|Reviews for Smoke Ninja revised|
| Gravity The Wizard chapter 8 . 10/27/2009
| RaiderXV chapter 8 . 10/27/2009
Very good, I would say that your writing has improved. You could add some detail, but that is more fluff for the reader. All in all I give you a four out of five kunai for this chapter.
| AnimeRat chapter 8 . 10/27/2009
Keep up the good work!
| Vld chapter 8 . 10/27/2009
You think two weeks is a long time? While i have been writing, i haven't updated anything in about two years. I barely write around ten lines to a page in a month, and work on several stories at once, so...
Anyway. Kabuto dead, i like. And Hinata being a lot less shy... and a lot more sadistic is fun. Ten says people are gonna complain about how she's not "canon" but... just ignore them.
| Kampretzz chapter 8 . 10/27/2009
chapter 4-8 are kinda short. Dont rush in writing mate, rushed chapter will make your story kinda half-good. Take your time in writing, and if some ppl bug u to upload chapter fast, when you only half done, dont upload. You are the author, so you are the one decide when you gonna upload them. Besides, waiting is half of the fun in reading fanfic (if you can make a good cliffhanger). And take 1-2 beta reader, to check your spelling and grammar if you have problem with it. And they can give some opinion on how your story is and give you some ideas for the future chapter. Overall your story has a good plot, but you might want to make them longer and more detailed a bit more.
| Kampretzz chapter 3 . 10/27/2009
there is still some spelling mistakes in names of character and japanese name in last 2 chapters, you might want a beta reader
| Kampretzz chapter 1 . 10/27/2009
pretty good prologue, but there is typo here n there, and i wonder how kyuubi know about ROOT.. well, on to next chapter..
| Apex Soldier chapter 8 . 10/26/2009
A bit rushed but still, I'm glad that a*shole Kabuto got killed... Haha poor Neji, no babies for you...
You made a couple of spelling errors like 'permanent' and grammar stuff but aside from that, awesome!
Try to slow the pace a bit... I know sometimes that it's hard to patiently write boring stuff when you got something big planned in the near future but it usually pays off, or i think it does, not sure, not very patient myself...
Anyways, nice update, can't wait to read more...
| Apex Soldier chapter 7 . 10/26/2009
Haha damn, I've been so busy that I didn't even notice that I was behind by two chapters...
Awesome chapter by the way...
| Rose Tiger chapter 8 . 10/26/2009
Yeah Hinata! Please keep going!
| eesa chapter 1 . 10/24/2009
| Gravity The Wizard chapter 7 . 10/15/2009
| Swordsman of Darkness chapter 7 . 10/15/2009
I like the story i cant wait for the next chapter.
When you gave Naruto the name of smoke, you meant smoke from mortal kombat, right?
| Vld chapter 7 . 10/15/2009
My take? Break Kabuto's spine, rip his eyeballs out, implode hiw family jewels, and cut his hands... just in case.
Oh, and cut his tongue. The screams would be fun at first, but after a while, it wouldreally get boring.
| Rose Tiger chapter 7 . 10/15/2009
Naruto vs. Kabuto. This shall be good.