Reviews for Desert Flowers
Bloody-hate chapter 1 . 6/1/2016
Love it
DarkEcoFreak chapter 1 . 3/4/2013
Oh no… I think you've just made me start to like JakxSeem!
xxwriter389xx chapter 1 . 3/27/2010
i read this a while ago and forgot to review but i loved it so much and jak and seem would be an awesome couple!
Kusivirta chapter 1 . 12/12/2009

I'm not sure if "false god" fits in here. For whom is the god false?


Lovely detail here.


I think the word "ass" should be changed. I see no reason for using a profane word.


I would change this to either "miracle, caught" or "was caught". The current form is a bit vague.




A bit odd. I would rephrase this, I'm not sure how, though.


This one feels out of place after #14.


Another great one.


Very nice.


I had to chuckle at this.


"refuses of betray" makes no sense to me. Should "betray" be in the "-ing" form?


"to try as shockingly sugary and sweet" means that Jak tried it, being shockingly sugary and sweet himself. This makes no sense to me. Is this a typo?


"writ" should be "written", right? Otherwise, I like this one.


Using "She pushed him" twice feels like a bit too much.


"blessedly" is a very odd word, I would use something else.


I'm not sure what you're trying to express with the word "unknowingly". Is Jak playing unknowingly, or Seem smiling without Jak knowing?


I wouldn't use angels in the J&D universe.


"milkbone"? "moonflesh"? Uh... These feel quite corny.


I like this.

All in all, I enjoyed reading this. Jak/Seem is always refreshing to read.
Gishin Jal chapter 1 . 10/25/2009
Very cute. I agree completely. There is a seriously lacking support of the Jak x Seem pairing. My personal favorites of this challenge would be #7, #11, and #46.
Jamoo34 chapter 1 . 10/24/2009
Simply put: Wonderful.

I loved every one of the setences to you put out, I really wish that you could do more!
the masochist and the sadist chapter 1 . 10/24/2009
i think this is, simply put, amazing if I do say so myself