|Reviews for The Hokage's Will|
| TheGallifreyanAtheist chapter 9 . 3/1
Great story so far, and in reference to your author's note at the end I prefer Again, the first opening of FMA:Brotherhood, but my fiance loves Golden Time Lover
| skylark.all27 chapter 2 . 2/26
I like the story. Gives me more knowledge about Naruto's shinobi world (I only watched roughly 25 episodes from Naruto, then jumped right up at Shippuden) so the information helps. And please, don't listen to that one reviewer that says changing third person to first pov because that would be so annoying if you ever did. I held nothing against first pov, but it just doesn't feel right 'cause most of the books that has been published - all were written in third. Sure, it gives more feeling, but man, whenever I read "I" in paragraphs, it doesn't have the same feeling as that character it was trying tl portray. But anway, I'll be reading now.
| Scoobygirl45 chapter 15 . 2/22
:) love the story can't wait for more!
| Googlemo chapter 5 . 2/7
canon events with a little difference and author knowledge... yeah thats boring.
| Googlemo chapter 3 . 2/7
WTF?! Since when 16yo is cradle robber?! EVEN in our world it is a legit age to start relationship. In ninjaverse I guess even 12-14 gonna be legit(cause in our world we have COUNTRIES in which 12yo already legit for being married and HAVING KIDS!)
Author is really dumb with that part.
| Axcel chapter 6 . 2/6
You mention Kyuubi would be a match for at least two bijuu. Actually, canon points out that the Kyuubi is more powerful than all the other eight bijuu combined. Like, "swatting them like flies" more powerful.
| Axcel chapter 5 . 2/6
You got the comparison of Naruto and Sasuke's power wrong. Genjutsu, Naruto can break any of them due to either the Kyuubi's chakra, sage mode, or simply through sheer brute force. Ninjutsu, Naruto can sling around S-Rank jutsu all day long. Even his CLONES can toss a few S-Rank jutsu. Each. Taijutsu, Sage Mode enabled him to match Nagato's Human Path. The Sharingan gives no enhancement at all, only perception, which won't matter when your opponent is exponentially stronger than Tsunade, faster than Minato, and more durable than a Jiraiya caught peeping. Simply put, Naruto would roflstomp Sasuke if he wasn't holding back every time they fought. Naruto, in canon, always avoided hurting Sasuke, while Sasuke was trying to kill Naruto. Naruto still won, or at least tied with him. That right there, more than anything, proves Naruto is vastly more powerful than Sasuke.
| Axcel chapter 1 . 2/6
Fukasaku is probably eager to see the legendary talent Uzumaki have in sealing.
| Guest chapter 15 . 11/25/2013
| jvdb96 chapter 1 . 11/5/2013
Read this story ages ago when I got into fanfiction, almost a year later and it's always been one of the standouts, looking forward to re-reding it after losing it!
| CrystalBud chapter 6 . 10/6/2013
| CrystalBud chapter 1 . 10/5/2013
this is awesome!
| X-elemental chapter 4 . 9/27/2013
Detecting high concentrations of shy Naruto, though that was present in previous chapters as well.
"Wait, what? Shy Naruto" are you thinking. Well, that's at least what I'm thinking.
Plus it works better for the plot if he isn't trying to avoid taking the title of Hokage, the title of leader...The latter case should obviously result in Gaara becoming the leader, as former jinchiruki.
Furthermore, with Danzo having Shisui's eye, I'd have thought he would try to lead from the shadows instead of trying for coup. Genjutsu Naruto, it is is his weakness, done and he would be the shadow behind the fire shadow.
| X-elemental chapter 3 . 9/27/2013
First thing, lambast black ops however much, if you don't know who the Kages of other villages are...your intelligence sucks. How the hell does Kazekage or Elite Jounin know who the Kages are?
Secondly, there is no need to have canon outtakes, as with the Tsuchikage. I think assuming your readership reads manga is fine. If leaving it in, at least a little mention of hoping the new Hokage isn't Yondaime's son or something would be nice here. And even then...whole canon scene just to change 1 line and then ignore it further in the plot doesn't seem good to me.
However, the scene where Naruto was confronted by the Hanya clansmen was good confrontation of him, as it puts people willing to die to kill against his ideal of peace. Similarly, there should be little more Naruto POV, not third person on his decision with Sasuke(using POV instead of third person to show the thoughts can really help empathize with a character, and using lot of dialogue makes for fast-paced story). A note of this is Naruto may not know the symbol for Hanya clan, though. Albeit he used Fuuma Shuriken surprisingly well, despite not being trained in it's use. I'd have expected to use wind chakra/rasengan to spin it/generate Futon:rasengan.
Fourth, friendly reminder that the age of consent, at least in the US (since I don't think you used the islamic country such as Morocco for your example) is waived if the person is considered an adult before the law/married - in fact, the whole "ruined for marriage" meme is the reason for the more than doubling of the limit in the 19th century - and sadly, still sufficient for itŦ. I wouldn't usually mention this, but it is cliched to hell in fanfiction, it happened twice in one chapter, and most of all, whatever the line may be it whenever it is mentioned it tends to be treated annoyingly often as absolute border of sex and platonic in fanfiction, which is...really breaking to the suspension of disbelief.
Ŧ Yeah, they (and everyone, 'beaten wife' is meme for a reason) can be abused too, but there is proof done by universities of Canada that it certainly isn't something caused just by the act itself. Albeit the meme of it is self-perpetuating and having one treated as if there is something wrong with them is worse than treating them badly due being, say, short or ugly. "But you drank alcohol once!"*
* Of course, I personally have since I first heard of it considered law of "having sex with you is illegal" mix between horribly offensive and nonsensical since who would tell¥?
¥ Then proceeded with it. Reverse psychology ftw, no wonder the US has the most teenage pregnancies.
| duchessme chapter 15 . 9/10/2013
such an interestng story but are you goin to continue?cant help but want for more.