|Reviews for His Heartbeat|
| Lothlorien Aeterna chapter 1 . 10/23/2011
Loved it :)
| Griffinesque chapter 1 . 8/20/2010
:) Nice. :)
| simonisthecutestmentalist chapter 1 . 1/15/2010
aw i love this :0)
| PhoenixWytch chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
Sad, but with a very hopeful ending.
Thanks for writing.
| Jadestar1981 chapter 1 . 10/6/2009
Nellie, this is a beautiful little story. I like the idea of Lisbon making Jane feel again little by little. It's a hopeful story and it makes the shipper inside of me happy. I liked very much, thanks for posting!
| hardly loquacious chapter 1 . 10/5/2009
Really liked the idea of Lisbon as Jane's heartbeat. It's a neat idea and was quite well written.
| nathansgurl chapter 1 . 10/4/2009
Aww such a sweet story. I really loved it, especially the last couple of lines:
Until then, he would settle for scattered beats and small flutters as long as Lisbon was the one causing them. She was the only one who could possibly recharge the battery and unthaw the ice. She could be his heartbeat.
Aah so amazing. The shipper in me jumps with joy!
| WildDaisies10 chapter 1 . 10/4/2009
Aw! That was beautiful Nell! Loved it!
"That tiny flicker of emotion in his heart left him hopeful that maybe the cold wouldn't last forever." Favorite line.
Great addition to the challenge! :D
| Queen Em chapter 1 . 10/4/2009
Oh this was lovely, really well written. I loved how you built up Jane's feelings towards Lisbon as the story progresed, esepcially the little but about when she was upset. I like how you concentate on the dynamcs of the relationship and what Jane thinks of it all, really enjoyed reading it x
| earthlydreamz chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
Aw, the shipper in me practically squealed with delight. I feel like I'm being spoiled with fluffiness, from your 'The Simple Things' now to this one shot. Please don't stop the fluff. I have a feeling the next episode will be filled with angst/drama/slight fluff. And I agree, this season is rocking!
Loved the hopeful ending, and I'm way too optimistic with my stories anyways. Hence why I stopped mid-way through my 'angsty' one, maybe I should change it to a purely fluff piece. I don't know why I'm rambling on this comment...I think maybe you just inspired me? Not that it will constitute an update from me...but it's getting my writer's block moving out of the way. So double thanks Nellie!
| tromana chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
Oh Nellie, that's lovely. Yay for getting out of writer's block and yay for writing something as sweet as this. Absolutely loved the concept of Lisbon recharging Jane's metaphorical heartbeat... Aw...
Yeah, I don't have anything more constructive to say. I'm sorry.
Oh - as for the no dialogue thing. It needed none. It works just how it is. *grins*
| music-and-fairytales chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
Squee! That was SO CUTE! Loved it. Beautiful job honey x
| Ebony10 chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
Yay shipper! Let it loose! :D
"That tiny flicker of emotion in his heart left him hopeful that maybe the cold wouldn't last forever."
This whole fic was just beautifully written and I especially loved that line. Can't wait for more of your work (hmm, didn't I just say that yesterday?)...
| khalek-aeryn chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
well, I am very happy that your writer's block is gone :D
my favourite part was when he could register it as a WHOLE heartbeat...that was very cool :P
| dizzy - in - the - izzy chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
Ha, my coming out of writers block story was Speechless for NCIS, and it was only because I couldn't leave a line alone. I was like, I gotta expand on this. I went near stirr crazy when I realized I had written something, and posted IMMEDITATELY! That isn't spelled right, oh well. I can't spell that. :/
Anywho, you should know that you inspired me to write my own oneshot concerning frozen in time. I was like, GOTTA DO THIS ONE! I missed the last one. Forgot. I had a good idea too. :( Anywho, I was going to review earlier and I probably would have been first, but I had to write my own.
Dude, my heart was aching while reading this. The new season is great for the muse and the hope that Jane and Lisbon will be each other saviours. That's the shipper in me talking.
good job. I didn't see one mistake, and I loved the no dialouge. I find writing without dialouge, because you think you've writen a lot, but you haven't. Although, Ask The Lonely chapter one was mostly typing, and not dialouge. It was hard too. So, I commend you for the amazingness of no dialouge. It was very very good.