And then finally the last issue I have with this story. It's been like 15 chapters since you've revealed that Tayuya is Naruto's older sister. Since then we've had 1 scene where Naruto finds out and gets angry, 0 sibling interactions, 0 discussions, 0 introspections. Naruto and Minato didn't even mention Tayuya at all during their meeting.

Like I said earlier: you wanted to make Tayuya his sister and have the Rinnegan? I can respect that. But if you do so, then actually fucking write around it. Don't just mention it one time and then completely forget about it. Naruto is a fucking orphan who never had anyone to rely on until Iruka. That's why he's the way he is in canon towards his dream of being Hokage and wanting to save Sasuke. Now in your story he has a fucking full blooded older sister and it's like he just doesn't even care.

You know, for someone who literally typed "I wanted to stick to the spirit of Naruto" earlier in an AN, you sure have no problem changing random ass shit to your narrative without caring to explain any of them.

Sakura killing Tenzo (an skilled ANBU, part of Team Ro, has the fucking Mokuton) in only 3 years of training from where she was a useless fangirl (like holy fuck this was god awful)

Kisame killing 8 gates Gai

Nagato in canon was ridiculously strong because the Rinnegan was fucking ridiculously strong. He literally didn't use anything else. He didn't NEED anything else. Yet you're fine with jacking him off in your power scaling but putting out random ass nerfs and limits for Tayuya and Naruto.

Like pick one. The first couple of chapters were so boring because you wanted to stick to canon, but now you're just pulling random shit out of your ass.

Additionally, she has the fucking RINNEGAN and Orochimaru didn't want it. Yet somehow she's still relegated to guard duty as part of the Sound Five, where she could easily be killed or captured?

Like you're writing a Rinnegan story, but somehow you've managed to kill the importance of the Rinnegan in this story.

Whirlpool Chronicles was much better than whatever this story was. It's fine if you want to give the Rinnegan to Tayuya but you have to plan around it and not fart it out of your ass randomly on a whim.

If Tayuya has the Rinnegan, why would Orochimaru want Sasuke's body and Sharingan instead of Tayuya's Rinnegan?

You explained it as Orochimaru wanted a Sharingan to learn all jutsu. Yet you also say Orochimaru picked up Tayuya when she was seven and she's 14 now. Orochimaru would've gone through two body transfer's during that time. You're telling me that even when he didn't have access to the Sharingan (Itachi too strong, Sasuke not ready), he didn't use the fucking Rinnegan as a body transfer, if not only to use during the invasion? Like come on.

There's too many plot-holes in this story.

why not let Naruto made his own 12 paths of sage some time it be ex former sound ninjas sound 4 his keeping on hand to helpings vs bad guys like roots men and women abut blacks ops , his then had move to the whirlpool lands next , when his lord of it now, and marring Fu and the cat host now, his 2 wife s now,

annnnd this is where the story gets bad. leaving.

we can all agree that this chapter was stupid as fuck.

My hope for this fic faded with the five chapters that I read so far. It’s basically just normal naruto but with the Rinnegan that you don’t even understand. It’s like you just looked up “powerful eye powers” and slapped one on naruto but kept him as the same weak kid as he was throughout the first series. You don’t even know the abilities that the Rinnegan has. The eyes literally make the Sharingan look like a cheap knockoff. Honestly just stop writing, you’re fucking terrible at it.

You seriously had 8 gates gai lose to God damn kisame when he was slapping 10 tails Madara around? Your sense of scaling is atrocious my god

Nice story and all but there's a big plot hole. Visual Genjutsu does NOT and CANNOT work on the rinnegan. So having him be affected by kakashi Sasuke and itachi s sharingan genjutsu dosent make any sense. Only genjutsu such as jiraiyas sound genjutsu can affect rinneg users

guy with eight gates active eats the shit out of kisame

Seriously, that was a waste of time those plot are stupid the weakest rinegane user I never seen my note is trash/10 disappointed

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Awesome story, well written! Thanks for the amazing read!

Literally everyone is there. Three near or kage level ninja. And everyone just watches