|Reviews for Lucille's Life in Manhattan|
| harmonicagranger chapter 1 . 2/23/2013
Oh my gosh! I played Lucille in TMM! Loved reading your take on my character! :)
| thewhiphand5 chapter 1 . 7/11/2012
That was so so awesome. Thoroughly Modern Millie is one of my favorites and I think you did an amazing job! Keep it up.
| scarlet luchia chapter 1 . 8/31/2011
Hi There! I sure am exited to see other Thoroughly Modern Millie lovers! Your story has a good line so far and I will love to read on. I just have a few tips...
Keep it all in the same tense! If you are talking in firt person ( I, Me) keep it that way.
Try to make every sentance opener different. Read the first word in each sentance and if two words reapeat in a paragraph you have to change something.
Lastly, remember you don't have to repeat things so often. If you say "she was exausted." at the end of a paragraph you don't have to say it again in the next we know she still is.
There are a few spelling things but we all have them! We all can learn more everyday, and NO ONES story is perfect (especialy mine. I'm embarresed.)
Keep up the good work!
| bryswym chapter 1 . 9/30/2010
i also played lucille last year in thoroughly modern millie! she was a small character that ive always wanted to learn more about. interesting take on lucille and please write more!
| Jemidancer2011 chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
Oh my gosh I love this! I played Lucille in my school's musical this past year and found this REALLY ironic! I loved it! you should write more! :)
| Afternoon on a hill chapter 1 . 5/15/2010
this was adorable. Millie is my favorite musical, especially since iplayed her at my school:) we didnt have a luccilee in ours... but reading this i wish we did
| aspiringauthor013 chapter 1 . 1/2/2010
That was really good! I love this play and I love the way you gave Lucille a personality. Please make more?
| panda lover chapter 1 . 10/5/2009
Good job! It really captured Lucille which we don't know anything about. Makes up her character.