Reviews for No Such Thing as Stability
Amako-sama chapter 20 . 5/18/2016
Your story is incredible. The way you portrayed them, how realistic everything seems and in-character! I can't even explain it. It's a masterpiece!
Amako-sama chapter 7 . 5/17/2016
I'm enjoying it more and more. They're really mature and responsible, I really like them!
Amako-sama chapter 1 . 5/17/2016
I only started but your fic already seems like the amazing type. You handle the characters perfectly and I really believe in what I'm reading :)
Morbid Humour chapter 12 . 5/29/2015
Mai is pregnant isn't she?
Morbid Humour chapter 10 . 5/29/2015
My goodness, everything started so... So, bright and it seemed happy enough. But now, things are getting intense, difficult for Zuko and Sokka.
Still, can't make time for a well thought out comment/review but, eh. That's what happens when a story is captivating.

And also TOOOPH! 3 33
Morbid Humour chapter 6 . 5/27/2015
... O.O
No... He... He can't be... Dead. There are fourteen more chapters, Zuko is fine I'm sure. You can't kill a main character only, not even, halfway through the story.
Morbid Humour chapter 3 . 5/27/2015
That was great, but I'm afraid I'm going to get in to the next few chapters that I may not reply, well review I mean.
Either way, I think their personalities are grand. C: And I love the progression of the story.
Morbid Humour chapter 2 . 5/27/2015
Awe! What a pleasant way to end a chapter.
Honestly, I'm loving this story.
Though, I'm not sure if it's because the latest story I've read was most unsatisfying, or is it just this story is well written. Either way, I'm adoring it. 3
Sokka is a mess as always. xD And Zuzu is sad and depressed... .
Anyway, wonderful.
Morbid Humour chapter 1 . 5/27/2015
See this is the kind of story telling I look for, something I can make an honest opinion on.
For me some stories don't quite deserve a single praise, but this, this does, and it does for every chapter most likely.
Something about the simple, heartwarming ease of this story is so well done, I believe it honestly deserves every praise it may get.
DestinyHoldsYou4ever chapter 20 . 5/8/2015
All I can say is... HOLLLLY SHIIIIIIT

PFFFFFT and this is your FIRST fanfic that you've ever written? Lemme tell ya this honey, it was bloody fantastic! I enjoyed it immensely.

;)

Also the smut was uh... Fun. heheh
greening chapter 8 . 7/14/2014
Careful with punctuation. You're leaving out every comma that goes before the word "but" between two semi-sentences, such as "[...] to get an unconscious moan out of the young man but he hadn't pushed it."
There should be a comma after "man" to indicate a very brief pause.

Another thing that I noticed was the following sentence "[...] his voice had wavered with vulnerability and Sokka thought, hope." There should be a comma after the "and"; try to say the sentence out loud, you will notice that your voice goes slightly upwards at the "and". I can't explain the grammatical rules here without an essay-long paragraph, but this is how it's written.

"The warmth in the pit of his belly, that had never quite disappeared since the day he had started staying with Zuko, began to overheat as he thought [...]". It's funny, but this particular seance doesn't permit any commas. Maybe not so much for the first one (it's not outright 'wrong' to put one there, albeit unusual), but the second one is definitely unneeded.

All in all the story is very neatly written up until now. You kept it realistic, and you did a good job building up the sexual tension between the two. However, I think that in this particular chapter you went a bit overboard. I suppose the sex scene is nice to read for people who are into it, but for me it just seemed out of place. After almost being killed I believe Zuko would have other things in mind than sex.
Likewise, I think the guards would be all up and about, and I expected the chapter - the aftermath, essentially - to be more hectic and the guards to flock around their protégé like ants around their queen.
I do know that this is fanfiction and I'm guessing the main point of this story is their relationship, though.

What I also noticed is that you're doing a good job at showing. Sometimes you slip back to telling and there are whole paragraphs describing events rather than letting the reader experience it themselves, but all in all I had a clear image of what was going on, and I had no trouble picturing it in my head (maybe the sex threw me off a little because I'm really not good with lemons though).

Well, I hope my review helped a little. Maybe there was something new coming from a reader who isn't here for slash porn, but is reading your story out of genuine interest for the plot and character development. I also liked the mature approach you chose to portray each character and situation, and I hope you keep up your good work!

Cheers,
G
Greening chapter 2 . 7/13/2014
Hi!
Good story so far, but I noticed one thing: brunette brown-haired woman; brunet brown-haired man (or woman, it's more gender-neutral than its counterpart, but usually brunet refers to men).

Keep it up!

G
Pandas01 chapter 20 . 3/16/2014
Wow this story was great! I was not expecting that ending but I really like how things turned out! Great story! :D
shyd1 chapter 20 . 8/26/2013
So sweet! And hot!
What a great story!
Nemo chapter 20 . 6/3/2013
Wow. what can I say. I know this was written 3 years ago, but I read it now and I just felt this overwhelming need to leave a comment since this was so good. Your building of the plot and characters was awesome - you did a great job overall. I loved that this wasn't just romance, and that it wasn't cliche - the heartaching moments made this story so much better. I really feared the ending- I wasn't sure how this was going to work, Zuko leaving Mai for Sokka seemed too out of character but his solution is wonderful. I don't agree with some of the other comments, this doesn't feel like Sokka is second best or a concubine, I wouldn't even call it bittersweet - it just seems so fitting(though you really had me downright sad at some parts...your'e talented). Thanks for sharing this awesome story!
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