Reviews for You're Mine
StormDragon666 chapter 1 . 4/26
That ending took me by surprise so strongly I literally gasped out loud when I saw I'd run out of text to scroll through. I spent half the day reading this story, on and off. I don't think I've read your stories in about 2 years. I only read one or two of them. I remember a story where Sasuke was a chubby Italian cop, Ino was a very muscular lesbian from Iowa and Sakura her tiny tiny tiny "pixie" girlfriend. I THINK that was you. If not, lol my mistake those descriptions may sound out of the blue if you weren't the one who made them.

I see your profile is fuuuuullllll of shit to read and I'm open to a million and one pairings so I could read just about any of them. And I give an appreciative nod to that big note in your profile about writing fics to negate the bad ending of the manga. Maybe it's plain silly to think like fanfictions are some kind of written weapon like that, but I respect the idea of you wanting to negate the negativity of the canon storyline by putting out better fiction for others to read. Something crappy was inspiration for you to turn out a positive product, and that's great.

This was the first story I clicked on, randomly, and I had no idea who all these children were so I clicked on some other stories to get some bits of info that would help me but got unexpected involved in a few other stories. I read Rebound and texted one of my friends about it (she once made an offhand joke about a million slash pairings involving Naruto so everytime I come across a new one I shove it in her face with an "lol here's another!" so I told her about the LeeNaru.) I read parts of Bonded, includings its "Joining" chapter which was the sex-fest that I read specifically to find out if Raiden was an m-preg baby from that one tryst, but I got unexpectedly engrossed in the fictional character sex and damn it's like I'm 16 all over again. I also read parts of New Bonds, realized Itachi and Gaara was a pairing here, holy shit, you're crossing over into a TV show I barely know about called Charmed and making some of its characters a notable part of the Naruto universe and society, like HOLY shit, was intrigued by the story Take Me's summary multiple times but decided I had waaaaay too many tabs open already and I had already spent most of my Sunday evening staring at all these stories, can't handle any more tonight. I read and read, mostly hoping to find references to Hanabi and Kaito's ages, because I began this story and saw mentions of the age gap, but didn't know what the age gap exactly was.

Basically I read all of that so I could read THIS STORY. I saw its summary and again my inner 16-year-old girl read that brief summary and remembered all the gushing about "possessive boyfriends" back in the day and my curiosity turned me into a zombie and I clicked on it. Honestly I was expecting a story where this Kaito person became unhealthily obsessed with Hanabi, who tried to either fix his mental problems or flee from him and the situation would be messily dealt with. Had no idea I was jumping into a warped albeit happier version of ninja Romeo and Juliet, successful teen love story. So that surprised me, but I enjoyed the ride the whole way through. The things that stood out to me the most about it is that Hanabi didn't really know what sex was despite being seventeen, which speaks to how isolated and hidden she is from obvious facts of live by her oppressive family, or that she's just...dumb. She had a rather rotten attitude about her that made me think "This is what older adults think teenagers are, they think all teens are THIS hateful and aggressive and whiny." So her characterization as THAT, towards her family, was very solid. Next, I was repeatedly thrilled to see how all the Uchiha children gathered around Kaito to help him, didn't mock him or make penis jokes as he cried about what happened in front of them, they even gathered in a circle around their new sister-in-law, holding weapons against aggressive adults. I don't even know how old all of them are. Could have been 13-year-olds holding that circle, could be 5-year-olds. I think at least one of the kids was only 5. Shouta I think. The visual impression I'm going ot take away form this fic is A) wild sex descriptions and B) children surrounding pregnant teen, holding knives against hateful, armed adults in front of a village gate at dawn.

