|Reviews for The Legend of Zelda: Exoria|
| clonco chapter 30 . 11/20/2013
wow! i just read near 400,000 words in about 2 days. it would be bad taste not to leave a review, especially for such stunning, engaging novel like this. reel me in 'cause i'm hook, line and sinker for this fic. you'll have to forgive me since i'm no good at reviews but i really wanna highlight what i love about this so here goes!
admittedly, i was skeptical at first since modern zelda aus had the tendency to be a bit naff and, otherwise, as the second chapter loomed in i was worried it might wander into phantom menace styled politics (if you forgive, or can even go along with, that poor metaphor!).
i really was surprised though. not only was there a solid foundation for link zelda's relationship that made me just giddy but there was hella lovely political dialogue to ease in with as well, including lovely exposition for the layman nicely snuck in. this alongside intriguing original characters (like lenore and now emi, jessica and ESPECIALLY steve, juno and alexandria) has me rolling about in joy and interest just all over the floor. i'm sorry for these gross exaggerations but you're going to have to put up with them!
i want to highlight the characters especially since i enjoy them, even though they feel a little controversial! after all, i think you've responded to people before bringing up the lack of canon character appearances and you have your own reasons for that - something that would make sense further the story progresses i get too - and at any rate i congratulate your cool as heck original creations. especially in a world that functions on intrigue and suspicion - everyone's got a double motive and all - you manage to make them sympathetic, compelling and not absurdly irrational and thoughtless in their moments. even with a ruthless characters they have calculations and aims which makes it understandable why they tick it's GREAT.
i shouldn't skimp on complimenting your handling of the canon characters either! link, zelda, impa and ganon have all had my thumbs up. i really wanna talk about zelda! zelda's been so intelligent, so fascinating, so captivating that quite honestly i'm swooning. as the fic has continued on it's a shame we haven't seen as much of her in the more recent chapters. impa's been stunning as well though! especially her relationship with lenore - respectful but still cautious, i think i'm head over heels a great working relationship between two rocking lady characters and i'm lovin' it!
i can't go on without not talking about link either! i like how he's portrayed as a - mostly - silent protagonist. it suits him and is definitely not as jarring as i'd thought it'd be! and his background established in this fic is pretty delicious which brings me onto my next point.
I LIKE YOUR ESTABLISHMENT OF THE SUBTLE MYTHOLOGY OF THE SERIES DUDE! it's gr8! i'm really fascinated to see how that keeps up and how much you'll incorporate it and how you'll incorporate it. and even if you will because the original concepts you've been bringing in have been brill anyway! i definitely enjoy what i think are playful references with the original material ahhhh it's fun!
especially as you keep the very structure of the legend of zelda games together - stage, sometimes mini boss, boss, well established goals, you know the drill!
and in terms of the latest chapter 30 wow alexandria, juno and steve have delighted me! i've been fascinated by valent's military - they're effective but, ultimately, non-cooperative among themselves which has been their major downfall. that's what makes their parts so inviting and it's very interesting how you follow their different styles, even poor steve's (who shall not be with us any more, RIP STEVE AT LEAST I LOVED YOU MATE)
i don't really know what else i wanna cover - sorry if this has just been a stream of bizarre metaphors and not exactly constructive praise. i'd have to read it over a second time, strapping on my constructive criticism goggles, before i could give any suggestions of solid use to you. only a few things strike me right now such as the fact that maybe the narrative is struggling a bit without so much screen time on link and zelda in the recent chapters. but i'm sorry, i'm just a positive person and i have a lot of positive feelings about this writing!
forgive me for saying aside from that, i noticed you haven't updated in a while but i can see why you've been caught up. your a/n notes you have a really busy life and aside from that i searched around and found that writer's block has been an issue for you on this fic as well. whatever happens, though, i just want to say i've super enjoyed what you've put up and, more importantly, i hope you're doing good with whatever you're up to at the moment! even if it's still getting over the lacklustre, damning mass effect 3 ending still (i wouldn't blame you, i too still suffer some unfortunate memories)
good luck with things and hope to see you update if you're up for it!
