Reviews for Daedalus in Exile
LeeseeQ chapter 5 . 2/8/2012
As Edward enters the house after his trip to the store you mention that he removes all of his soggy clothes and the backpack as he enters the house. I'm wondering if that was maybe a mistake, because it changes the feel of this scene as he enters her room... we as the reader are imagining her seeing him naked walking into her room- not quite what you were going for maybe? Anyway, but then when she mumbling to him in her feverish state you mention she grabs his shirt, so maybe he has clothes on afterall. Nevertheless, this was a great chapter and I'm completely hooked.
LeeseeQ chapter 4 . 2/8/2012
I absolutely loved this chapter, and especially loved the line: "I was ridiculous. I was a raving, talking to comatose girls, kidnapping, clothes burning, doctor-faking fool". Love it.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 21 . 1/25/2012
Definitely a totally awesome story. More than well worth reading. It was good that Alice and Carlisle were near. They were waiting for Edward to make a decision. Hopefully the right decision. And he did make the right decision. For him and for Bella. She has wanted him from the first moment she saw him. The whole family saw her trying to find him in his possessions in the house. We don't need to read any further. In their first conversation they've let us know that they will be happy together. For forever. For eternity. Thanks for a wonderful story to read.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 20 . 1/25/2012
This was definitely the ending I thought was coming. Bella did know she was dying from the head wound she received when the van came at her. The problems had been getting progressively worse. And all Alice wanted was the vision she showed Edward in the hotel room. That Bella was meant to be a vampire. That she was his mate. He wasn't supposed to leave and kill all those women. He was supposed to fall in love with Bella and turn her. They had been obsessed with each other since the first day they met. Bella wanted the chance to find out if her obsession was real. Did she love him? Love him enough to want to become a vampire and have forever? Alice knew the time was fast approaching when Bella would die. And strange as it seems to me, I'm not as surprised as I thought I would be that Alice didn't tell Bella why she was sending her to that particular part of the wilderness. That she didn't tell her she would find Edward and he would fall in love with her. Now Bella understands what Alice was doing. And Edward understands what Alice's plan has been for the last five years. And why Alice didn't tell him about Bella's accident and what it meant. Edward needed to come to the realization on his own that it was love that kept him from killing Bella that first day. And now Bella is changing. And Edward does want her forever. Knows that it was inevitable from the beginning.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 19 . 1/25/2012
Most of the barriers are down. Bella has heard why Edward has made the markers for the women he's killed in her name. That died in her place. And now she's telling him that Alice sent her there to die.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 18 . 1/25/2012
She does remember everything now. Was it seeing Alice? Hitting her head on Edward's body? She's telling him she's desired him from the moment she saw him. That she believes he feels the same way. That his demons aren't going to matter. And her secret? Is she going to tell him she knows she's dying?
Siriusmunchkin chapter 17 . 1/25/2012
So Bella isn't pretending she has amnesia. She really doesn't have any memories of herself. Of the Cullen's, of Alice and Edward. But Alice knows she's ill. Still thinking it's a kind of brain tumor. So maybe Alice hasn't been coaching her recently. But it was her and Jasper who left Bella in the woods with a map to Edward's cabin. Though Alice has been keeping an eye on things. Alice isn't telling him anything for a valid reason. At least valid to Alice. And Edward running all those years ago just kept the inevitable from happening. Bella is supposed to be a vampire. She is Edward's mate. Leaving Bella in the woods to find Edward's cabin. To make him see that they belonged together. To tell him she is dying and wants him to realize he loves her and wants her. Maybe, maybe not.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 16 . 1/25/2012
Pushing even harder. Trying to make him see it doesn't matter that he's a vampire. That he considers himself soulless and a monster. That he's drained humans of their blood and life. But, she has never pushed him to say why he refuses to go outside in the sunlight. Because she already knows why. She is trying to push him to believe in love. To believe in him. In them. To admit that he killed others so he wouldn't kill her. But trying to kill the idea of her. She's telling him she does remember the day they met. The day he wanted to kill her. She is trying to show him she is his mate. That Alice has seen they are mates and are meant to be happy for eternity. She is making him think. He is starting to question what is happening. Where it will lead is anyone's guess. Happiness forever. Or death for Bella.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 15 . 1/25/2012
