Reviews for Ambient |
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DragonTurtle3 chapter 14 . 7/12/2020 I don't understand why the the four people who were attacked don't team up with Susan to publicly expose The Defenders. On their own they probably wouldn't be convincing enough, but combined they're a group that's so disparate, people wouldn't think they're biased or concocting a lie. Harry is a rogue, Pansy is unaffiliated, Blaise is an Unspeakable, while Romilda herself is an ex-Defender who could spill TONS of dirt. If Narcissa were to try discrediting Romilda as an unreliable murderer, it would just reflect badly on the Defenders employing such a person. The person they would be accusing of destroying the neighborhood is Penelope, whose talent for Destructive Warding isn't hidden knowledge. Is the implication supposed to be that Wizarding Britain is so corrupt and hopeless they'll just follow the most capable murderer? Because that's not the impression this chapter had given me at all. The destruction caused he's so off the charts compared to everything else, it seems like most everyone is horrified by it, even though every magical person in left in the UK has become numbed to violence. Even the most cold-hearted and practical of wizards who support blood harvesting probably would not like what Penelope did. Blood that could been protecting homes for months was wasted on a giant crater. |
Guest chapter 18 . 6/7/2020 that was a really fun read, good job! a shame it's unfinished, and on such a cliffhanger (?) vicarious living in a fucked up world like that, was refreshing |
AnthonyR89 chapter 16 . 5/28/2020 ...you had Pansy staying with Susan Bones. |
Eating Upside Down chapter 18 . 8/30/2019 You know, after rereading this story after almost a decade, I have to say I don't trust Romilda. Her rescue and story is just too conviently set up. Not to mention she's very smart and talented, enough to be groomed to beMalfoy's heir. Big picture, if she's a part of a big scheme of Malfoy's to control Potter, than I wouldn't be surprised. Already we see Malfoy cutting away the people Harry relies on, making Vane more treasured. The real question is whose side Vane is on? |
Crownworthy chapter 10 . 6/4/2018 The story seems to consist mostly of loosely connected action scenes, interspersed with noire narration and banter. A lot of this may be explained by the Noire setting and tropes you employ, but I still feel there would be more impact if you slowed down the pace, or at least put more character development between the action scenes. The characterization of Harry is excellent. He feels detached and desensitized, as he should, having witnessed the sociopolitical changes, and being under constant psychological pressure. The other characters are also mostly decently written, with understandable motivations. I don't really get why apparating doesn't work, as it seems to me that it is internal, rather than external, magic, but I'm not going to argue the point. Different interpretations, and all that jazz. It's a decent story over all, and I'll keep reading for now. |
Nathaniel19851911 chapter 18 . 1/11/2018 this is probably my favorite story, because of the depth of magick mechanics, and the whole ambient absence abd blood stealing, i ran a D&D campaign years ago with a scenario just like this! |
N0s0l chapter 18 . 7/27/2017 This is an awesome story. If this is the end, it is both evil and awesome at the same time, but I would really like to know how the whole thing ends! |
ImaginativeFury chapter 3 . 3/26/2017 lost any interest when you have Harry go back on his word about not caring a fuck. |
FreelanceBum chapter 18 . 10/7/2016 I love this story, and curse you for not finished it. :( |
FreelanceBum chapter 17 . 10/7/2016 Should have killed her regardless. |
FreelanceBum chapter 16 . 10/7/2016 Aw, fuck beans. |
FreelanceBum chapter 14 . 10/7/2016 Hallway ravishings are nice. |
FreelanceBum chapter 12 . 10/7/2016 Oh no, I like Pansy. I don't think I have ever typed that before. |
FreelanceBum chapter 6 . 10/6/2016 I wonder why he hates her so much. Also I'm a big HG fan, but I'm somehow suspecting it isn't going to happen here... |
FreelanceBum chapter 5 . 10/6/2016 Thats dangerous, if his blood is as hazardous as it sounds. |