Reviews for Pyramid Rising
tangledfire blac chapter 1 . 12/14/2012
I LOVE this story! You have to continue it! I even drew u fan art! ... I have not uploaded it yet but I will soon! And then I will draw another! So please please continue!
ichigofan01 chapter 11 . 8/24/2011
fjuhjkifdsdfb that was so clever!Gah Cloud is so evil ;A; i hope you udate soon xxxand i hope your okay 3
Ivorychainedlegend chapter 11 . 8/13/2011
Ooe IDBI! So unexpected! SC! 0o0! Cloud tricked poor luxy and now he killed! OMG!
St00pendus chapter 10 . 8/9/2011
For some reason it wouldn't let me review your latest chapter... but damn.

I saw the 'updated' thing and about died.

Then I read it. Actually died.

And here I am in heaven enjoying the 24/hour internet access. Please. Please. PLEASE. Continue this.
AbyssRayne chapter 11 . 6/17/2011
I truely have to say that I think this has been the best fanfic I have read as of yet on this site. I mean yeah, the others were pretty good but the way you describe everything and seem to have planned out all of the characters is amazing. I would love to read your original before you changed it to this, I'm sure it's just as good or maybe better?

Keep it up and I have to say congratulations. You seem to take great care in your work.

There are a few errors but hey everyone makes them and I know I do.
VinXChase 4-eva chapter 11 . 5/20/2011
Chase: AHHH! WHY?

Vin: Babe relax...

Chase: But it's been so long since she updated and I want to read the next chapter! Damn Cliffies!

Vin: Babe go eat pizza and I'll finish up this review...

Chase: -sniff- fine...

Vin: I can't honestly tell you how many times he's re read this and he never read the last chapter you posted. I hope you update sometime soon or I'm gonna have a cranky uke on my hands. Thanks for posting this, and we'll be waiting for the next chapter eagerly.
St00pendus chapter 11 . 5/17/2011
For a 'fanfic' this story is.. well.. how do I say this properly without making an ass of myself.. IT'S PRETTY DAMN AMAZING. Really attention grabbing and what not.. I'm sorry to hear that 'some things happened'. Though I am not entirely sure what those things were. :C I hope they get better. -complete stranger feels creeperish- yeah I'm going over here now.
Mishieftress chapter 11 . 4/3/2011
I was so pleased to see this had been updated! It still makes my heart speed along side with Luxord. So very ecxiting and thrilling!

However, may I suggest a quick beta-scanning, I noticed some small mistakes such as sky being spelled shy or "Cloud then removed one of the sheathed knives and handed offered it too Luxord"

Those are simple mistakes however and shows how much work you put into this :3 I cannot wait to read more.
spoke chapter 11 . 4/3/2011
Glad to see you back, and I hope everything's okay with you.

The editing was a good idea, I can tell there's an improvement there!

Um. I can't think of anything to say, about what I think. I like it! I'm interested to see how Luxord's going to react if he's finally killed someone.

Cloud is amazingly creepy.

Looking forward to reading what happens next. :)
HeartlessDoppleganger chapter 11 . 4/3/2011
Did luxord just kill someone? thats what it looks like. at least from what I read. then again he could have just wounded the man. Awesome btw.

I cant wait for someone to find out about luxord (namely his love interest Xemnas). props 4 Clouds personality 2.

R u updating soon? I hope so. I heart this story. Very morbid and dark with a beautifully weaven together plot to create a wonderful story.

PLZ UPDATE SOON! 8D
NexarkXIII chapter 11 . 4/2/2011
O-o He finally killed someone! it was bound to happen sooner or later! Can't wait to read the expression on Xigbars face when he finds out. Same with Aqua and Axel. Heh his home was turned into a giant prison cell. Luxord is going to go through even more mental trauma now that he actually did what he said he'd never do wether it was an accident or not. And lol about cloud not being able to speak english well XD.

Luxord is breaking. Now that he's killed someone I wonder if they'll finally make him a member and tattoo him. :). He's not gonna like that very much and if anyone he knows that's nit part of pyramid sees the tattoo.

Luxy is gonna be forced to do more now as well. How well his mental state be affected by it I wonder. Still he doesn't really have a choice in the matter.

It is now impossible for him to escape. Even if he did, pyramid is everywhere and he'd be caught quickly. Luxy realizes this too.

Very good character portration with telling the readers how he can't handle all of this when it's in his face and he is able to while blindfolded and deaf. It shows he prefers to live a lie rather than be forced to see the world for what it truly is.

Amazing chapter, please update soon.
hyakadog chapter 11 . 4/1/2011
Sorry if my review is long. I re-read this entire fic before you updated and was wondering: is Saix still alive? Also, you mentioned this story was complete and there was another version of it?

NOW the review!

Epic epic epic. I wish I could favorite this twice. I couldn't help but feel, the items Cloud was collecting in Luxord's place, is he planing something with them? Also can't help but ask, does Luxord... have a thing for Xemnas? It could just be me, but...

Now Cloud:

My God. You genius. You evil, twisted, genius. Sickining, horrifying, absolutely... I can't begin to describe how fantastic that was. Seriously, poor Luxord. I remember thinking 'Why the blindfold, why the earplugs, sensory training maybe? It doesn't seem like it' and then the reveal at the end, just 'Wait a sec' re-read, 'Oh God'. The shocks and twists in your stories always excite me and wish there was more to read.

In other words, please for the love of everything update as soon as conveniently possible!
hyakadog chapter 10 . 1/27/2011
Update. I beg of you. This is one of the most well written plots I've seen in fanfiction. Like, it's worthy of being published if the names are changed. Please please finish.
Chaseblaire chapter 10 . 11/27/2010
This is a fantastic story. I love the new development and can't wait to read the next chapter!
catastrophic-art chapter 10 . 10/30/2010
I seriously just found this fic yesterday, and I probably would have reviewed each and every chapter, if I didn't keep telling myself, "After the next chapter!" xD I am seriously addicted to this fic, it's so well done. I can't even describe into words about the awesome-ness of this entire story. But I shall try!

It's really perfectly written, great details and very descriptive scenes. Since I am used to reading gore, I never really shy away from it. Anyway, you really understand Luxord as a character, in my opinion. He is really intelligent and thinks things through all the time. You can understand his thought process and his beliefs towards killing. Sometimes, I think "Luxord, don't you want to live? You have to kill!" Then at other times (like with Saix) I'm thinking, "Lux, no! You can't do it!" Then I remember Xigbar, and I'm contradicting myself all the time! xD

Also, Xigbar is really well portrayed in this as well; he's really sadistic and interesting to watch (or read :P) how he handles things. I kinda can't wait for any romance to happen! (Hopeless fangirl here! ;D ) Even if this story is AU, if this whole plot existed, I wouldn't imagine it any other way. :) You've seriously outdone yourself in every single chapter, and I am DYING to read more! (I think I might actually read all of those chapters again... ;] )

As for a little constructive criticism... There really isn't any I can think of at the moment! :D Yay for you!

I hope you update soon, I am really excited to read more of this fantastic story. :)
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