Pushing and pushing. Bella knows she's dying. She is trying, with Alice's help, to convince Edward he is in love with her. Because she's been in love with him since the day she saw him. And she can see that his reactions are changing. He's beoming more responsive to her. He's falling in love. Everything she has been saying keeps leading me to this conclusion. Could very possibly be very wrong. But it feels right.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 14 . 1/25/2012
Alice left to see Bella as soon as Edward made the decision to go and confront Carlisle. She and Jasper have to have been keeping an eye on Bella to make sure Edward didn't kill her. Though if I'm right and she is terminal because of the brain trauma that will become a moot point. Alice is sure that Edward will realize he's in love and change her when he finds out. Carlisle and Jasper are supporting her vision. It had to be Alice and Jasper who brought her to the woods and gave her the map that would lead to Edward's cabin. Was she really lost and confused? Has she been having the memory problems and that's how they found the medical problem? And why is she waiting in his room? She said she wasn't sure he would return but she decided to wait anyway. Did Edward catch that? Is he wondering if the family is waiting just far enough away to rescue her? She's saying she might just have been suicidal. She crawls into Edward's lap. Something she has never done before. She is really starting to push him to make a decision about falling in love with her. She's loved him from the first time she saw him. She knows he's a vampire. He just doesn't know she knows.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 13 . 1/25/2012
Curiouser and curiouser. Bella was telling him to kill her. Or turn her. Alice and Jasper moved her out of the dorm when she left school. Because she was ill. It has something to do with the van and hitting her head. Did they find a brain tumor? Is the doctor's office where Edward got the records really Carlisle's office? Or a friend who agreed to help him get Bella's records to Edward? Were Alice and Jasper near her in the woods when she was almost attacked by the mountain lion? Did they bring her there so Edward would find her? So he would realize he was in love with her and wouldn't kill her? So he would turn her when he found out she was going to die anyway? Is that what Carlisle is telling him? That he needs to go back to Bella and turn her to a vampire? That that is what she's wanted since she saw him in the cafeteria? Since he almost killed her in Biology? To only be with him for eternity?
Siriusmunchkin chapter 12 . 1/25/2012
Bella is starting to ask a lot more intrusive questions. Gauging how far he's willing to answer. Questions that most people probably wouldn't ask. Pushing a little more each tiime. Carlisle's call was just a little too coincidental on his trip home. Was Alice near enough to the cabin to talk with Bella and wanted to make sure they had the time they needed to talk? Is that why she was outside? Alice would be smart enough not to have her scent too near the cabin. Make sure it was away from an area he usually went. Edward now knows what happened to Bella. And Bella lets him know it was Alice who rescued her. But what are the records not telling him? Sounds like the Cullen's are living near to where Edward is. Bella is testing the waters to see if Edward is going to be willing to let her leave. Has Alice and/or Carlisle told her that once she found Edward he might not be willing to let her go? Is Alice counting on this to make Edward see Bella is meant for him? That they are soulmates?
MoCullen chapter 21 . 1/25/2012
Wow! So dark and interesting. I'm glad you ended it where you did. It was a perfect ending.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 11 . 1/25/2012
More info. Some of the situations from the Saga happened. It just wasn't Edward who was there to save her. So does Bella know that the Cullen's are vampires? Does she know that Alice can see the future? What kind of coaching has the family done to prepare Bella for meeting Edward again? 'Cause it is starting to look like that may have happened. Maybe. What will Bella's medical records reveal to him? Is there going to be a message from Carlisle in there? And what is Edward going to do when Carlisle shows up for his monthly visit? Betting Carlisle knows, or suspects, that Bella is trying to find Edward. And that just maybe he already has and is still trying to decide what to do about her. Because Edward is very conflicted at this point. Also betting Alice and Jasper aren't that far away and are keeping an eye on what's happening in the cabin.
Siriusmunchkin chapter 10 . 1/25/2012
A crisis averted for a time. He may have stopped himself from drinking Bella dry, but he did intentionally go out and find a human to drink from. He originally meant to kill the man, but luckily the thoughts and memories he saw in the man's mind stopped him. A step in the right direction. Freudian slip when he told her his 'real' name? And what is she telling him by letting him know the name Cullen is familiar? That her memories may just include his family? That she is going to make him work for the answers he wants? Alice may have told her he could read minds. But did Alice know he couldn't read Bella's? She is afraid and cautious. Which is more prevalent?
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