|Reviews for Queen of Sorrow|
| Anivla01 chapter 39 . 3/8
Fantastic. Loved it.
| Asgar chapter 1 . 7/11/2013
Having enjoyed this story already quite some time ago, and re-read it again not too long ago, I would just like to point out that it now has a page on TVtropes so that it gets the attention it deserves.
| Caimthehero chapter 39 . 3/28/2013
I would like to say that this was a great fic. I would like to say it has been an entertaining read. I would like to put this in my favorites, but sometimes we just don't get what we want. A warning for anyone reading reviews that hasn't read this fic.
DO NOT READ THIS FIC if you believe in a just world, like fire emblem 9 or 10, or are generally a happy person.
This isn't a tragedy. The only tragedy in this story is how wonderful you write that it kept me reading despite how awful of a story it turned into (seriously when I saw your profile and found English wasn't your first language I was astounded). A tragedy is when the villain (Elincia) commits an irrovokable mistake (the whole story is full of them) caused by her fatal flaw. God I wanted her to die so badly. Completely broken, her closest friends dead, and the icing on the top the city of Melior in flames as Crimea falls to destruction due to her own betrayals. I was honestly happy that Geoffrey died that scum sucking slime. Because of the AU nature I can't cry OOC moments despite the fact that they barely resembled their counterparts halfway through the story (with exceptions to the non horrid members of your cast). "I am the most horrible person in the world." I couldn't have said it better myself. She has truly climbed to the height of Villain. I think your Elincia has earned more hate from me than Umbridge from Harry Potter, Joffrey from Fire and Ice, Commodus from Gladiator, and Ohgi from Code Geass. I'm not sure what you intended anymore but when your protagonist surpasses the most hated characters I can think of... the only person left I can compare her to is Hitler. But at least he didn't try to make you see his pov. No he just massacred people on whims, kind of like your Elincia.
To finish this review you said that their wasn't a message. You can't be that dumb. When someone writes they convey either what they think, feel, or believe about something. It doesn't matter what the content is or even if its satire. You had a pretty clear message alright and in all honesty I absolutely loathe it. If this seems overly harsh I would 'like' to apologize but I won't, for one reason. When anyone picks up this fic they are putting a certain amount of trust in you to lead them either on a bare minimum of a mildly entertaining story. I did this for well over 200000 words and was deeply invested in this story. For you to just blindside your readers like that isn't fair to them. Your description should be changed. It should be more along the lines of "What constitutes true evil, do you want to see the characters you love brutalized in a senseless fashion, do you like seeing the bad guy win, if so give queen of sorrow a shot. It's not a tragedy though, bad guys lose in a tragedy"
| Caimthehero chapter 36 . 3/28/2013
wow you seriously are heartless. you succeeded in making Elincia, a true bastion of what a lord should be, into an utter cunt. How would you honestly expect anyone to root for Elincia after something like this. Anyone who would root for her is as twisted as the Elincia you wrote and I feel truly sorry for them. You are the king for the start of darkness trope.
| Caimthehero chapter 34 . 3/28/2013
Response to the AN. Surely you jest. I cannot think of anyone who would support Elincia at this point unless they love villain protagonists. You have crushed the possibilities of anyone wanting Elincia to win over Ike. I thought that was what you meant to do but with this note I'm not sure anymore. Granted I think more people would vote for a reconciliation but I sincerely doubt that will be the end of your story. You're writing style betrays your planned ending in that respect. Your world is destined to fall into even greater despair. If I haven't made myself clear on who I want to win (although I doubt he will) its Ike. I hope he gives her a juggernaut pimp slap to the face that makes her realize how bat shit insane she was. Great Fic though ;)
| Caimthehero chapter 33 . 3/28/2013
There it is. The final nail in the coffin. There will be no happy or even bittersweet ending for this fic. Damn I was hoping for at least a bittersweet ending. Your writing style seems to echo the unfair, cruel nature of the world. It is pessimistic to the point of despair. It seems you believe idealism warrants destruction as such from the beginning to this very point it has. I disagree with you on that. My own personal belief is that as the characters are put through hell they deserve a happier ending. Elincia seems to be one of the few exceptions to that rule. In all honesty though I'm not sure if you intended her to land in complete monster territory but you just took away the one person that could have saved her from it. You did what you set out to by making her a true villain protagonist.
