Reviews for Before You Sleep
TolkienScholar chapter 1 . 6/7
Huh. This is... interesting. I liked Dylan's confusion over his feelings for her, the way he notes that she's the only one who managed to make him smile, the way he seems a little shocked that he hugged her and kissed her cheek, the way he doesn't seem to know what to make of his own actions. I also like the fact that she chose Javier and she stays loyal to him.
However, much of this doesn't make sense, and the multiple spelling and grammar issues make it even more confusing. Dylan seems shocked and shy, but then he shows his feelings towards her way too quickly. I can't see him saying "I miss you" when he's only just seen her the day before, or hugging her so tightly. Why did Javier just drop her off at his house? What are they there for? And what is the ending about? How does the title connect? I'd really recommend coming back and taking a look at this again, clearing some things up, making sure the characters are in character, and keeping everything in one tense; you keep switching between past and present. This work has promise, though. :)
Lilly Fretz chapter 1 . 1/13
PLEASE make another! PLEASE!
Guest chapter 1 . 6/13/2014
extend the ending please, make him wake up and find out it is only a dream.
Guest chapter 1 . 6/13/2014
Guest chapter 1 . 6/13/2014
Pretty please write more! I ship DylanXAkeelah! ️️️️️
Guest chapter 1 . 9/8/2013
I like it, but I'm still kind of confused about what happened at the end, but I still Ike it and think you should make more chapters
Tiara chapter 1 . 8/29/2012
Tiarajackson chapter 1 . 8/21/2012
Ilikeitbutputmorechaptersand brokenheartslikeforbrokenhea rtsachapter8peaceoutyall
Tiarajackson chapter 1 . 8/21/2012
Ilikeitandyoushouldputmorech apters
Sesshy's Mate2012 chapter 1 . 2/24/2011
OMG I loved this. You need to continue. Please? :)
Jazzyness chapter 1 . 10/30/2010
Love the concept of this fanfiction. There are a few grammatical mistakes, but otherwise it's very well written.

1)I can't even think anything because only...

maybe: I can't even think about anything because only...

2) "Dylan! There's someone comes looking for you;"

maybe: -There's someone here for you!


-There's someone looking for you!

3)but in the end I went from the living room, opened the front door. I surprised...

maybe: but in the end I left the living room, and opened the front door. I was surprised...

When are you updating next? I had a similar idea, but don't want to write anything if you're going to continue the story...
DragonFire Princess chapter 1 . 8/22/2010
Love the story, Hope you'll update ASAP!
AznLee chapter 1 . 4/13/2010
omg! YOu must update! i love this pairing!
slytherinangel01 chapter 1 . 4/2/2010
It's AWESOME! I love Dylan and Akeela pairing. Javier is good but I prefer Dylan.

Please continue writing!
Scarlett Clearwater chapter 1 . 2/11/2010
aww ! lovely! i like javier, but i like better akeelah/dylan .. next chapter .. please !
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