|Reviews for 40k: ToyHammer|
| cjc chapter 12 . 1/10/2010
hahahahaha simpsons referance keep it up I hope they rescue the cultist even though she slightly deserved what she got for listening to chaos lies.
| cjc chapter 12 . 1/10/2010
hey this is great I am following a similar story called 'Minihammer' but now I am following this as well. I think these stories are excelent and I will continue to follow the updates with gustoe.
As for the story might I put forward Micheal having another vision and getting worried by the stories that the other factions will tell him of chaos. Then he finally gives in and lets the factions in his house loose against chaos.
ALL PRAISE THE EMPEROR!
GUIDE YOURSELF INTO HIS LIGHT!
| Kikassou chapter 11 . 1/6/2010
Great job so far, keep it coming lol. You really have done the 'arrogant Eldar' very well. And are we seeing something between Michael and Zara? That could be awkward, in a good way. Loved the rat hunter haha. Now it's time for nitpicking *sigh*. How were Michael's friends so subdued by the WH40k guys, couldn't they just totaly own them like he did?
| HAL-9001 chapter 11 . 1/4/2010
During Michael's physics epiphany, it seems that the inequality bracket between the two EK's disappeared - it's probably a "forbidden symbol" like the percentage sign. I would spell it out - i.e. "my kinetic energy was greater than Not-Zara's."
Minor formatting snag aside, well done.
| cjc chapter 5 . 1/4/2010
I liked this chapter and the omske well done.
| Silvertie chapter 11 . 1/4/2010
A most delicious chapter. Loved the awkward situation... and how you resolved it with "she's an impostor".
I'm kinda at a loss for words here, so I will comment a'la eBay.
Excellent chapter! Exquisite prose! Would read again A
| Devious Dave02 chapter 11 . 1/3/2010
One of the best and funniest storys I have ever read, well done.
Look forward to the next chapter.
| FishGod chapter 11 . 1/3/2010
Gold! so are all Titan sized humans psykers to a degree. At least enough to make a daemon portal. Continue
| Skylar Silverwind chapter 11 . 1/2/2010
Well, this chapter has been strange and weird. I really hope you won't go too far on the mystical side of things, its all too easy to really screw things up that way.
Still, the inner soul part was all fine, although the fake-Zara thing rattled me for a bit. Damn if that wasn't squicky. Did a good job on the fight scene too.
Really threw me off with the humor at the end. Good job, that ain't a easy thing for an author to do. I'll be watching out for that again. :D
Anyway, usual praises: your good, your great, more please, etc.
And I will definitely be contributing to the omakes. See you next chapter!
| Windswept Chaos chapter 10 . 1/1/2010
This has been... intriguing, I must admit. I have vastly enjoyed the story, from some of my favorite fluff to the rampant humor available. I like the twist of Michael being a psyker, and a relatively powerful one at that. I am enjoying many of the little things you are throwing in. Overall, it is very well written - very few grammatical msitakes that I have seen, an overarching knowledge of the topic you are writing about, originality even though dealing with a precreated world - everything that a good fanfic should have!
I must admit that I am a tiny bit sad at the lack of either of my armies being present (I play Space Wolves - from before the new codex! - and Tanith First and Only), but I can understand that. After all, we all have our preferences.
I only have a few things that I did notice. First of all, from the Necron chapter - the race were originally known as Necrontyr, not Necrotyr. Plus, their first sight into the galaxy beyond their home was not the C'tan, but the old ones, whom they envied for their long life spans and ridiculous technology. The C'tan, being beings that eat hope, stalked this and made their proposal to the Necrontyr, through the Deceiver itself. Of course, the bit about being soulless and slaves for eternity was kind of... left out.
My only other issue is that I find it unlikely that the other races would band together for an Ork Threat. All of the races know that outside of an immesnse WAGH, the Orcs are too self-destructive to pose a threat. Any one of those races could have responded to the threat with the numbers they held present, and brought it down to a manageable level. I just don't see them banding together for anything short of a Nid invasion, Chaos incursion, or the reawakening of another Necron home world, which most of those races wouldn't even know about (even most of the humans).
This is the second "40k mini size in our world" story that I have read, and they both have massive similarities. Humanity and Eldar seem to take the forefront, with the Tau being a close second. Orcs are the initial threat, and later Chaos reveals itself - specifically, Tzeentch, on both occasions. I suppose Tzeentch makes the most sense - such forces of Chaos would be the least likely to be a rampant destruction upon the area. One would just spout the HIV by glancing, the other would find their way into the attic and go sextastic with the Sisters, and the final group would be GHAOIGFHDGHSJG BLOODBLOODBLOODBLOOD.
I guess, ultimately, that I can find... almsto nothing to critique in the story so far. Amazing work. Keep it up.
| HAL-9001 chapter 10 . 12/27/2009
Love it. An excellent fusion of the GRIMDARK that is WH40K with current society.
You mentioned that Michael has Soulstorm. What would the Marines think of Brother-Captain Indrick "SPESS MEHRENS" Boreale?
I wonder what will happen when the various factions discover sports on TV? The Orks are modeled after soccer hooligans, so they will probably get very "into" the game.
| Texan Rebel chapter 10 . 12/24/2009
Just finished reading all ten chapters... This is pretty dang good. I like how you manages to capture the specific qualities of each force and keep to the game manual. I especially liked the mishaps of the warp spider and the chaos that he created in the, um, restroom/craftworld.
Here is an idea you should consider: The cogboys find 1d4chan and all the stuff that the fa/tg/uys wrote on there and inform the other races. I think the insuing insanity would be both probable and amusing at the same time. Just an idea.
Looking forward to the next instalment. Keep it up!
| iCobalt chapter 1 . 12/24/2009
There won't be much to this review, as there isn't much to say. I haven't been around too long, so I suppose I can't make any real comparison to other works. From what you've written so far, though the story is well written, and the characters are enjoyable. I can't wait to read what happens next, and I hope you continue to write.
My only complaint is the grammar mistakes that sometimes pop up. It's by no means unreadable, but the grammar nazi in me dies a little with each mistake. No big deal, just nit picking.
| Madork Gunna chapter 10 . 12/23/2009
From: Madork Gunna
To: Da Boss
Wot iz ya so 'WOT DA FUCK IZ DAT!' wurried 'bout?
| Red Mage Neko chapter 10 . 12/22/2009
Fifty points for the FLCL reference, probably the most trippy anime I have ever seen. ... Seriously, its like rolling five hits of acid and doing them all at once.
Michael's a bit of a softie, isn't he? Prolly last all of five minutes in 40K. Then again, that's true of most humans. ... The sane ones anyways.
Can't wait to see what's going to happen during Michael's little mind ritual, along with how he comes out of it and how Chaos is going to fuck up the world.
Nitpicks? ... Can't really find all that many. Or any for that matter. A very well done chapter, if a little shorter then the others. But with your laptop getting the blue screen of death, that is to be expected.
On a parting note, I ask this. ... Am I the only one who thinks Michael's going to end up mind raped by Zara before this is all over?
Macha: What, you mean brain scrambled and soul shredded?
No, I mean ACTUALLY mind raped.
All the other Armies: ...