Great story but 84? that's not old at all. maybe make him older or take the age right out.

Here's my 2 cents. I like a lot of things about this story. You are obviously a good writer with a strong vocabulary and excellent grasp of language and dialogue. You also present some very interesting moral quandaries and thought provoking ideas throughought this fic. But goodness, the loooong dialogues and conversations really make it difficult to get through sometimes. Obviously some of the dialogue is super important and needs to be there but a LOT of it just reads like pointless fluff.

Hi. I'm pretty sure I read this tory back in 2008 before I had an account. I'm looking forward to reading it again as from what I can remember I really enjoyed it.

you are actually so good at the "old sword in act 2" thing where you introduce something that becomes Very relevant later. Even if its all been planned out beforehand by you, it makes the story Super engaging with everything being important

Thanks for a great read!
BTW, not sure if you're still around, or even receiving these, but a couple folks had noted that your blog no longer is, at least at the previously given links.

Little Whinging is erm... little. It's not a city, nor even a town, more of a village or suburb of greater London. Indeed the author describes it as just a few shops, bank, police station, and library. City? I don't think so.

The writing is good but this is a very slow start with too much dull routine. However, there are good passages in it and some potential.

A suitable punishment for Kreacher might be a large plaque on the wall stating, 'This memorial marks the end of the Noble House of Black brought about by the house elf Kreacher who betrayed and helped bring about the murder of his master, Sirius Black and so ended the Black lineage. The name of Kreacher will live in infamy forever as the worst of house elves.

- Hip

Well, I’ve finished this story. I’m just curious enough to try the sequel, but at the same time I’m itching to go looking for a different story.

Gosh, no wonder it feels so slow paced, I had forgotten it’s over 400k words. I’m still trying to decide if I want to keep going with it. It’s just not keeping me gripped to the edge of my seat right now.

Well, I was really only reading this to pass the time and I feel as if I’ve been reading this for a week, when this is really day two for me. I’ve enjoyed parts of it. I started rooting for a Hansy pairing, even though I felt that friendship escalated a tad too quickly. Right now I still can’t tell you if I genuinely like the entire story or not. I do like aspects of it, like how powerful Harry is, him being a professor is interesting, and I like the shield he created. I don’t like how slow it feels this story is going, it has taken entirely too long to get to the Christmas break. It’s a toss up right now as to if I’ll keep on reading it because there is a sequel and if the sequel is as slow paced as this one is, I’m not sure I can look forward to it. I’m not saying I’m giving up right now, but I’m really thinking about it.

I really appreciate how fully fledged your ff is. and the emotional maturity I'm encountering and imbibing by reading. I hope to come back and reread this over and over again to be blessed.

so far, it's an okay fic, but something about it just feels... off? i can't keep reading. also, i think the conflict should be introduced around the middle or end of the 1st chapter. the conflict doesn't arise and you've lost my interest. sorry

Good chapter.

IT is so refreshing to read a story where Dumbledore is NOT seen as a manipulative bad guy who steals from Harry. That is just so overdone, so well done on that. It's one of the many reasons I like this story. I also really like the way you wrote Harry here. He's more reasonable and less of a hothead. You did a really good job with this story and I genuinely enjoyed it. Well done.

Unfortunately I'm gonna have to stop at chapter 15. While the technical aspects of your fanfic is very good, I find myself getting bogged down in the unneeded repetition of exposition dialogue. Not EVERY action or thought needs to be explained through lengthy dialogue. The effect is making every character, apart from Malfoy, the same super mature and observant character. As such, I find myself reading about an action and then skipping past the next 10 paragraphs of a character explaining the action.

I see this is one of three stories. I'll move on to the second one and see if this has been improved.

lied a little but, its all too much. The repeated conversation just keeps going and won't stop. The enormous amount of publicity regarding dreams is odd.