|Reviews for Naruto: Rinnegan Chronicles|
| marquis.shax chapter 25 . 2/17
damn can't believe you killed off Tenzo. I'm wondering IF you had Naruto stopped by Kabuto like that would you have had him drain his chakra?
| marquis.shax chapter 21 . 2/17
I honestly think that Deidara was probably the weakest of the akatsuki (aside from Obidara when pretending to be Tobi) if it weren't for his ability to create clay birds and fly he'd have gotten his ass kicked by anyone
| marquis.shax chapter 16 . 2/17
I think you should've devoted a chapter or two to his training with Jiraiya instead of just skipping over it (even though that's what happened in canon lol)
| marquis.shax chapter 14 . 2/17
oh great so you've made Tayuya an Uzumaki let me guess Mei will also be an Uzumaki as authors seem to like making every single redhead in the narutoverse an Uzumaki
| marquis.shax chapter 11 . 2/17
since in canon it never went into the development of the skills of the rinnegan when first activated I'm hoping you stuck with what most fanfic authors have been doing and have each path or skill or w/e you wanna call it with the rinnegan take time to develop and not just automatically be there kinda like the Sharingan how it has to develop from 1 to 3 tomoe
| marquis.shax chapter 10 . 2/17
lmao you've already diverged from canon quite a bit with the whole Kyuubi attack, Kushina still living in Whirlpool and only coming to Konoha to give birth to Naruto, and adding Yugito to team seven lol. Also I'm quite curious why exactly do you seem to like Naruto being with Yugito so much I noticed your Naruto stories all seem to be Naru/Yugi. I have no problem with the pairing although I do prefer Hinata but will take Yugito and pretty much EVERYONE else over Sakura lol
| marquis.shax chapter 8 . 2/17
lol well you were only off by one when it comes to Kakashi being Hokage turns out he became Rokudaime after Tsunade retired (probably just so she can drink all the time again lol) and then Naruto became w/e the word for seventh is
| marquis.shax chapter 6 . 2/17
man I really don't understand why the fuck people butcher the story of the Kyuubi so badly by saying it appeared first in whirlpool an just randomly showed up in Konoha. Why the fuck can't people just stick to canon and say that Kushina was the previous jinchuuriki
| wisetristan chapter 42 . 1/23
naruto and yugito didnt die casue if they did the ten tail would be released or naruto sealed it in the six crystals but those are only theories to be honest i think you should make a sequal with naruto's and yugito's son minato as the main character and tell about what happened
| Moonlessnightofsweden chapter 42 . 12/28/2014
I have read a lot of fanfictions but i got to give you credit it was perfect...the end was wonderful i loved all of it...ps. susanooo means storm god in Japanese i think... northern sweden that means songs of the mountain...
| Kyuubi Soul chapter 42 . 12/21/2014
Alright then... what's your name?
Me: U W0T N0W M8?
| Kyuubi Soul chapter 37 . 12/21/2014
You evil author teme..
| Guest chapter 8 . 12/4/2014
Actually many stories make Kakashi Hokage. It just usually comes later after he got bashed more for not teaching anyone but Sasuke.
| Amidamaru88 chapter 42 . 8/30/2014
- good grammar and chapter lenght in general, though a few mistakes are still present.
- some work is needed on cha. development, Naruto goes from cold to warm regarding Sasuke, you insert canon scenes when they didn't make any sense there. The romance between Naruto and Yugito could also use some work, likewise Sai seems to jump ship to esaly.
- a few more scenes could have been added ex : bonding moments with Tayuya and Naruto, with Sai.
- interesting choices with the fights and deaths I liked them and commend you on that.
- power balancing is needed, Sakura somehow surving those moves seems unlikly, the gates and then in what a month or two does what Orochimaru never could? somehow Itachi fighting on despite his sickness to that extent, and Kisame... just damn. Also Naruto got the power to ressurect however he didn't try to use it on Kakashi who may or may not be stuck in limbo. Naruto was able to beat Itachi but somehow Sasuke was standing on even footing with him? his own incomplete Susano withstanding a rasenshuriken? nope, Sasuke didn't have the experience he had in canon where he actually fought Deidara and his team.
- what did Itachi do to Sasuke?
- somehow Itachi and Kisame got in the village again and no one fought them off besides the main cha?
- you stuck a bit to close to canon with some of the scenes
- good fight scenes, while close to canon the one with Orochimaru was nice, especially the ending, good one with Danzo as well.
- I think you tried to add canon scenes and developments as the manga was coming out even if you had deviated from it with your story and it lowered the quality of the fic, it made it seem inconsistent at times and felt jaged.
- a shame some of the side cha don't get a chance to shine, though to be fair they don't get much in canon either poor Shino.
- I call bullshit on Konohamaru taking charge after all that crap he was way to young for such a thing, Tayuya could and should have taken over until he was older rather then straight away as you are implying it occured. Heck she took out a lot of threats are we supposed to believe that she bent the knee to a gennin? one who's greatest threat was catching Tora, you think people would follow him instead of her? going by reputation alone they would be a laughing stock heck Asuma could have taken charge.
| From The Depths Of Fear chapter 42 . 7/7/2014
i loved this story your naruto fics are the best around i really liked the ending sequel?