Reviews for I Got You Abby
Guest chapter 6 . 9/20/2017
Abby has just been REPEATEDLY raped and you had Gibbs SMILING as he watches her in her sleep? Gibbs we know would have had feelings that are FAR from admiring her beauty.
And Abby ponders about how SEXY Gibbs is? Oh, girl, you clearly have NO CLUE how it feels to be raped and how it effects you...
Guest chapter 4 . 9/19/2017
If it's Mowher you are talking about, it's Mikel, not Michael.
Guest chapter 4 . 9/19/2017
1. It's Abby SCIUTO, not Scuito
2. Abby has green eyes, not brown.
3. Gibbs didn't hear the break in? I don't buy it.
4. It's a good idea to write from the point of view of different characters but you have to personalise them, make them sound, think and talk like the real Ziva, Abby or others. At the moment, they all seem just one person to me...
Myridia5632 chapter 1 . 10/4/2016
Use spell check, look at your keyboard while typing, or get a beta. My inner grammar Nazi is showing, and is silently glaring at you.
Ellie chapter 1 . 6/19/2016
The issues with spelling and punctuation is making this impossible to read.
kittenlittle24 chapter 7 . 12/4/2015
Ari would have killed that Andrew for letting Gibbs and Abby run. But hey good instincts Abby!
Mary chapter 5 . 8/17/2013
Just. no.
jessica chapter 1 . 6/22/2011
the first chaoter is really good. you have alot of spelling mistakes though.
Sleeper 3173 chapter 1 . 6/4/2011
It a good story, though i strongly recommend you get a Beta to proofread your work and fix some rougher parts.
machelo chapter 3 . 4/22/2011
Hi...your doing a really great job, i'm hooked and can't wait for the next one...good job!
god243527 chapter 5 . 2/20/2011
this would be okay if you used more detail throughout the story. you used i way to much and you rush up on things alot. i hope you are a young writer because if your not, then that is pretty sad that this story was written by an adult
twifan1 chapter 1 . 12/2/2010
I love the beggining of this :)
heidimillett3 chapter 15 . 9/22/2010
I enjoyied your story.
stareagle chapter 15 . 9/20/2010
I can see you have put a lot of thought and effort in your story. Keep writing - you get better with each chapter. I encourage you to have someone beta for you. There are several grammatical mistakes that an editor can coach you to fix.

Best of luck with your writing.

Your profile says you don't want to reveal your age. No matter what your age is, if your heart is in your writing; if the words just seem to write themselves - then you are born to be a story teller.
heidimillett3 chapter 14 . 8/28/2010
Is there going to be more ?/
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