Reviews for HSM4 |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This story seemed decent, and I got half way through. However I feel the characters are really out of character. The mental/emotional maturity of the characters remind me of elementary/middle school despite their supposed age. Your writing is structured well enough to be read but the plots and characters need work. The biggest issues I see are Gabriella crying like an over emotional child, and Troy going over the top regarding affection and reacting to others insulting/harming Gabriella. Hope this can hell you improve. Good luck! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Aren't they a little...young? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I can't stand Tiara -.- Such a bitch -.- |
![]() ![]() ![]() hate Tiara so so much! but good chapther |
![]() ![]() ![]() still soo cute. |
![]() ![]() ![]() aww so cute :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love your ideas, but you place them into run-ons. As a helpful suggestion try smaller sentences with more detail. |
![]() ![]() ![]() dude awsome |
![]() ![]() ![]() that was cute and interesting especially with tiara and that lady at the pool. |
![]() ![]() ![]() that was good. gonna read sequel now. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() loved it |
![]() ![]() ![]() loved totally, it was really cool and just so you know the final chapter was lovely and something i never expected to see about jimmy and tiara. cya soon kro |