Reviews for Happy Together
Tomboy564 chapter 1 . 7/15
It was so funny when tenten was singing I could amagine her singing, so great story.
BlackBrightField2007 chapter 1 . 7/31/2012
awwwww cute! loving very words of it!
Christina-Vien chapter 1 . 5/31/2012
hey i really like this story.. Im from Philippines aswell and now i live in New Zealand lol...
Sylwia Kiley chapter 1 . 10/16/2010
awww sooo sweet! kawaii!
ansonozaki chapter 1 . 11/4/2009
so cute!
shinhyunae chapter 1 . 10/14/2009
The story was pretty good.

Based on my own experience of writing, you should also be careful with tense switches. If you've written something in the past, keep it that way.

"It 'was' a nice Saturday morning. The birds 'are' chirping..."

'was' and 'are' are both from different tenses.

Careful with that stuff 'cause I know they're quite confusing.

I like the story. Keep it up. I know you'll improve. Just continue writing and it will eventually be better. Don't worry, you're not the only one who still needs to improve. I suck at own stories but I don't let them get to me...p

.WinterViolet.
HeavenlySwirl chapter 1 . 10/14/2009
The ending was kind of a "crap", kind of, I repeat. It was nice, her weirdness impressed me. Good job! -
depressed.retard chapter 1 . 9/27/2009
oh okay Miki... have any ways on how I can improve?
Miki chapter 1 . 9/27/2009
Yes the ending was crap
chay chapter 1 . 9/27/2009
wahahaha ..

it's nice!

s0o cute :D

the ending is

good ..

make m0re st0ries!

:)

hehe ..

i think u already

kn0w hu am i ..

hahaha ..

keep up the g0od w0rk

'ate'

wahahahha ..

_ - (: claire :) - _
mehj chapter 1 . 9/25/2009
The ending wasn't crap!

The story's very cute hahaha, i love tenten's weirdness

so happy together~! XD
xchirix chapter 1 . 9/25/2009
Lol. Now they're chasing each other...

Next time..they are going to chase the little Hyuuga..

AWW...SO KAWAII!

The ending was ok..not crap!

AWESOME! (_)

-Chirisaa Tomoko-xoxo
MidnightSocrates chapter 1 . 9/24/2009
Aw! I loved it! The ending was cute, really enjoyed reading it. Good job!
LCH8292 chapter 1 . 9/23/2009
Aw cute. I love that song by the way. I think that's a perfectly good way to begin a story. _