Top 4 of the Silver Conference of the Johto League.

Other information: She had been earning badges and competing in Pokemon Leagues, but when she was introduced to Pokemon contests, she thought that she would give it a try. Her Aunt Luanna owns a Hotel and an official Pokemon Orange League gym on Kumquat Island. She also has an Uncle Aidan who is a firefighter, has a team of Wartortles that puts out the fires.
Dimwitted Rebel chapter 1 . 8/1/2012
Name: Carrie Prescott

Age: 13

Family: Her parents died in a plane crash. Her sister, Kelly, and niece, Dylan, live in Hearthome City in Sinnoh.

Looks: Almond-shape sapphire blue eyes. Long, thick, curly lashes. Flawless pale skin. Long, silky, glossy, tousled dark brown curls with side swept bangs that covers her right eye. Naturally rosy doll-like cheeks and full rosy lips. Slim, slender, petite, toned figure. 5’7.

Clothes: Pleated denim lower-thigh length mini-skirt, sheer black knee high socks, dark brown knee high boots, black spaghetti-strapped tank top with diamond rhinestones on chest, black beret, black mini-trench coat, and big, black designer glasses.

Attitude: hotheaded, kind, caring, generous, friendly intelligent, shy, very quiet, only talkative when around the people she’s very comfortable with, optimistic, sensitive and self-conscious

Pokémon: Beautifly, Gardevoir, Plusle, Minun, Milotic, Torchic. (She likes to keep Gardevoir out of it's Pokeball)
flashfire360 chapter 9 . 9/6/2010
Okay, sure I'll fix him! Replace Sceptile with Roserade
flashfire360 chapter 9 . 4/21/2010
my OC!

Name: Zachary Wellwood (Zak)

Age: 17

Team: Sceptile, Staraptor, Absol, Aggron, Infernape(Inferno), Dragonite.

Description: Messy brown hair, black and red button-up T-shirt, faded jeans, black sneakers. slight tan, attempted sinnoh elite four. got whupped by Bertha(#2).

Zak lives in Twinleaf town (sinnoh) and took a tour around hoenn. Sceptile was obtained from his panzi cousin, who lives in Petalburg city.

I'm only on chapter 4, but i like it anyway : just thought I'd submit my OC. Keep typing! P.s. I DID have a lucario, but since there already some people with him...
xoxPokemonSweetCakesxox chapter 8 . 2/4/2010
Excellent story so far. Keep up the good work :)

This is my Oc

Name - Nikki Appleton

Age - 11

Hair Description - Baby Pink Spaghetti Vest Top

White Mini Skirt

Baby Pink Tights

White Knee Lenght Boots

White Bucket Hat

Yellow Waistpack

Personality - Nikki is an loud mouth and lively girl, who tends to do things without thinking. She is strong-headed never turning down a challenge, she loves to meet new people, she can make friends easily. Nikki can easily forget things but she a great sense of humour, she tries to lift up people spirts if there feeling down. Nikki is very loyal to her siblings and friends, she will always be there if they are in need of help, she can't stand watching them or anybody getting bullied. Nikki love explore new places and is very brave, but also very clumsy and fun-loving. Nikki has a really big sweet tooth she loves to eat, Nikki can have a temper if you make her upset.

History- Nikki lives in Hoenn, Her Parents run a daycare center in lillycove city. her parents wanted nikki to run the daycare center when she got older, she refused and wanted to become a pokemon master. Nikki olso has older siblings

Pokemon - Torchic (Evolves in Combusken - blaziken

Bulbasaur (Doesn't Evolve)

Eevee (evolves to Espeon)


Pikachu (Evolves to Raichu)


Eye Colour

Shibo26 chapter 8 . 2/4/2010
awesome chapter - a little boring up still. I like the plot
Nianque chapter 8 . 2/4/2010
Nice story so far, I like how the plot has been going. Anyways, here's an OC for you to use.

Name: Felix Storm

Gender: Male

Eyes: Sky Blue

Hair: Very short brown hair.

Clothes: Long dark gray pants, red shirt, black windbreaker jacket, and brown hiking shoes.

