|Reviews for We Were Nomads, Bathed in Concrete|
| dellaterra chapter 1 . 9/29/2009
This is just gorgeous! So poignant, so painful. You have conveyed Edward's loss and desolation so perfectly.
I was beginning to wonder if Edward was suicidal when he went back to the meadow. Like him, I had no hope for a HEA by then, so I think I was just as shocked and astonished as he was when Bella appeared. Well done!
Thank you for sharing this exquisite little gem of a story.
| AlwaysAround888 chapter 1 . 9/29/2009
alright i thought i was going to be crying the whole time i read this but im glad it had a turn around point :)
plus you wrote this very well,
cant wait for another story/update!
| sarcasticbutterfly chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
I thought this was very good. I liked it.
| poetrytoprose chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
Another fic from you that perfectly captures the essence of Edward and Bella; these two are just not complete without each other. The beginning progression between them was so sweet and I had to keep reminding myself of the beginning, that she was gone, so it made it all that harder to accept. Edward's emotions of not being able to move on made me ache. I kept hoping that he would somehow find happiness so I actually let out a 'yay!' at the end when Bella appeared.
Lovely, lovely work, Oxy! I'm sure you'll get requests to continue it some day - and I'd be lying if I said I didn't hope for the same - but it was a perfect ending.
| neologismitastical chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
This is AMAZING. No other words for it.
| KristyRose chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
I love your style. I was drawn into the story so quickly and felt for Edward the whole time. Bravo!
| alisa231 chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
“You’d hate her. I do, too, actually, but I keep trying to get back on the horse. She’s not funny, Bella; her jokes are all of the knock-knock variety. Her favorite movie is Maid in Manhattan. She eats fried rice with a spoon and smacks her lips after each fucking bite. And she’s the best one I’ve gone out with in over a year.”
That was my favorite passage. Sharp and cynical and true to character-Edward's narrative voice was very convincing.
It was nice to see another story from you -thanks for writing. )
| Demosthenes91 chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
Wow...okay, where to start...
I read this through 'House'...I just couldn't bear to sit here and watch it when I knew this was sitting out there, waiting for me to devour it! LOL My poor husband, he tells me, 'I think you're mad at me and I don't know why,' and I'm like, 'no, honey, I swear, I'm just reading instead of watching TV.'
You've thrown insecurity into my marriage, you vixen! *laughs*
First off, I love the characterizations. The loss of soulmates is just horrific, and as I kept reading this, I was dying not knowing where it was going. He was just sinking deeper and deeper and I wanted her to appear, in some form. And then you threw in VAMP CULLENS!
Oh, thank you! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!
I'm all for angst, really, I am, but God, it's so much sweeter when you redeem it with hope... I'm not even talking about a full on HEA, but just hope of somekind. I was terrified that we wouldn't even get any of that, because, geez, how is there hope if one of them is really and truly dead?
And you totally hit it out of the park!
As much as I love IVO, I'm glad you wrote this. I've said it before, all the great fic is definitely worth the wait!
| julesames chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
Excellent one shot! I loved it, I felt depressed right until the end because you killed Bella, but I held hope that she was still alive and I loved the way you finished it.
Your subtle humour is incredible, it makes me chuckle. I also liked the character development, including the way you developed the parents into characters of your own, separate from the Twilight series.
“My dad thinks my birthday’s on Halloween. But, really, that was his and my mom’s anniversary.”
This was just one of the lines that I loved so much from this.
You didn't reduce me to tears, but I think that's because I'm at the office and had to suck it in. I think if I'd been at home, I would have been a mess. I felt so bad for Edward and even though I've never been in his position, my views on capital punishment changed, and I wanted the Jack the Ripper wannabe to die.
That's how strongly your fic hit me. My whole belief in something just changed. I emphasised so much with him that I wished that he'd received more then just a life sentence.
I really would love to see you expand on this, even though I know you said you won't. But maybe you would consider writing something similar after IVO.
I'm glad to hear you're not giving up on IVO too because that fic is one of my favourites.
You're an incredibly gifted writer and I implore you to keep going. Keep writing the one shots if that is what helps you get your inspiration back for IVO. I know that sometimes, writing is as hard as pushing out a newborn. But keep pushing!
You're doing a great job. And I wouldn't mind reading any more one shots from you. :)
I think I might end my review here
| asphyxia.ame chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
I love your writing, this was beautiful. So much emotion, and not typically something one would expect.
Its great to see you writing once again.
| nounbeast chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
Bella becomes a vampire first! Oh I love these. I snot-nosed my way all through this one. The bittersweet ending was perfect. (I'll bet it felt good to write something non-IVO, huh?)
I happened to catch the link off Twitter, before my alert came through, and it's still claiming you're an author of only one story (and no reviews on this one). I have half a mind to screenshot for great justice!
Thank you for writing this one! :)
| Stoney Angel chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
Aw - I loved it. I love your brand of angst. This was the perfect ending to this o/s - I was hoping it would end this way, and you didn't disappoint. Thanks for giving us something to tide us over while waiting for more IVO. And happy happy wedding!
| guccisassy chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
Sorry, couldn't make it to the second sentence. Who needs a sad story? It sure would be great if you Would finish ivo!
| philadelphic chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
So good. I love your beautiful, angsty mind.
| GinnyW 31 chapter 1 . 9/28/2009
Sad, sweet, beautiful. I read the first paragraph and had to peak at the end... glad I did, I don't think I would've made it through all of the heartfail without knowing that the ending was like that.
Lovely story, hon, absolutely lovely. Is this story for the "When Love Was New" contest?