Reviews for Smoke and Mirrors
the cantarella of odile chapter 1 . 12/7/2011
Amazing. Poignant and very in-character, all I can say is that this is an incredible oneshot : )
Europe28 chapter 1 . 7/29/2010
I won't pretend I didn't cry when I read this. It was heart warmingly sad.
aestheticisms chapter 1 . 6/9/2010
This was intense. You could feel the emotions throughout the story. Marvelous job.
young dawn chapter 1 . 5/31/2010
A captivating piece, I must say. I like that you displayed a different side of Wallace here. Lovely descriptions throughout and a fitting end. Well done.

Sora(:
rachelalexandra chapter 1 . 10/14/2009
So, so sad. And somehow you managed it without too much bitterness, congratulations to you!
Snoaz chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
A Gracefulstory! Not enough of those. .

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The typically harsh sound of a door slamming didn’t even faze the man reclining lazily in the alleyway behind the world-famous building where the gym leaders of Hoenn met at least once every year.

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I feel that this sentence is a bit too long... especially since it's the first one.

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He didn’t feel in the mood, though.

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Shouldn't it be 'wasn't in the mood'?

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Wallace felt her breaths tickle on his skin

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'Breath'.

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and the fierceness in her familiar eyes to be cruel

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Sounds a bit odd.

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resonating around as if she had slammed a hundred hard metal doors rather one weak wooden one

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You forgot 'than'. :)

So much for the grammar and stuff. I liked this story; the writing was well, and the way you portrayed their relationship interesting. Wallace is usually shown to be elegant and refined, but here you see a more harsh side of him. (Something that has always been there, I think, because how otherwise could he be champion?)

Also, the last line was impressive - a very fitting ending!

~Snoaz