Accessories: Silver necklace with a pokeball emblem and a poketech.

Personality: Serious, kind, caring, has a major dislike for team rocket, and somewhat of a loner because he tends to like pokemon better than most people.

History: Everyone but him in his family work for Team Rocket, they tried to bribe him to join with a Sneasel, but instead he took it and fled. He stays on the run from Team Rocket, while trying to participate in the pokemon league.

Class: Trainer (He specializes in fast pokemon)

Pokemon: (I'm going to post my pokemon in order of when they would be obtained and as their final evolution, de-evolve them and take them out as you deem fit.)

Frost (Male Weavile): Very loyal and proud of it's power (He's the strongest on the team)

Gex (Female Sceptile): Caring and helpful.

Swift (Male Crobat): Very lazy during the day, hyperactive at night, and keeps trying to flirt with Zephyr (Usually ends up getting hurt).

Omega (Female Alakazam): Has a strong psychic bond with her trainer and Wave, and is very thoughtful.

Wave (Starmie): Serious, breaks up the fights between Swift and Zephyr, and has a slight psychic link with Omega and it's trainer.

Zephyr (Female Aerodactyl): Motherly and tries to hurt Swift when ever he flirts with her (Although it's obvious, that she's kind of fond of him).

Battle cry: (Name), let's make this quick!

Other: Takes advantage of his party's inherent speed to confuse his opponent, has a deep connection to his pokemon, and hates to see pokemon that are being abused or mistreated.

Also, if I can not have Gex (Sceptile), here's a back up pokemon:

Flare (Female Infernape): Careful and helpful.
Nirazilaa chapter 8 . 2/4/2010
Aww, poor Kacy. It's too bad TAom gave her such a bad first impression. Kacy seems pretty cool though; learning at the academy is definitely a more original backstory.

Glen is neat too; he seems a lot more skittish, and he's really cute. I like him...
CyberWolf101 chapter 8 . 2/4/2010
Wow it really was a late chapter, but its all good since ya came back lol. Fillers are needed to move along so hopefully we can expect another update soon :D Anyways, cannot remember who I submitted before, but I decided a new OC might be more fun :)

*Name(last name optional): Shiro Moriati

*Age: 17

*Gender: Male

*Appearance: Wears a long white labcoat over black baggy cargo pants. Wears a deep green Tshirt inside the labcoat with weather pattern designs on the sleeves. Wears white sneakers. Cargo pants are covered in pockets. On his left wrist is a nano isitris, a wrist computer. Has messy unruly white hair (was blond but became white after prolonged sun exposure), tanned complexion and is in good shape physically. Has a goofy smile, bright green eyes thanks to contact lenses.

*Personality: Ironically his name means White so it matches his hair. He is an optimistic goofy walking disaster. Were it not for his Pokemon, he should literally be dead. He is from Fortree in Hoenn, and spent his life growing up around the Weather Institute, so he dreams of being the expert on the weather. His ambition is to find Kyogre/Groudon/Rayquaza and study there abilities and understand how they affect such a wide area. Finds something good about everything, and cant help but express his optimism. As for the walking disaster part...Were Shiro to walk on a path and kick a pebble...chances are that pebble will roll down a hill, hit a bigger pebble etc etc till a boulder causes a crack to appear in a dam, thus causing said dam to break and for a tidal wave of water to come crashing down on Shiro. And shiro would just laugh and say he needed a shower anyways.

Battle/ Contest Style: While he is not a trainer, he knows how to battle, but gets distracted easily when elemental moves are used, as he tries to record the differences/similarities on his nano Isitris. Thus he tends to use moves that affect the weather, and harmonise with it.

Goal: To become the nations Weather expert. Meet and study Kyogre/Groudon/Rayquaza and the three johto dogs of thunder fire and water.

*Type (eg. Trainer, Breeder, Coordinator, etc): Weather Apprentice/Student on a journey of self study.


