Reviews for Dimensions change |
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![]() ![]() ![]() New chapter? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story has potential, but it seriously need work on grammar. I am guessing that you are not a native speaker of English because the way you structure your sentences reminds me of Technical manuals that have been translated into English. Your vocabulary is quite good, and so is your word choice. A good beta reader [editor] would help you improve your written English. Fanfiction does have a list of people that will beta read your work and offer suggestions on grammar, etc. I hope you will find time to update this. Seren |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am enjoying your story and am looking forward to more. Tracy |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like this. Hope you are alive and well and that you will update this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am a little confused with this chapter, you need to put breaks or * when scenes change, as well. Maybe reread and check the flow. You have a base story, just make it less confusing. Keep writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This chapter has me very confused. I could not follow the story line at all. Please clarify the story and check your spelling. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am an NCIS fan as well as Stargate and its great that you have combined them both. This story sounds like it will be interesting. You need to check your spelling. Hope you update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This seems like it will be a good story, but you really need a beta. There is serious misspellings and grammar that makes reading this harder than it should be. |