Reviews for Mi Bella, Mi Pie de imprenta
MMTyler chapter 12 . 6/20/2020
Ì it's been such a great story it's too bad you never finished it
DawnScarlet19610 chapter 1 . 1/29/2020
I deeply dislike your switch to Sam's POV the way you did. Start a new POV off from the moment the previous one ends. Don't recap entire scenes from a new point of view. You got the imprint all wrong. It happens when the eyes meet for the first time, and is instant and powerful. I don't understand why you decided to make Leah into a nasty b*tch. She was bitter in the books because Sam broke her heart and got together with Emily, her cousin, with no real explanation. She wasn't like that before, and even if you wanted to make her b*tchy, you didn't do a good job of it if Sam is cringing at his chosen girlfriend's tone and her mother grounds her in a humiliating way at the dinner table in front of everyone. Leah actually had a lot of depth and pain in the books, and you made her into a shallow, vapid and mean character. She also loved Seth a lot in the books, and you make it seem like she doesn't care about him in this story. I would have been able to tolerate your Leah bashing, maybe, if you hadn't completely messed up the imprinting. I also really don't understand why Charlie would ask Jared and Sam to help with Bella's bags instead of Jacob and Seth, who she actually knows. Lastly, Embry Sr. doesn't exist. Embry is a bastard and his father is unknown, either being Billy, Quil Sr. or Joshua Uley's son, most likely Joshua's. So you really need to work on your details cuz it severely weakens your story. And go back to read the moment Jacob looked into Renesmee's eyes for the first time so you can better understand how the imprint occurs.
Debbie Hicks chapter 12 . 2/18/2019
13. Chapter Chapter 13. t Bella'pov'
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Debbie Hicks chapter 12 . 2/18/2019
13. Chapter 13. Bella pov
then BITTEN Best friends sswWALLOWED BLOOD Wityh both with three with three with IUmprintees then too late oover drained then too late KKids/Toddlers and CLARE yYOUNG BITTEN By draining to Alienss to Jake my loyal friend then too late gone wild then to Aliens/Vulcans bitten drained mixed up blood the hguard foun\d us huntingh people there who turnefd yoiu then Felix we sentence you all to death wioth you guilty then MAULED By LLematyas real ones then too late tore from hererr Venom brutallized Beaten to death then good more than as all then Blood without hair or memories chained then Executed wwith twio bitten then broken from as all then tore was Dying from here then the Sixth with the
anne.prossi15 chapter 12 . 2/13/2019
Update please
B4bidden chapter 12 . 11/27/2017
really wish there was more to read
12Rayne chapter 12 . 7/22/2017
Wow...that ending made me feel awkward to be honest. Only because the last twilight fanfiction I finished had a very friendly Leah who was very close to Bella to the point she would lay her life on the line to save Bella. So reading the ending made me feel awkward lol.
brina1 chapter 12 . 4/23/2017
Bella put Phil in jail and Bella kick Leah ass
tamwhit chapter 12 . 4/9/2017
Please update your story soon as it has been very good
Chrissiel chapter 12 . 9/21/2016
Please please please update this story I am enjoying it very very much so please try to get it updated soon thanks
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gia warner chapter 7 . 5/30/2015
keep up tha great work bronte
Pineapples1 chapter 12 . 10/29/2014
Leah is a puny mortal whatever she has planned will never work.
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