|Reviews for Hate|
| Bloodygirl5 chapter 1 . 12/7/2014
This is such a great story! but it would have been better if there were more details about the kiss.
but overall, great job!
| Bubblegum-Bunny chapter 1 . 12/11/2012
Aww there's no way you can leave it at this! Please update it C:
| kaci chapter 1 . 4/22/2011
love it awome story
| luvrrbs chapter 1 . 9/18/2010
duuuude, continue! like, seriously, NOW!
| MiladyYukie chapter 1 . 8/29/2010
He really does? :D I doubt it
| Hasten chapter 1 . 1/25/2010
As soon as I started reading that first paragraph I stopped, wrestled with it in my head, and decided that a little more description of characters' surroundings, thoughts, and emotions would have been extremely beneficial. For example, I personally would've loved a little insight into what was going through Blossom's mind as she and Brick conversed. It would've helped to know where on Earth Brick got a bottle of Antidote X... or, for that matter, HOW Brick even knows about that stuff. Mojo? Tell us that.
Where grammar is concerned, your not-so-hot moments weren't unforgivable but actually pretty well common. Even so, remember to always close dialogue with a comma or period. You didn't miss any of the latter, but you did the former.
Example: “Man I never knew taking a break from causing destruction would be this good.” Butch said.
Straddle a name or "replacement name," such as "man" or "dude," with commas. Also, 'cause you told us who said what, you needed a comma. Basically, "Man, I never knew taking a break from causing destruction would be this good," Butch said. Honestly, I would have written it as something closer to, "Man, I never knew taking a break from causing destruction would be this good!" Butch laughed.
Doesn't that seem a little more fluid and alive to you than its original writing? It's amazing how much the arrangement and choice of words affect a story. Just play it up a little. Don't be afraid to experiment. It might also help to read aloud, just gives you a better idea of what you wrote actually sounds like.
| Judgementality chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
Story Writing Guy (are you really a guy or is it just a username?)... No matter how many times my brain keeps telling me "OMG STOP READING THIS! I CAN ALMOST MEMORIZE IT NOW AND I HAVE BAD MEMORY, REMEMBER?", I still can't stop the habit. I'm a sucker for your FIRST and BEST story, you know? You didn't get the characters OOC (which I believe means Out-Of-Character), and the whole "Almost Foolproof" adjective is so funny and perfect to use describing his plan (only because his siblings are the exceptions)! The Blossom-answering-funny-Math-questions scene (It's like a movie in my head, on TV) made me laugh, again and again... (Background SFX: And again... and again... SIS JUST STOP LAUGHING!) Well, it's time for me to go do some homework... Time to read 'Hate' for the 14th time! G'luck for your oncoming stories!
| little-miss-randomness17 chapter 1 . 11/27/2009
pfft he so loves her too -pout-
| kazorashi chapter 1 . 10/8/2009
It's nice. Although, I wish for it to be longer. It was nice detail though. Maybe a little more decription? It's good. The helf asleep Blossom... Brilliant. Well, you must've been tired while making this... Nice.
| HOTZIEgurl chapter 1 . 10/8/2009
| DC12 chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
new and really interesting like how u put the story. it was a bit funny when blossom woke up.
| Laughing Riot chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
Aww...This story is SOO cute! And in some parts were funny. :) I LOVE this story! I'm gald you uploaded this! v
Butch: Aww...Why are we BARELY in this?
Buttercup, Bubbles, and Boomer: YEAH!
Bubbles: Brick called Octi ...(Cries)
Blossom: Brick did WHAT?
Boomer: Don't worry Bubbles, I'll-
Bubbles: (Pulls Boomer to her and hugs him while she cries)
Boomer: (Blushing) ...I like this story.
Bubbles: HOW CAN YOU SAY- (Looks at Boomer, blushes and lets go of him) Uh...I think I like it too...
Boomer: (Smiling stupidly) ...
Buttercup: Well, I don't like it!
Me: ...Yes, you do.
Buttercup: No, I don't! It doesn't have Buttercup/Butch love!
Butch: (Smirking) It doesn't have what?
Buttercup: Uh...NOTHING! (Runs away) And I like this story now! Because it doesn't have Buttercup/Butch love!
Butch: Oh, you know you like me! (Runs after Buttercup) And I like this story! You made Buttercup admit her true feelings for me!
Me: ...At least we're on the same page now...
| CathyRulz4Ever chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
Amazing! This idea was a fantastic one and everything seemed so... well, I can't say real because they aren't but if they were, it would seem real.
But still great story!
| BoomerBoy chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
DUDE thats awsome im i think im talkin 4 every 1 when i say its awsome
| General Lollipop chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
Thank you for uploading this!It's such a great story!And I won't say update because I think you're exhausted and need rest...