p.s. i want to marry jessica intensely i really do i really do. would that be okay? i was worried she might function as a honey trap (i feel like there's a better phrase or trope to describe it but i'm coming up blank now) but i can't resist her, she's sweet and that's damning for her where she is right now. HOW DELICIOUS! thank you
| Wallywoz chapter 30 . 11/16/2013
Great story I've saw it a couple years ago & hope you can finish it very well done. I've wondered if any of Hyrules comon animals/monsters are still around or wipped out be interesting to see them against modern Hylians (readers are picky lol) but either way its great.
| Burnished Angel chapter 20 . 9/29/2013
I approve of your killing off Lily and Buddy. This isn't because I'm some sort of sadist, but simply put, I saw no way they could get out alive.
| MissGardenia chapter 30 . 7/24/2013
Well Juno, I do believe you have crossed what is colloquially known as the Moral Event Horizon. And since it's not like I was rooting for you to begin with, I hope Alexandria survives that and ventilates you severely. :3
Alternatively, the someone important finds out and it turns out Steven was quite a bit more highly placed than was indicated...
| MissGardenia chapter 11 . 7/22/2013
So, reading this chapter brought to mind a completely off base random conspiracy theory that I cannot but help to share:
This is secretly a Mass Effect crossover.
No, really, hear me out. ;)
Right, so the planet probably just barely has spaceflight, putting them over the harvesting threshold, but they're still really primitive. The Reaper War isn't going well for Reasons and the Reaper tasked to do the harvest here instead wants to try it on the cheap. So, it Indoctrinates the leaders of Valent, gives them a minor tech boost, then has them wardec everyone else. Then, they make sure not to kill the civilians, ship them back to Valent, where they either end up indoctrinated also or, more likely, sent to processing camps.
Indoctrination also explains why their initial offenses went so smoothly, since they manufactured the traitors they needed!
| anonffrdr chapter 30 . 6/30/2013
Just finished my second read of this story and it's still as great as I remembered. This level of detail and planning is not often seen in fanfiction and makes for an enjoyable read. The military action is exciting and the political intrigue keeps me in suspense. Link's struggles after essentially becoming a known commodity due to his success destroying Anansi is refreshing and contributes to the overall realism in the story.
I hope the review count hasn't discouraged you or contributed to your writer's block. I've read lots of fanfiction over the years and this is on my shortlist of masterpieces. Looking forward to more!
| MidKnight chapter 5 . 6/7/2013
First, I have to say that this is the first time I have left a review on this site. The lack of reviews for the excellent story is appalling. I am only on chapter 4 ,and I have to say that this is one of the highest quality stories I have ever read. Continue on brave soul and never get discouraged. Your unique perspective gives everything you write its own soul. I look forward to catching up and all your future stories.
| KingKillerq chapter 1 . 5/6/2013
Hm... Going to read more before forming anything beyond its well-written-ness and how everyone seems to be in character.
| The Original Navar chapter 30 . 5/4/2013
Wow this whole thing...
| ShadowHunter chapter 30 . 3/18/2013
i believe some of the Valentine story perspectives could be left out, due to the fact that most people, that i know, tend to want to read more about Link and Zelda, and less about all of the other stuff, specifically enemy movement cause i know personally, it seems like kind of a cheat, cause we don't get the suspense of trying to figure out what the enemy is doing, plus, from a fanfiction readers standpoint, all of the surrounding, erroneous details are a little bit excessive, but other than that, an over-all really well-written fanfiction. Are you an English Major perchance?
| xXShadowHunterXx chapter 23 . 3/7/2013
Maybe shorten the authors notes at the end of the chapters, and the extra information, since i have not read them at all, and am just skipping right past them, and i am guessing that everyone else is as well, but other than that, GREAT job!
| delax chapter 30 . 2/18/2013
Yet another person here from TV Tropes fanfic recs.
I need to remember to add my name to the list on there, because this is glorious.
Took a week, but I am finally caught up to await the continuation like many others.
Unsure why I seem to mainly wait until the end of a story (or what's been written so far), probably to gather a fully fleshed feeling for the story and the motivations of the characters within.
Not from laziness.
