Reviews for Erotic Death
Rickjames196 chapter 2 . 12/4/2010
lul whore-oh dam moan is a bitch
Varvariin chapter 3 . 11/7/2010
Alright I just gotta ask this XXXX story M-rated tragedy/adventure could you tell its exact name please?
Eduardo chapter 3 . 10/24/2010
I was starting to enjoy it, but I feel a bit sorry for Moan. I mean she wasn't aware how perfect he was for her. Also I wounder if the rest of the Legendary Pokegirls would start coming to Naruto, and create the ultimate harem.

It would be nice if you contuine the story.
omally-dood chapter 3 . 10/9/2010
not a bad story it just need's a little something...

im just not sure what that something is :P

cant w8 4 more
dark lord of the bijuu chapter 3 . 10/1/2010
well it is good and keep up the good work

and hurry with the new chapter or i will rip you apart
10tailedokami16x chapter 1 . 10/1/2010
thank you finally some one else who finds disclaimer a waste of space by the way hurrry up and make the next chapter bitch and for your info if i ever meeet you i will act like my aztec ancestors and rip your heat out and eat it in front of your dying face so there you fucking mother fucker uh!
fresh prince1 chapter 3 . 9/6/2010
hope you update
False Floor chapter 1 . 8/21/2010
I don't mean to flame, because I like Naruto, but there is no way IN HELL that any human could match a legendary, jichuriki or no jinchuriki. Sukebe deliberately overpowered them. Moan would simply have seen all of Naruto's attacks coming, and if a legendary can waste a widow, I think it could survive even a point-blank headshot GIANT TWIN rasengan. Please reply, I'm interested in how you can justify this. And if you just say something like 'Naruto iz teh pwnzorz' I will hunt you down.
pooguy chapter 3 . 8/8/2010
is this abandoned?
FateBurn chapter 3 . 7/1/2010
great chapter and story but is it abandoned coz you havent updated in 7 month now? so if it isnt then try to update again please coz this is a realy good crossover between this two genders.
AAklid chapter 2 . 6/29/2010
if you want, I can beta for you
Odin's Scribe chapter 3 . 6/26/2010
Good pokegirl crosses are hard to come by. I'd be sad if this one faded into obscurity. Keep up the great work!
Soulbow109 chapter 3 . 6/17/2010
u planning one updating this story anytime soon i was really starting to like it.
narutayu FTW chapter 3 . 6/16/2010
hey just thought that id say that this id currently one of the better pokegirl stories ive read since the main character doesnt just seem to suddenly understand everything with no explaination and then goes off screwing everything remotely female.

if i had to pick something could have been improved...i'd probably have to say that naruto probably wouldn't have had sex with one of the second biggest main source of his pain and suffering (biggest being Sas-UKE (lol)) , Kyuubi, as quickly as you had described it...

and as a note for something that you should work on for the future...please try to update sometime soon...this is a good story and i dont want to see it go to waste.
holyfoxboy chapter 3 . 6/6/2010
please update soon
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