Anyway it's almost 1am where I am and this was a fun read. Thanks for all your work you put out so prolifically, I'm sure I'll come back to your profile a couple more times to see what else you got up your sleeve.
asdfghjjkl chapter 1 . 7/4/2012
WOAH! So did the baby survive? Well, that remains a mystery :/.
missmonti chapter 1 . 8/17/2011
This was so intense! I absolutely love the way you write Hanabi and Kaito. Their love is so precious. Now I'm off to TTB! :D
zaradan chapter 1 . 8/12/2010
Wow, this one was a real tear jerker. beutifuly written, the love and sadness in this story is almost palpable. The parts with kaito and hanabi kinda remind me of the first time i made love. i hope your writting career is fruitfull, fullfilling, and fun.
InspireInspireInspire chapter 1 . 7/6/2010
The ending sent chills down my spine...I'm glad Hiashi is dead though. Did the baby survive? Poor Kaito. and Hanabi
Addiena-Saffir chapter 1 . 3/5/2010
Wow now THIS is what i call a one-shot! awesome job chickie, wow. Although for all you young ones out there let this be a lesson to ya. if not abstinence than SAFETY use your heads ppls
pure-white-angel chapter 1 . 2/3/2010
Really awesome oneshot!
BugMe15 chapter 1 . 1/16/2010
That was romantic, chilling, scary, drama filled. Just my kinda oneshot :)
Kayos9 chapter 1 . 11/2/2009
*screem* NO DONT STOP THERE! THATS NOR FAIR *cry* plz post TTB soon im dieing here!

PS if you haddn't gessed by now i loved this oneshot!
xXxItaHinaSasuXxX chapter 1 . 10/19/2009
i know this is a late review but i actually had lots to this weekend, not having the chance to read until now.

anyway...

I CAN"T WAIT UNTIL TTB!

really, you need to get that out soon. i just love kaito and hanabi. they really stuck it out well in the beginning and when they were finally together i just knew that hanabi would be making demands lol! it's good that kaito got bolder though, i really liked him in here.

naruto and kakashi make me laugh xD. at least kakashi knows when and how to handle situations such as the ones in this fic.

i really enjoyed the talk naruto and kaito had and then what he told hanabi when he said he'd kill for her, that really made me laugh for some reason. and it's good that raiden still does things for kaito but every time hanabi or love in general is involved he gets into some deep trouble.

i do feel for the way the pregnancy was handled and the fact that her father reacted like that. i really hope the baby lives and i'm glad hiashi's dead. one less 'meanie' to deal with :)

i didn't like the way naruto and sasuke reacted. they're always so violent when it comes to raiden and aimi, they may be strong but they're not even ten yet. i wish aimi would have nearly taken off naruto's ear by holding him in the air to let him know how it felt for her brother. and what was sasuke thinking slapping aimi like that? i know she won't forget that anytime soon.

the uchiha's never cease to amaze and amuse me and they did all through the fic. you really do a great job with them. i can't wait to read about their stories.

well i hope you update soon and, again, loved the fic _
TheHypocrite chapter 1 . 10/19/2009
well that was an extremely depressing ending. gay, wrong, and gay on many, may levels, i dont know why you people always make naruto gay, oh and btw sasuke is a traturous ass, itachi is about 10x worse, gaara will never go gay, but other than that paragraph of criticisim, and the fact that kito or whatever his name is acts like a robot during sex, "can i see your tits? can i se your pussy?" god, no sense of romance whatsoever
roxxihearts chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
yeah thats right D got what was coming to him. oh ym there was so much in this chapter! i cant even cover it all xO plus im not even up to reviewing soo...rain check?

Short and sweet: it was awesome i was enthralled from beginning to end.
Thuggy Ninjette chapter 1 . 10/15/2009
I loved this. :D

I absolutley can;t wait for "Ties that Bind!"
Shodaime chapter 1 . 10/15/2009
Hiashi deserved to suffer...like seeing the baby born and gain Sharingan before Itachi did him in. Is the baby alright? Again another master piece of writing that keeps you reading from start to finish. Good work.
poluskinha chapter 1 . 10/15/2009
Welcome back,

Thank you again for writing to us. First, I must say that I haven't read the story yet, but I saw that there was only 1 review so I rushed to make my contribution hehehehhehe

I'm at work so it will be hard to read, and I know that once I dive into Naruto, it won't be easy to come out again, so I'll wait until I'm home at 7pm (in about 10hrs time).

Ja ne

Love,

P.
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