Reviews for Unconditional
trinity16 chapter 34 . 6/1
Sectumsempra
ImsebastianstanButter chapter 31 . 1/21
You're grammar is terrible in this chapter . This chapter is a whole paragraph bcos you haven't left line spaces. As well as this you are meant to leave a line when someone else speaks but you haven't so its confusing
ImsebastianstanButter chapter 9 . 1/21
I'm thinking that her dad has been abusing her. I really hope it isn't though.
ImsebastianstanButter chapter 7 . 1/21
This chapter had me crying
ImsebastianstanButter chapter 1 . 1/20
You are using apostrophes as speech marks :/
HauntedCinders chapter 2 . 3/22/2016
Your grammar needs some work, but other than that, this looks pretty good so far.
Reader chapter 52 . 10/26/2015
Amazing writing! Please keep writing, even if not HP fanfics, I would love to read it!
Dumbledore's got style chapter 23 . 9/16/2015
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nerdsdoitbetter chapter 20 . 8/28/2015
:D

Oh, I have a horrible feeling about poor Polly. And it's only just clicked that Alice, is Nevile's Ma. I nearly cried.
nerdsdoitbetter chapter 16 . 8/28/2015
Cool.
nerdsdoitbetter chapter 15 . 8/28/2015
Oooh. Ok. Didnt expect that. I thought she'd be furious and sad that she hadnt stopped her father sooner after all these years.
nerdsdoitbetter chapter 14 . 8/28/2015
Cute! Their playfulness feels natural and real. :)
nerdsdoitbetter chapter 13 . 8/28/2015
Wow, finally out there. I adore Sirius.
nerdsdoitbetter chapter 12 . 8/28/2015
Great chapter. Felt natural flowing into this.
nerdsdoitbetter chapter 11 . 8/28/2015
So glad it's finally exposed. Well, mostly, and that Sirius is there to take care of her.
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