This is a terrible idea with a epic like Exoria, I have forgotten most details from all but the last read chapter or two...
Though I must agree with your assessment, that April Fool's chapter was... odd.
Anyway, I must say Steven has had a rough time in this story.
Left in the dust by more experienced coworkers, he finally found his stride only to get left in the dust once again.
By which I mean killed by a giant boomerang.
My mastery of metaphors aside, I wonder how Zorans will take what Juno did.
They rather hate humans, so gunning down sympathizers and losing your main tie to them is a bad thing (if nothing else, you now have less sympathizers).
But we have no clue why there are zoran sympathizers for either side yet, so the zorans may bring their fanatic view to bear and say it was worth it for the cause (whatever that turns out to be).
This is all moot if the zorans don't know their people were gunned down, as many ran off and I doubt there would be survivors.
Though interruption of the zoran council is unlikely to have earned any brownie points.
Nearly every chapter has had some mistakes in spelling and such, but few enough that I could ignore it.
They were typos, not lack of language competence, comprehension continued undeterred.
Plus, by the time I reach the end of the chapter, I would forget.
Looking forward to the next exciting installment of Exoria, wonder when Epona gets to shine some more.
| Topaz Tsubasa chapter 30 . 1/4/2013
Aaaagh, this is really really good! I am in so much trouble over this, you have no idea. Whenever I read something, I HAVE to finish it then and there. Obviously, such a thing wasn't going to happen with a story this huge...so I took to reading it during school. And on the bus. And in my room for hours on end. Only to find that it's not complete!
Ah, the trials of an obsessive reader...
Seriously, though. I am so glad for TVTropes, because I wouldn't have found this otherwise. Exoria blew my mind so much, I literally can't say it in words. Have you ever had such a huge bundle of feelings and thoughts and impressions that you were just incapable of truly expressing yourself? So you sit there and you rage, and you try to pinpoint at least *one* thing, but you can't even do that? That's me right now. Took me a while just to get that down.
But I do have ONE thing that comes to mind, that I believe is so prevalent I honestly couldn't miss it if it was a mile away: Link is BADA$$. Link is so flippin BA, I almost can't take it.
Missy, you and your writing have messed me up! ...And I wouldn't have it any other way. Fave'd!
| Emolsifier chapter 30 . 12/31/2012
Sudentor, It is with great pleasure that I write this review. It isn't very often I find a fanfic of such depth. Depth at this point may well be an understatement as the amount of detail you employ is fathoms deeper than a number of published novels on the market. The world you've painted for us readers is sumptous and full of new life.
It's thoroughly refreshing to see a story stand on it's own two feet without relying on it's source material like a crutch. At this point all you'd need to do is extract the nintendo owned trademarks and you could submit this to be published as your own intellectual material. You can not say that about a great many other Fanfictions!
I like that you use history to back up the development of your world. It's really neat that said history also flavors the world and shows us that it's still a Zelda title at heart. By that I mean the profound subtle grittiness found in Zelda. Zelda's always had this smooth layer of style to it that's only slightly covering the scary stuff it has going on. I love that this fic remembers that side of Zelda, the side that has the hero up to his nostrils in trials and tribulations that make the journey difficult to continue further!
By this I mean the insane level of difficulty Link goes through. I like that the second operation is going just about as well as a tank conducting a naval operation. Other Fanfics don't highlight that Link's exploits are hard. They breeze through them or describe them in ways that are over the top in an attempt to make things cool. You've written action scenes intelligently. Chase scenes are better than brawl scenes. Ambushes are chaotic for the reader to understand and thus gives us an immediate "what's going on?!" that correlates to link also going "What's going on?!" You introduce the assailants by demonstrating that they aren't screwing around. You did this masterfully with the Mercenaries ambush.
I really enjoy the mystery in your Fanfic. It really is mysterious what's going on. Every chapter we seem to receive more questions about this world. I'm sort of wondering when we'll encounter a Lizalfos or Helmasaur! I keep wondering to myself what Zelda Mechanics still work in this Exoria world. I keep fantasizing what sort of tools Link will have. I freaking love this multifaceted mystery!
