Reviews for Traitorous
Luckyreader2000 chapter 20 . 6/30
Freaking awesome
Dante Nastaran chapter 20 . 8/26/2012
i really like this story. its very different from everything else I've read so far (& thats a lot). Please update soon.
FreyrFnk chapter 20 . 11/12/2011
Interesting idea...

It'd be cool to see this continued, it has a lot of promise and I'm diggin' the 'insane, assassin i'll-fuck-you-up' Shikamaru 83

It would be... interesting for he and Genma to run into people that recognize him. Asuma, Choji, Ino... just other people that would probably burst a vein at the difference xD

Maybe a little more dramatic 83

although that would probably end badly... I could see Naruto stirring up a scene and punching those buttons that set off the insanity for both Shikamaru and Genma xD


Interesting writing style, I like the run of words shoved together and the disjointed pattern for thoughts etc. It fits. Very much so.
ylfrettub chapter 20 . 4/22/2011
The chapter wasn't that crappy. Everyone has those days.
ylfrettub chapter 17 . 4/22/2011
i actually liked this chapter about Team 4. The number clicks with them. It just does.
ylfrettub chapter 9 . 4/22/2011
It's weird...I was thinking of something and then "Ranmaru" popped in my head...Five seconds later, i read it as Shikamaru's new name...

I like this so far.
Maerchen Freunde chapter 19 . 6/4/2010
Good chapter. As always, you have a way with words that is darkly poetic. Looking forward to the next update. M
Everdark61 chapter 18 . 4/23/2010
This story is great, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
Lils chapter 18 . 4/11/2010
Hey, yeah, a new chapter. Took you so long to update that in the meantime I graduated from university, harhar. I'm happy that you continue to write. That was a nice chapter, though I wonder if Aobas treatment will entail some diplomatic consequences. And when I remember correctly his teammate died a 'natural' death, so they can't be prosecuted for that. Hm... Ok, what will happen next? If you mind, don't wait 3 months again, this will only be fair to your readers. ;P
WillowCarol chapter 18 . 4/6/2010
Yes YES! you live i'm so happy i had fallen in love with this story all the way back to chap one and to see a chap 18 makes me so happy i want to know what shikamaru wanted to talk to Raidou about , can't wait for the new chap !
Maerchen Freunde chapter 18 . 4/6/2010
As usual, there is a nice rhythm to your writing. I really enjoy reading the internal dialog. Very clever. Looking forward to your next update. M
lisa chapter 17 . 4/2/2010
a very intriguing story! i like the totally foreign (to konoha) look at shinobi. great imagination. thank you
Lils chapter 17 . 2/21/2010
A bit late (again) but still alive and trying to type a something like a proper review. This time I did not get swept up in the story-flow as usual, might be because I was missing Gen and Shika? ;) Or I was just too jittery while reading (which must be the main cause and I should apologise a bit because it was surely a piece of work for you to write this and I was too nervous to concentrate much while reading... Gomen). But the last sentences draw my attetion and left my wondering what Genma will do.

Still I think it's not too logic to go back to Konoha in their position, but hey, it's your story and as long as you continue to write it as convincing as before, it's all good.

Ibiki grinning... might be the reason for my nightmares lately... ;P

Best wishes,

Maerchen Freunde chapter 17 . 1/11/2010
I think I like this better than you do, although the misspellings kind of get in the way. As usual, there is a very nice rhythm to your writing. Finally, a little back story!
WillowCarol chapter 6 . 1/2/2010
hello! i love your story soo much the idea of a canzy shikamaru and a canzy genma is so cool but new, i hope you update chap 17 very soon i can't wait to read more and if the other kids will fine out shikamaru is in the village
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