|Reviews for Elijah Comes Out Of His Cave|
| The Phantomess of the Opera chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
you're right, very ooc! that's not to say i didn't enjoy it! so sweet!
| AC2 chapter 1 . 10/13/2009
Okay, I looked.
You've got some interesting by-play between these characters, and though the fandom is completely unfamiliar, the story seems familiar. Your prose is good, and the characterisation is, too.
If I was going to criticise at all, it would be the profusion of parentheses, which are largely unnecessary, unless you are writing in the style of Asimov, in which case I'd not make a fuss about it.
| YSRS chapter 1 . 10/13/2009
wow, nice, good descriptions there
| persian85033 chapter 1 . 10/11/2009
Possibly the only thing that would be nice about the caves of steel is when you would see the outside for the first time. especially a sunset or something. though i wonder if they're on the same schedule. like if it's day outside, but it's night in the city, know what i mean?