Reviews for The Lucky Charm |
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![]() ![]() ![]() love this story. can't go wrong with baseballward. wish you would continue it :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know you're not going to finish this story. But can I just say that considering who just won the world series you ought to? |
![]() ![]() I loved what there was of this story are you going tofinish it or what? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I pulled the rookie mistake and started this and didn't notice it wasn't complete. Eek! Oh well. I did like the progress in this chapter. Bella doesn't want anything to do with Jasper, yet Jasper loves to think he does have a chance with her . . . even goading Edward about it. Although, it was kind of strange that Jasper was telling McCarty that 'it wasn't like that' with Bella. Almost as if he is just flirting with Bella, just to piss off Edward . . . like it is a sick game to him, of some sort. Don't know. Bella learning all of that from Rachel was nice . . . as it gave us readers a lit of insight on to the 'why' behind Edward hating reporters. Also informed us that Edward is quite celibate and really doesn't like the groupies. Charlie getting pissed at Whitlock for his comments on Bella proved that he is her father in this . . . and nobody knows except her and him. We don't even know yet . . . but, the way he acted sure solidified it for me. I really liked the ending with BxE flirting instead of screaming. Actually setting a date to take this to the next level. Texas. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Communication is definitely not their friend. They can't seem to do anything but piss each other off and want to ravage one another. Jasper was really creeping me out in this chapter. She clearly wanted nothing to do with him, yet he just kept pushing. I guess when you're a manwhore, no just isn't a viable answer and you'll push until you get what you want. Regardless of what that woman wants. The woman that said no in the first place. I did like that Edward was being honest by the end of the chapter and things looked up for about a second. Then plummeted right back down to frustrations and anger. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Talk about fiery passion . . . wowza! Loved that it was beyond sexual attraction and passion. That the passion was also unleashed in their words to each other. So hot! Wonder why the higher ups didn't mention anything to the team about the reporter coming into to do this piece? It is sort of odd they weren't told. I did enjoy that they both had the instant attraction. Also liked that it seems that only Seth noticed Edward's interest in Bella. Is Bella Charlie's daughter in this? Pretty cool that she works for ESPN but, it makes me wonder why she works for a sports conglomerate if she isn't into sports Unless she is into another sport. Loved the flipped POV's in this too . . . giving glimpses into both of their heads. Going to be a long four months. Especially if Edward is normally laid back and is suddenly strung very tight . . . the team will most definitely notice that. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice! I'm just beginning to work on fan fic and I like this I LOVE long fan fics AND twilight I'm also making a bond with eddie he he its a cute nick name and I have been reading the twilight books over and over since october ;P |
![]() ![]() ![]() That really sucks that you didn't continue with this story! *Pouts* I really liked it so far... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love this story especially since it's the red sox! Though they did horrible this past month. Anyway please continue this story and I love it too much! |
![]() ![]() ![]() love this story so far! hoping to read more to this story! Keep updating! |
![]() ![]() ![]() You have so many great things going on in this story: hot baseball players, Japser pushing Edward's buttons, hot make out scenes, Bella/Charlie relationship?, Seth and Rachel...you have to finish, please. Don't leave us hanging. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Haha I love it! The way you have made the characters your own is wonderful. With the humor mixed in, this Bella/Edward romance is unique to you. Update soon!:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() okay I am gonna be honest. the idea behind this story is brilliant and i love it, but if Bella is a girl from Southie, then her reactions to Jasper when he is trying to come on to her are kinda unrealistic. Every girl I have ever met from Southie can out talk and out smart any smooth talking guy. I had to stop as soon as I hit the EPOV because Bella and her reactions were just pissing me off. I am not trying to criticize but all I can say is that you took some artistic license and I understand that, I just wanted to make my point known. I'm from Boston, and a tried and true Sox fan and NOBODY from Southie would NOT be a fan of the Sox. Great job so far though. |
![]() ![]() ![]() no hope for me for chapter 4, I Think((((. But Thank you for story)) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aaaaauuggghhhh! Beth - you're killing me! You dangle this tasty story in front of me (Seriously salivating at the image of Edward - okay actually RPatz ;)- in a baseball uniform. Although in my mind he's playing for my beloved TX Rangers!), then you cut me off cold-turkey at only 3 chappies, w/nary an update in sight for the past 11 months. Dare I hope against hope that you'll ever make it back to our intrepid reporter Bella & discerning Baseballward, actually bringing them here to my home state (TEXAS baby!) for some long awaited hot & sweaty lemony action? Please don't leave a girl danglin'! Maybe throw us a bone in honor of the current Post Season taking place right now! What about if the Rangers whoop up on those damn NY Yankees? You know sleep is highly overrated, right? Adding this gem to my 'story alert', because I'm an ever HOPE-ful romantic & I don't want to miss any updates to this FAB story, should they ever materialize! Yours patiently, Kim :D |