Reviews for Lovely Ashes
Maggie Wilde chapter 26 . 5/30
Me: *explodes* Wow is it hot in here or what? I read this story ages ago and really enjoyed it, so naturally I was delighted to see you updated. This is definitely one of the better, well-written pieces on this site Tom/OC wise (and I've read a LOT). I love your interpretation of Tom - somewhat reserved, cold, distant but charming when he has to be. I would've liked to see him more involved with his followers - at this stage he definitely would have a group by now but in this story he seems somewhat distant from them. However I've read other stories where he commands them like he's Voldemort already which doesn't seem very likely. I also really like the fact that Audrey adores Dumbledore (there's a fair amount of Dumbledore bashing on this site which baffles me). Dumbledore's not so suspicious of Tom that he's at the point of being ridiculously harsh (another trope) nor is Tom stupid enough to showcase his dark side to him. Tom is quietly, almost modestly powerful and that's exactly how I would imagine he'd be at school. Audrey is certainly a stand-out OC, which I love. I love the fact she's big-mouthed, a great Quidditch player, courageous and stands up for herself. However, I find the reasons why Dumbledore/Snape has sent her back in time a little farcical. Why are they doing this and how does it tie in with canon? Are you altering the canon? (maybe I missed something?) Secondly, choosing her as someone to undertake this very important task seems...unlikely? She's not someone who thinks about her actions before she says or does things and isn't very logical. Everyone doesn't have to reflect the qualities of their houses, but I'm struggling to understand why she's in Ravenclaw! She's definitely got qualities such as resilience and bravery which is handy. I also really like her name. Audrey Lovecraft/Fitch is such a normal name that fits in well with the HP universe - OC's can sometimes have names like 'Persephone Emmanuelle De Ariancourt' or something equally as annoying. The main thing that niggled me about this story is your repetitions of her thoughts that reflect on Tom's behaviour or her own when you're trying to pull them together. By this I mean, 'Where did this blanket come from?' or 'Why did he act so annoyed when the Vampire was talking to me?' or 'Why was she blushing?' Message me if you don't understand. It's entirely obvious (or should be) to your readers why he is doing those things/why she is feeling those things. Because you've repeated this several times, it treats the readers as somewhat stupid. We can guess and know why he did that or why she feels that way. It's obvious in their actions. Doing this for the first time is fine, but you have to move on from that and show it in a different way.
Anyway, this has turned into a ridiculously long review! Overall, I think this story is great and I'm excited to read some more. I hope you're going to throw in some twists that might be different to how other time travel fics end. Also, I'd like to see more Tom (without Audrey) and your interpretation of his evil actions that defined his teenage years. Hope I didn't sound too harsh! :)
Nina3KPop chapter 26 . 5/16
Great story! Love it so far! Are you planning on updating anytime soon? Cause I'd read it if you did :)
moiradeathwidow chapter 26 . 5/9
Damn that was good. Please update soon, this is one of the best Riddle fic I have ever read.
Guest chapter 26 . 4/12
Please update soon!
Guest chapter 26 . 4/7
Update, please?
blueerimartian chapter 26 . 3/27
butiloveyou chapter 26 . 3/11
Omg please update.
Guest chapter 26 . 3/7
Any chance this is getting continued?
Need to know what happens next
Guest chapter 15 . 2/11
uh... did she not think of the room of requirements... the room that gives you whatever you need... like a bed? I mean... she's a smart ravenclaw right... and she seems weak having to rely on riddle... just seems weird she'd go there is all
Wynter Phoenix chapter 26 . 2/8
Love it!
Guest chapter 26 . 2/4
I read this story in 2 days and stayed up past 3 in the morning to finish it. This is the best Tom fic I’ve ever read! You write him SO well and true to the character. I absolutely adore Audrey as well, she fits perfectly in this story you created. And I could also see your writing style improve throughout the chapters, which the last couple killed me btw.. I really hope I see this story continue because it’s definitely one of my favorites!
Guest chapter 26 . 2/1
Pretty pretty please update! It's super!
RichesToDitches chapter 26 . 1/30
K9Train chapter 26 . 1/30
I cannot get over how incredible your characterisation and portrayal of Tom are. You’ve captured him so beautifully in every situation he’s been in with Audrey— who is a fantastic OC as well. I also adore the songs you list per chapter, having a playlist for this story just adds the cherry on the top of a masterpiece.
K9Train chapter 21 . 1/30
Eeek, progress! This has been my absolute favourite chapter so far. I remember reading this quite a few years back and I’m so glad to see you’re still updating it! Such a genuinely, well done and well written Tom Riddle fic. You are a talented genius, dear author.
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