| Caimthehero chapter 31 . 3/28/2013
Hell motherfucking yeah. Ike with a sacred blade again able to slash his opponents from a distance and basically become a one man army. I guess my previous question has been answered about ragnell. One last shot at redemption. Will Elincia heed Ike, I certainly hope so.
| Caimthehero chapter 28 . 3/28/2013
And there fall Elincia to complete monster territory or right on the cusp. Love can no longer redeem her especially from Geoffrey of all people. He is nothing more than a weapon to be pointed no better than Zelgius or possibly Bertram from their point of view. No the last chance to save this story rests with Ike and his promise to return.
A problem I'm having with this story is the no amount of mourning for characters other than those close to Elincia. You killed Oscar, Taureneo, and others but Ike doesn't even reflect on it. Ike reflected not only on the death of his father but the black knight too. For him not to reminisce about those who lost their lives in his service has me at a loss.
Also I don't know why but you are inspiring a lot of fic ideas for me. The most recent one now is what would have happened if Ike had stayed as a noble instead of giving up his title. I may have to start outlining this once I finish your story.
| Caimthehero chapter 25 . 3/28/2013
hohoho a force is being assembled. Pray tell will Gallia and Phoenics enter in the fray with a renewed chance to strike at Begnion
| Caimthehero chapter 24 . 3/28/2013
wow and down goes a character, a few of them actually. The only thing I would like to know is how big of a number superiority did daein have? Ike has beaten odds worse than 3 to 1 so to have the maiden take him down must have really put him against a stacked opponent. With the exception of Nailah or some heavy bonus exp sinking none of the dawn brigade could touch a Greil Mercenary in the game. To have Aran be able to last more than one exchange against Ike is laughable considering the huge power gap. I am disappointed that you forgot about Ragnell however. That is Ike's famous blade and with the death of Sanaki I can only assume you had Ike keep it instead of giving it back to her like in canon if memory serves. Actually even with Ettard as well he cleaves through the highest defenses. I'm guessing you tried to make Ike more life like but now he pales in comparison to his video game counterpart. It's not really a Mary Sue if Ike was that overpowered to start with.
| Caimthehero chapter 22 . 3/28/2013
Sweet Baby Jesus a chapter with Volke point of view. It's like fire emblem mixed with assassin's creed, pure awesome. Hell i might make that fic just because of this chapter. It is truly spectacular and is probably my favorite chapter up to date. Although I am very curious about why Volke needs so much gold. It can't just be because he was greedy. I'm under the impression that fifty thousand could support a family for a decade so two million. I shudder at the possibilities. I do hope you intend to elaborate on Volke's need for money. Overall a perfect chapter keep going with the great fic
| Caimthehero chapter 18 . 3/28/2013
Yes finally something goes right. I've been waiting for this moment for awhile. Now the question is will Ike be able to right all of the wrongs. He isn't a legend without reason. Also on a sidenote I love leanne
| Caimthehero chapter 17 . 3/28/2013
The plot thickens. Zelgius revealed I like this twist. Just one question though how is Ike the secondary character in this. You should change it to Geoffrey unless in the future chapters Ike becomes the main character. As of right now I'm thoroughly disappointed with the amount of Ike in a story that supposed to be co-starring him
| Caimthehero chapter 14 . 3/28/2013
The story just gets more depressing. While a tragedy is definitely sad and in some points even despairing there is normally a bit of hope. A hope that somehow someway a character can be redeemed. Ultimately it ends to increase the tragedy it is still nice to see. You haven't really had any hope in your story. Let Elincia get a true victory for once without despicable means. Then have the world fall around her as she does so. In this case it wouldn't be her steeling herself off from the world like in your story (which is still a bit OOC despite the slack I'm giving for alternate universe). You would then be using her fatal flaws of naivety and mercy even at the cost of herself. The game's Elincia would not have Bastian killed or Renning sent to Izuka before the herons. That was a little bit of bad writing with Elincia making that offer. It could've been one of your hope spots to bring Renning back in all his glory.
| Caimthehero chapter 10 . 3/28/2013
Kinda dark but strangely entertaining. You definitely have a handle on showing depression. Damn it where is Ike when you need him. What kind of half ass hero is he?