Reviews for UC: Melancholy and Repent
simpsonman956 chapter 25 . 10/10/2010
Oh Martian Scout, you do love to break the fourth wall, don't you? lol. Also, I don't know if you know who Phelous is but, to that part where Wilson shoots the beast?


XD Great chapter! Nice to see Freddy final grew it up!
simpsonman956 chapter 16 . 10/9/2010
Ok, it's at this point I have to give you some constructive critisism, because I just can't ignore this anymore. Dude, you need to spellcheck, because these grammar mistakes are very distracting in this otherwise awesome story. I mean, I know how hard it is to be typing a story for an hour and how easy it is to mess up and the mistakes are minor enough that I know what you MEANT to say, but you really should try to look over them.
simpsonman956 chapter 6 . 10/9/2010
Dude, I LOVE the character you've made in Wilson. If there's one thing everyone loves, it's a badass. And you have succeded in making one! I just hope he doesn't end up overshadowing Sly.
Plazmatik chapter 10 . 6/24/2010
Plazmatik chapter 5 . 6/21/2010
"Droid" the borg! Anyway not much has changed. Good. Why do guys always assume girls are talking about them?
Plazmatik chapter 3 . 6/21/2010
Are the Sontarjii real? Jus asking. Still going strong
Plazmatik chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
Anon chapter 21 . 2/10/2010
This story reminds me so much of Pirates of the Caribbean 2...hmm. Pretty good set up though, but I think you would benefit from a beta.
Jammin Jabala chapter 29 . 11/13/2009
Well it was a good story. It was better than the first, which gives me high hopes for Deception. It probably wont be my faveorite installment of the series, but this was still a good story. You handled my chracter very well and everyone seemed very in character, well except for Neyla, but you changed her completely. Anyway one of my main complaints was how predictable the story was. You need to leave us guessing, rather than coming out and saying OK FREDDY IS GONNA SAVE WILSON! I mean when Neyla told Freddy he had to say Wilson, I think that had to be one of the most predictable moments in all of fanfiction. Anyway cant wait for the sequal, it will be nice to have a break from Wilson.
The Good Thief chapter 29 . 11/12/2009
Hah! Jolly good story if I do say so myself. Can't Wait for Deception.
pasta16 chapter 29 . 11/12/2009
Overall, it is a good story...but you might want to keep your psych-o moments to yourself...

It was really cute with Penelope and Bentley and Freddy getiing to redeme himself was pretty cool. For ur next story, i would suggest adding more...let us know the characters and give us some laugh by adding some tangent thoughts and happening...kinda like PK and Wilson, they hate eachother, and u got PK to act childish and it was pretty funny seeing them go back and forth...

goo job
Jammin Jabala chapter 28 . 11/12/2009
O dear God, please dont call Sly by his last name! Oops sorry about that, ok now time for the review. It was a good chapter and the bit with Penelope and Bentley at the end was sweet. However so far this story has been good, but I'm looking more forward to Deception. Well that is as long as the main character is still Murray. Also I'm glad to see Wilson wont be playing a big role in the sequal. I mean really. Whenever hes on it seems like everything circles around him in some way. Update soon.
Jammin Jabala chapter 27 . 11/10/2009
If you think that by telling me there was a twist that I'd get excited your wrong. Anyway good chapter and it seems extremely close to being over, so please update soon. U know I'm a huge Murray fan, so I am looking forward to Deception so much. Lastly I just have one question. Why do u like the millitary? Just curious. I dont like it bug only because I have a strict policy against geting shot at.
erasethisaccountdeleteit chapter 27 . 11/10/2009
Gettin beter boyyo!
Jammin Jabala chapter 26 . 11/10/2009
Hey sorry I havnt be reviewing latley. School, combined with my new story, combined with acting can make someone very busy. However I havnt forgotten this story and I will try to be a better with my reviews. Anyway the story is definatly picking up. The action of the ship was very intresting and the idea of Borg making tea made me laugh. However I do have one complaint. The Freddy saving Wilson's life in the Doom Sea was far to predictable. You'd have to be as dumb as a door knob to not figure that out ahead of time. Anyway update soon so you can get started on Deception.
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