|Reviews for The New Warriors|
| Tears of Eternal Darkness chapter 1 . 2/23/2012
This is a really interesting plot you've got here. However, you need to slow down and add more detail to your writing. Also, try to avoid transcripting the games, it's dull and lacks originality.
If you're stuck or need help with any part of your writing, get a beta reader, there are plenty available on this site.