Reviews for Daylight
Wrandom Writer chapter 2 . 10/31/2009
This was a very well-writen chapter. You captured Bella's voice well and I applaud you for that. I am horrible at Bella's voice in my fictions. But I'm not here to talk about myself. Like, I said, very well written, wonderful wordchoice and voice. The only thing I would like to pick on is the transition you made between the memory and..I guess you call it the present. I got to transition in the begining, but towards the end, I got really confused because it just kinda switches with nothing indicating it. Maybe you could add something like, "I snapped out of my reverie and turned towards renesme..." That way the reader will know, without having to read on and without having to read it over, that it is switching back to the present situation.

Other than that, very good. I can't wait to read more.

Keep writing!

-Wrandom
Emmett all the way chapter 1 . 10/30/2009
I like what you have so far. There's only one problem! You need to up date, so hop to
Hans153 chapter 1 . 10/10/2009
This is really cool , please update soon would like to see where this goes. :)
Wrandom Writer chapter 1 . 10/9/2009
I like the proloug. It has me interested...I also think that you are really able to capture Bella's voice. I have a really hard time with that...

Can't wait to read more!