Reviews for In the dark
Guest chapter 5 . 7/29/2012
Wow! Brilliant story and your english is very good. I'm learning spanish and i'm not very good; me llamo Katie y vivir en la campo en Inglaterra ;)
Chocolatekat chapter 5 . 5/12/2010
nice story. i like the consent of it. Your english is good for being a spanish speaker first. I was able to pick up easily on the few errors but it did not take from the story. A bit fast pass and dry at times, but still a good story. thank you for writing it.
Scribbles111 chapter 5 . 11/16/2009
¡AH! ¡Adoro su historia! ¡Su tan bueno! ¡Conseguí a mi hermana para decirme los deletreos porque ella consiguió un GCSE en español tan yo puedo escribir una revisión en español! ¡Usted debe hacer definetly a Merlín y Arthur que dan gracias la chica del bosque que pienso, sería tan bueno!

de scribbles1

*hope i got all the spanish right! sorry if i got the wrong spanish!*
Wileret chapter 5 . 10/21/2009
¡Hola!

Bueno, primero de todo. Tranquila, escribes, en mi opinión, muy bien en inglés. Vale, tampoco te lo puedo asegurar al 100% porque no soy inglesa, pero no he visto nada raro a primera vista.

Y no eres la única que está intentado ahorrar para largarse a Londres a hablar inglés como debe ser! Ya quisiera yo también ir, pero por el momento tengo que apañarme con hacer intercambio de idiomas con los Erasmus de la universidad. Algo es algo.

Una cosa que te recomiendo, no hagas que la historia vaya tan "flash!" es decir, tan rápida. Aunque está bien estructurada, a veces hacer un poco más de descripción no viene nada mal (solo es un consejo)

En cuanto a lo que pasa en la historia. Pobre Arthur, debía de sentirse tan horriblemente impotente la primera noche que pasó en esa celda oscura, húmeda y fría. Normal que después tenga trauma tras esa experiencia. Por cierto, no estaría mal que escribiera un one-shot en que sufre las pesadillas. Sería interesante *imaginándoselo*

En fin, te dejo, ¡que tengo que ir a comer! Y a ver si yo me animo también a escribir en este fandom que tanto adoro
ChroniclesofNarniaGleeandDW chapter 5 . 10/20/2009
Aww! Thanks for thanking me especially! PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE DO A SEQUEL! Don't mind which, they all sound interesting. D Can't wait to read more of your work.
MagicByMerlin chapter 5 . 10/20/2009
"Ironically, this time the young prince found protection and shelter in the dark, in the deepest of the dark."

O, I like that line - sends shivers up my spine.

I really loved this chapter! I liked how Merlin was planting thoughts into the man's head - it's a good idea, that.

Oh, and a mega angsty epilogue sounds SO AMAZING. I LOVE angst!

Cant wait for more from you! :D

MBM

PS: Oh, and thanks for the special mention! Much appreciated! :}

PS: And as for you English mistakes, there barely are any! I mean, you missed out a word here and there, but it was more than readable, and by far better than any other fics written in a foreign language! How long have you been studying? To me it seems like years, judging by the quality of your writing! :D

Keep it up!
conley chapter 5 . 10/20/2009
cool.
Scribbles111 chapter 4 . 10/14/2009
wow

i love youre story

barely any mistakes as well by the way. youre better at spelling than me and im not from spain *sulks because jealouse* but its great!

im learning spanish so ...

hola Me llamo Scribbles1 Como estas usted? Muy bien Gracias

see ya love your story
Kaysie chapter 4 . 10/9/2009
This is a good story. Please continue
MagicByMerlin chapter 4 . 10/6/2009
Don't stop the suffering! Suffering is good! :D

Love this chapter. Maybe things went a little too fast after Merlin teleported himself and Arthur to Camelot? But all the same, very good!

Keep it up! ;)

MBM

PS: I'm still staggered by how good you are at English y'know...
ChroniclesofNarniaGleeandDW chapter 4 . 10/6/2009
Wow, this is AMAZING! At least they're out of the dark, now.
Kathleen LaCorneille chapter 3 . 10/3/2009
Hi! Just wanted to say that I like your story! There isn't a lot of good fic of Merlin, so I'm really happy I found yours.

Thanks for sharing this story with us! I hope you'll update soon!

Kat
MagicByMerlin chapter 3 . 10/3/2009
But what hurt Merlin the most were the traces of tears he saw under Arthur's eyes.

AWW MY POOR BOYS! WHO WILL SAVE THEM? *dramatically prances around, spouting nonsense*

Sorry.

I'm just very weird.

Love this fic though.

Totally can't wait for more! :D
dangerousdisadvantage chapter 3 . 10/2/2009
Argh! Looking forward next update!
Sherry chapter 3 . 10/2/2009
Thnaks for the story...can't wait for the next chapter(s)... please keep writing...
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