|Reviews for Paper in Fire|
| Rei Kiri chapter 4 . 1/4
Oh god I forgot just how much I liked your writing style. I went through four chapters without even noticing... I absolutely love this! Right now I'm a little sad for Ed but I know you - you gonna make things right and make them both suffer real good on the process, just like I like it ;) Roy is such a... Roy. I couldn't help but mutter 'bastard' through it almost every time he talked XD I stopped at a real cliff hanger there, so I get excited about reading the next (four? lol) chapter for tomorrow! honestly can't wait (wanna bet if I break and read it before tomorrow? 'cuz I think you might win that bet...)
Love as always!
| Wind Strengthens Fire chapter 31 . 11/5/2015
I just feel so warm reading the ending knowing that it was a good read.
| jordynleigh01 chapter 8 . 7/7/2015
Why couldnt ed have went on a date with a guy instead of a woman :'(
| WrathAndRain chapter 3 . 6/13/2015
Wow Mustang was kinda harsh...Love your book by the way it's completely different to everything I'm used to reading thanks. :)
| Stained Smile chapter 31 . 4/6/2015
This was a nice little story that did everything right. Believable action scenes, natural conversations, and good presentation of the characters and environment. The grammar and pacing was solid all the way through. I especially liked your presentation of Roy as a Machiavellian sort being so concerned with physical tells and deliberate conversational choices. It was very well done.
I suppose the primary thing "missing" was a real sense of fear or anticipation while the story unfolded. Granted, manufacturing a strong emotion in the reader has to be the most difficult art in writing, especially in a relatively short and light-hearted story as this one. It was hard to relate to Edward's depression and loneliness because he was presented in that condition initially. To be fair, his gradual recovery as well as Roy's realization of his affections were handled well. In addition, the attempted coup felt lacking, what with being introduced and ended so quickly. I'm also not sure if this story really deserved an M rating given your action scenes were relatively gore-light (not necessarily a bad thing). These are largely quibbles though.
I greatly enjoyed the story, can't wait to view your other works!
| Crack.Alchemist chapter 31 . 3/16/2015
I really like your RoyEd. Very wonderful story.
| luluhrh chapter 31 . 11/24/2014
it's cute. adorable!
Mustang is an ass. . . and no one is surprised. XD well written!
| Lyson chapter 14 . 9/21/2014
Uuuuugh. Why is Ed always the sad insecure pathetic desperate needy type in RoyEd fan girl stories...why... what is the matter with...ugh. I try so hard not to review, I try so hard... and I just can't...ugh... the content just gets so bad...
-takes a deep breath-
Ok, I'm closing this story now...I just can't...read this...crap...
I tried not to review, I swear. I got this far.
| DreamKaskade chapter 31 . 8/12/2014
Bloodwar recommended I come read this in her shout out of you and I'm really glad I did. (: it was an emotional roller coaster reading this and I wanted to choke Roy a couple times and cry for Edward. /: it was an amazing read. I think it took me a day and a half haha.
| Inu Tashiro p chapter 29 . 8/11/2014
I loved this :)
| soer chapter 31 . 6/26/2014
An incredible read! Straight to the plot right from the start.
| Toolazttologin chapter 31 . 6/24/2014
Oh my gosh...
Marry me? XD
| Xmazt chapter 31 . 5/31/2014
Why should I find this story just yesterday!? You're a prefect story teller. I enjoy this storyXDDD When Ed felt hurt and despair, his pain hurt me as well. You don't know how much I was moved at Ed's asking "what took you so long" in the mine and Roy's saying "how could he have no idea he's beautiful?" Having endured so much, Ed definitely deserved happiness, so did Roy. Thank you for giving a happy ending for them;-)
I don't think you made Al OC actually. I do think he would be that mad when it comes to Ed's getting hurt even though he always appeared calm and gentle.
Love this story! And looking forward to your new work if possibleXD
| Daddys little crazy bitch chapter 31 . 3/1/2014
| Sentimentalstories chapter 14 . 2/26/2014
Aww, I hate to see Edward so... so... pained... I hope things turn out well for him!