Oh, still some trouble with "then" and "than" I also noticed some spelling errors and at least one confusion with "the" and "they"

Interesting concept you came up with here. I like it 3

Great updates. Hope you update soon

Hi, I went on to your adult fanfic site after reading about it in your profile. Usually when I get caught in a story, I can't stop. In fact, I went on to finish Trial of Fire. I prefer the sequel. I think Kinomi's a really strong character but her actions at some points were not very rational. Her showing off of her powers and the other's in chapter 26 was unnecessary and rash. With their parents and supporters there, what could Yamamoto Taichou do to them realistically? But in any case, I enjoy reading about the HMK's exploits and would love to follow up on more of their adventures if you decide to continue.

As for Gin, well, we have this Chinese saying '一步错，步步错’ which means that if you take one wrong step, every step after that will be wrong too. That's why he came to that sad end.

i have to say when i first started reading this i was massively depressed, but this last chapter was AWESOME, Grimmjow rocks! And yay for Stark! Please continue! and i'm glad to hear this will have a happy ending, though poor Matsumoto and Isane. :(

I don't think I'll have the stomach to read the adult version. Terrible things happen and get reported in the news everyday. Why read something that gives you intricate details of how it happened? Nevertheless, I find myself drawn to their plight. I feel glad that Unohana is with the most decent of the lot. And for the rest of them, horror can't begin to describe how I feel for the situation they are in. Since you promised a happy ending, I will read on to find out.

Afterthought: Gin Ichimaru ought to be drawn and quartered. All the hints in the manga pointed to an emotional attachment with Matsumo. Yet he did nothing and felt nothing when she was raped.

hi!

wow the story has evolved quite well. :)

i'm really curious about what grimm does on the tests. can't wait to read that one.

stark is just being stark but i kinda wanna see/read more from him. like opinions or just say something.

what's happening to shiro-kun is kinda scary but pretty well thought of thing.

hope you update soon.

thanks.

So far so good. I was a bit hesitant on the rape bit. I see one small error, you continue to use "then" rather than "than" be careful of that. it stands out.

Interesting story-I'm excited to see what happens!

I read the first chapter and you had me hooked. So I went to Adultfan and to my delight I noticed the story there was complete. I loved this fic so much I read it straight through and stayed up to 8am XD

I really, really enjoyed this story. I'm gonna start reading the 2nd one on Adultfan today :)

hi!

i actually have mixed feelings about this one.

i like it because of the character variation. they have different responses to the whole thing and would like to see how that develops. ruk is my fave character in bleach. :D and it seems grim has something planned. so, things might get fun soon. :P

... but let me just say, the king guys sucks ! i pity ran and i dont like that situation. also, poor shiro-kun...

moving on, i don't like it coz it's kinda weird. : the whole thing is like something a crazy and repressed person would think about. :) but i still read it so maybe i'm also pretty crazy and repressed.

don't know if you plan to continue this one but if you are hope you update soon. :)

thanks.