Reviews for Forbidden Fruit
CTSael chapter 1 . 2/20/2012
You have very beautiful writing skills. I thought it might have been too much of a stretch to consider Zero (not being Suzaku) and Lelouch as a pairing, so I'm pleasantly surprised to have found this. And the idea of using Rien as his regular name is very fitting, both for its meaning and how it seems to match his character role. Keep writing, I'll keep reviewing!
TheOneThatIsAddictedToHPfics chapter 4 . 7/11/2010
loved it!
a2d2 chapter 1 . 4/18/2010
ok i haven't read it and i'm very curious about your story but i have to get one thing straight before i get to deep into it...

how in the world if Lelouch going to love himself?

the pairing you have is Zero and LuLu but they are the same person...i'm a little "confuzalled" here. can you help me out?
Sir Banana six-tea-phoar chapter 3 . 2/28/2010
Rien literally means 'nothing' I think. Nice chapter anyway go, Rien! Make Lelouch scream in pleasure- ahm.
Tainted Ink And Paper chapter 4 . 1/5/2010
AW... I love the conclusion of this. It's cute, it's short, it's sweet and it wraps up nicely. Gotta say, that Lelouch's character is really moe and cute and just so-Lelouchish that I just smile whenever I read his dialouge.

Zero's thoughts and descriptions are as enthralling as always. I was really feeling for him when he was having thoughts of using Geass on Lelouch. Poor guy.

All in all, a VERY sweet conclusion! I really really enjoyed it! WOW, Serena-chan. WOW! Three chapters of intense WOW.

-HUGS-
Tainted Ink And Paper chapter 3 . 1/5/2010
What a cute name for Zero! Rien! Rien! I could say it all day, I forgot that that word in French sounded so pretty _ I'm taking French again next semester. Now that I think about it, its the perfect name for Zero! I mean, how could I forget that Lelouch is a french word/name?

I am going to have another nosebleed from reading Zero being all sexy and cool in this chapter. I swear.

Lelouch is TOO cute! Asking about Zero's feelings "even though it's wrong"! KYA! -fangirl swoon-

LOVE this line "Even though it's wrong, I still do." The context in which it is thought in the story, is just... so damn beautiful. -teary eyes-

-reads on... nosebleeds some more- Zero is just... too much. Especially when he's being seductive. I feel guilty for reading on... but this is just too good.

Gotta love the last line, as always (C.C. was right. He was going to Hell.)

Serena-chan, you are a genius.
Tainted Ink And Paper chapter 2 . 1/5/2010
WOW! You updated Forbidden fruit? And there's three more chapters for me to read? Serena-chan, I'm so sorry for being late to review! (tears) On the other hand, YAY MORE UPDATES! (hugs)

(reads chapter and nosebleeds) That's really hot. Zero as Lelouch's TWIN? Kya! It's like reading/watching Ouran all over again! I LOVE YOUR FIRST LINE! I know I'm Catholic myself, but I can't help but think that yaoi fanfictions with references to sin and christianity are way sexy. In a good way. A REALLY good way. Wow, I'm messed XD

Your descriptions of Zero and his faith (or lack of faith) in God are AMAZING and enticing as ALWAYS! Man, Serena-chan, if I could write as enthralling things as you... ;D

I love the little italized lines "If you really love someone, you should keep their distance from them..." and then "I could never stay away from you"!

So cute. I'm feeling redundant from lack of other synonyms to use.

Damn, the implications of twincist. I feel so naughty... but its just so nice to read some ZeroLulu twincist! KYA!

To the next chappie...

(love the ending of this one by the way... ;D)
Spunkay Skunk chapter 4 . 12/27/2009
Well, you don’t have to explain to me the perils of a “floaty brain”. I know them all too well. And while it is kind of annoying to read only snippets at a time, I completely understand. Sometimes making things connect is a lot harder than us poor little writers realize or understand. But I am enjoying this so far, except for one thing…

Lelouch is feeling really OOC to me. I know you like him being the uke, and that’s fine, but he’s too submissive for my liking. I just feel like even though he’s the uke, he doesn’t have an uke personality, know what I mean? He blushes and stutters too much; I just think that you need toughen him up or make him snottier, that would help his portrayal come off better. To me, Zero feels more like Lelouch than Lelouch does. If that makes sense.

I hope you can get through whatever problems you’re having with Screaming Notes and anything else your noncompliant brain gives you. If it helps at all, I can give you this net (*hands it over*) to catch that flying brain of yours ;]

As always, I will be waiting for the next part
iceley11 chapter 4 . 12/24/2009
ohohoho... twincest...

i CANNOT get enough of Lelouch... and more Lelouch...

But i still want me threesome...
Lisa chapter 1 . 12/16/2009
zero is lelouch... FAIL
dhyetaX1999 chapter 3 . 12/4/2009
Whoa! it so cool!

absenting for for a few days and already, I missed the first update.

*it can't be helped I guess*

And the teasing is... acceptable I think. Well, there is a say that patient is virtue...

But where the hell is the last part of "Screaming Notes"!

it's been a WHOLE month after Halloween, and I'd thought that you have been died somewhere if not for this update...

back to this chapter... maybe it's just me but i feel calling zero not zero is just... weird..

And cuteblushingvirgin!louch is just so adorable! XD XD XD XD

I think you truly are my favorite Zero/Lulu authoress
ShadowQueen1996 chapter 3 . 12/2/2009
love it so far XD can't wait for the next one
Spunkay Skunk chapter 3 . 12/2/2009
I don't know if I'm feeling teased so much as curious. Why not post it all at once instead of wait to put up the final part? Only because you WANT to tease?

;p

The lime is good so far - it's certainly leaving me wanting more. I just have one question, is Lelouch supposed to be against this? Because he isn't fighting it very much right now ;3.
heartslogos chapter 3 . 12/2/2009
XD omg...i do believe i've been favoriting your stories for a while now, but have yet to leave a proper review...

here is my proper review

::throws self at the author's feet::

THANK YOU

XD I love this coupling all thanks to you and your awesome writing! X3 I look foward to your updates! This is so awesome

::squeal::

XD
Diana Prince chapter 3 . 12/2/2009
Ah that was cute and sweet poor Lulu he is just asking to be viloated or messed with when he is asleep. Until next time thanks for the update and the author's note yeah!
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