Absol, Male, Nicknamed Xavier (cause it sounds like Saviour lol) Xavier was unofficially Shiro's first pokemon. It was constantly attracted by the disasters surrounding Shiro, and decided the best way he could prevent natural disasters was to babysit Shiro. Constantly has to rescue unfortunate people caught in Shiros destruction. His main movelist consists of Protect, Magic Coat (for protection), RazorWind and IceBeam (as too many incidents involved water). He is the responsible one. Cold to outsiders, as he feels they will get hurt.

Castform, Female, Nicknamed Cloudster (for obvious reasons). His main source of study. Uses weather changing moves frequently, so an umbrella is useful. Is a prankster that loves to make it rain and then sunny just to give you a cold. Enjoys battles using her weatherball, and loves the fact that she nearly always has a type advantage.

Psyduck, Male, Nicknamed Dexter. Is unusual in that he only gets a headache in weather moves vicinity. Shiro thinks this is related to his cloud nine ability and is researching this extensively. Dexter has a split personality. in clear normal days, he is happy go lucky, an optimist, but depending on the weather, his personality changes to accomadate it. hail icy cruel. rain pessimistic grouch, Sunlazy and selfish.

Future Pokemon:

Relicanth (for study purposes, ie how weather affected pokemon in the past)

Any one else you want

*History: As mentioned above, grew up in Fortree, spent his life in the weather institute where he learned how to use the various equipment, but also the unorthodox methods of predicting the weather by just staring absently into the sky. His pockets are filled with testubes and equipment. Parents work in the furniture shop in fortree, and has an older sister apprenticed to the Gym leader of Fortree.

Anything else : Is still a student so required to document all his findings. Will only become saddened when present in polluted areas. Muk/grimer are one of the few pokemon that Shiro will go out of his way to eradicate, swiftly and brutally.
Scholar of Emeralds chapter 7 . 11/30/2009
Rachel Giarnna Brown

Gender: Female

Age: Just turned ten

Hair: Shoulder length light brown hair in a lot of curls

Eyes: Hazel Green

Clothes: Gray jacket over black shirt with pictures of Teddiursa on it, gray knee length shorts, pink high tops, and grey beret.

Personality: Most people believe that Rachel is quiet and serious girl, but if you get her mad, she'll do anything to get you back. Rachel is very serious and can be spunky when she needs to. She cares deeply for her friends and brother.

History: Rachel really lives in Johto with her father, step mother, and two older step sisters, but she decided to come to Hoenn so that she and her twin brother, Matthew(who lives with mother in Rustboro) can travel together.

Job: Coordinater

Pokemon: A Cyndaquil (won't evolve), Wurmple(to be Beautifly, and Shroomish(to be Breloom)

Future Pokemon: Skitty(to be Delcatty), Shuppet(to be Banette), An egg that hatches to Azurill, and a Kecleon.

If you need more info let me know.
fiendies chapter 7 . 11/28/2009
I hope you can start making your chapters longer again. :) Despite lack of length, I still liked this one 'cause it was so actiony (word?). Just one thing, and I'm sorry if you find it offensive, but Tom seems to win a lot. I don't think he's lost once in the whole story so far. All I'm trying to say, is that it isn't exactly realistic for a trainer who's just started off to be so adept at strategy and battling. That's everything. Can't wait for an update!
Nirazilaa chapter 7 . 11/28/2009
He caught a Scyther! XD That's amazing! Good job Combusken!

I was worried you'd left us. This was a good chapter, and it's nice you don't speed up to the plot. A lot of good stories are ruined like that.
Hotrod198 chapter 7 . 11/28/2009
Please let my character be in your story and if you do can you please make him a regular rival of Tom's.




What he looks like: Black hair and black jacket. Brown eyes and rede shirt underneath his Jacket. Wears jeans.

Pokemon:(First appearance if he appears in more than one) Quilava Gyarados Bagon (2nd Appearance) Typhlosion Gyarados Shelgon Bellsprout Swablu (3rd Appearance(Hopefully league)) Tyhplosion Gyarados Salamence Victreebel Altaria Heracross
Shibo26 chapter 7 . 11/28/2009
I didn't review last time? thought I did...oh well -

awesome chapter...well...I liked the fight! other than that it was a little dull...but still good -
Zaru chapter 6 . 11/28/2009
Question: When si Demetri showing up?
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