What really impresses me about all this are the characters! Everyone's an individual I want to root for... except Juno who makes me cringe because of how vile I find her. It's still cool, I like having someone to loathe. The mercenaries were so cool and their backstories are so heartfelt and sad. Alex was so cool, I did not even foresee that she'd be engaging link in combat! I loved that fight, great to develop Link's ever growing list of problems and to show that Link's far from the best swordsman in exoria.
Y'know I also like that you're using the source material very well. Zelda's magic? Triforce of wisdom, which is all about intelligence and information and the control of those things. It's neat that you've made her triforce a shaper of data. This also leads me to other thoughts. Valentine's power sources. Maybe King Tacticus has the Triforce of power and has the control over power and might. Maybe he used that triforce to gain the insight required to develop weaponry to have military might. That's what I'm thinking.
That's another thing I adore about this fic. A lot of the Zelda Lore is up in the air. Nothing is as it is in the games. Heck I don't even know which continuity we're in right now. But I did figure out a bit about your A.S.R Date System. It must mean something along the lines of After Swine's Reign or After Swords Return or After Soverigns Return.
I came to this conclusion based on your own words. You said that historical records haven't survived because of what ASR stands for. You also said that Exoria is set long after Zelda Canon to adapt and recover. I paraphrased but there are a scant few things in history that destroyed historical records: Revolutions (The Chinese Communist revolution), Scorched Earth operations (Troy), and natural disasters (library of alexandria, Harrappan Civilization). Based on your own words and what I know of canon (all 16 games) I deduced that the only event that could wipe the slate clean would be Ganondorfs takeover of Hyrule and the resultant dystopia. Revolution that destroyed culture, Scorched Earth Operation that leveled Hyrule Castle and razed castle town, and Natural disasters which pretty much covers any other issues Hyrule had during his reign.
I can't wait to see the next chapter.
| b0mb3r chapter 30 . 12/26/2012
After 21 hours of devouring this fic you gain yourself a new fan. I just want to say I’ve been a fanfic reader since 2004 pilfering any love hina fanfic after the anime was over. This story epicness has finally warranted me to write my 1st review ever so kudos to you. Unfortunately this isn’t as much as a review because I cannot critique you writing due to my own poor English grammar. All I can say is that your writing reminds me of Eric Nylund (whom I was able to meet!) when it comes to his military prose, not to say you don’t have your own voice. I found it not surprising when I found out you’re a big halo novel fan as I am except the forerunner saga in my opinion has been disappointing. Eric is thy one who expanded the Halo lore that is today. All I can say is keep writing to find the voice you feel accomplish in and submit your work when ready.
Now I want to bring up a personal topic that has often bugged me; creatures/monsters. You’ve done a wonderful job keeping a healthy balance between the Zelda lore (swords, magic, a familiar, boomerang, Epona) and modern military (guns, clandestine operations, geopolitics, technology, etc) but where are the monsters? I understand the superweapons are kind of a modern metaphorical visage of following the Zelda bosses and that the enemies has to be human since it is a modern setting but I feel disturb for the lack of creatures. If our human history follows their history then our technology has driven back natural habitats of our fellow non-human beings which are one of my assumptions. There is one issue with this thought; the creatures are massive. A lot of Zelda monsters are a great deal bigger than our animal kingdom whose food consumption must be drastically higher to be maintained. I dare say if all previous Zelda games are in a sort of prehistoric period where a lot of monsters are human to dinosaur size. The other assumptions I have for this disappearance of our fellow enemies would be the mystery behind the “a.s.r.”
If I can advise you to add one thing to your fantastic lore it would be the usage of military animals. I imagine if the Valent can construct superweapons then they can construct mind-controlling collars of our Zelda enemies. Yes it would be tougher on poor Link having all those creatures attacking him but somehow I think it can still work. If I recall you have played CoD4: Modern Warfare so there were German Shepherds you had to stab. Thank you for not giving up on this project and wish you hope on your endeavor.
P.S. When you mention your military conscription the first country that came to mind is South Korea because I often read webtoons mentioning it. If you are a South Korean how did you write English very well? Then again I met a lot of foreigners/non-Americans who speak and write with more profession than I could. Just out of curiosity.