|Reviews for Transitional Stages|
| Meep chapter 1 . 4/26/2017
For mystery science reader- oh sorry I was singing again.
| haruharu chapter 4 . 2/7/2014
OMG u updated! I love tracks and raoul please more!
| lunarpopcorn chapter 4 . 1/21/2014
Munka Spanka! ha ha ha XD
I absolutely loved the end bit with Eject attracting Raoul and all the boys and Jazz stealing a kiss from raoul. I really like all the characters personalities in this story because they are all so humorous to read. I don't usually read crack stories. but reading this story always amuses me (plus I love bot/human pairings.) I hope you continue this story because I would love to read more! :)
| The Fox Familiar chapter 4 . 1/19/2014
So this was based on a kink meme? Well that explains everything. Only the sickest wenches ever write stuff from that end of the park. In any case, this seems to be a TL;DR manifesto of...nothing. All these characters are just talking about nothing, doing nothing, and for some reason they all have a massive orgy. And we’re supposed to laugh, or something like that.
Is this a human AU? Because you make it sound that way. And, after all, only a real man sodomizes, right? Hell yeah. Oh, wait, nevermind, those were just the holograms.
“You oughta know most people fuck recreationally” – I know Jazz, and he wouldn’t be this brazen. He is a gentle-bot, whether you admit it or not. He may be laid back, but he isn’t THAT nasty. Plus, it just shows me that the story is all about getting people hot and not much else. We have the classic boy or human who questions a non-human about what they do in their sex-life, and they laugh or tell them they’re not tolerant enough. If I swapped the names here with any other canon character from any other fandom, I would get the same formula and the same end result.
THAT is how predictable these stories are.
Raoul sounds like a male version of you. He’s just so convenient, asking all those questions and stuff. Plus, I’m still not laughing. I can really tell this was a kink meme prompt, because all I can see is a sick fuck fangirl rubbing her hands at any kinky shit she can find. Of course, we have the “genders aren’t solid” argument, and the fact that there are no chicks here because they’re icky. I mean, nothing is hotter than seeing two robots fuck, right?
Oh, wait. Is Raoul going to get it on with a robot? Wow. Ain’t that new. Gotta have some exotic hoes, right?
It is funny how you mention the whole Arcee debacle and how feminists wanted her in there.
And you pulled the LGBT card. Nice. Fastest way to turn people off.
And lookie here! Some other robot pointed out that a pervert is having a relationship with an underage human!
Way to go! And yet you portray it as normal.
As for the last chapter, this was by far the one I could find the most to pick out of. The previous three were little more than mindless jibber-jabber, and now that I have gotten this far, I can see exactly how libtarded the author is.
No surprise to me. The author adores homosexual pornography and isn’t inclined to keep it to herself. All the better for me.
The entire skinhead thing is unneeded and belongs in ‘American History X’. I’m not sure if this was meant to get your readership to feel righteous anger at those horrible white racists, or whether you meant to use it seriously as a bolster to your story. The racial remarks are also not needed, because this isn’t a story to teach racial tolerance; as a matter of fact, you seem to be the type to accept everything and anything with no amount of resistance, and I find it funny how you are trying to sell a homosexual story involving a human and a robot. Granted, the straight ones bug me as well, but at least they’re complimentary. In this case, Raoul is little more than the author’s representation of a cheap individual. He has done nothing over the past few chapters and he is easily forgettable.
I don’t even know what is supposed to be happening in this awful story. Why is Jazz drinking coffee? He’s a robot and they don’t need caffeine. I also don’t understand what role Raoul serves, anyways, or what any other original character you offer. He’s just...there.
Plus the relationship between Jazz and Tracks is your token homosexual relationship: possessive, effeminate, with one being the bitch and the other being the dominant. Jazz is too cool for that, anyways, and I’m sure Tracks wouldn’t approve of it. I don’t understand why every single story has to involve slash. But I guess that is the rule of fanfiction and their disturbed authors.
And Jazz kissed Raoul. Disgusting. Again, the Jazz I know wouldn’t do that. If everyone is making such a big stink about Raoul being underage, they wouldn’t touch him, yet they do it anyways. Tracks is acting like a possessive woman and all of them are just...well, they ARE women. There is absolutely no reason for them to be gay aside from your desperate want for them to be gay. It doesn’t make a good story; it makes them all perverts.
And it makes you a cheap whore, but eh, whatever.
I don’t even think you had an idea of this story or whether or not it read right to you. For now, it’s long, unfunny, and a butchery of the characters, which you seem to gloat it. Your writing is forgettable and not very good. The humour is very fangirl-ish and may be funny to fellow fangirls, but not to me. It’s rather...how should I say it? Retarded.
Like I said before, I don’t get the racial bits, either. But it’s clear you’re so tolerant that it’s okay for you to use them, as well as glorify these weird pairings. What is wrong with you, woman?
| The Fox Familiar chapter 1 . 1/19/2014
So...porn with cheap humour. Classic porn. I don't find the humour in this funny at all; all I can see is a demented fangirl fingering herself and selling pairings that would never work.
"You're soaked...better take you home" - OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHH SHIT SON, WE'RE GONNA HAVE A SEX SCENE. HELL YEAH.
So, where's the porn? All I'm getting is cheap humour.
| lunarpopcorn chapter 3 . 7/19/2013
This is absolutely hilarious! I could not stop laughing at all the comments they all said and the arguments they all had, it was so funny to read! XD
| feki021 chapter 3 . 2/6/2013
plz continue! luv!
| HunterPup13 chapter 3 . 11/26/2012
I really hope you decide to continue this. It's AWESOME.
| THE female dog chapter 3 . 10/8/2012
i will say that even though i usually don't stick with fics that have so much negativity i found this rather enjoyable, so you get points there, patently awaiting next update
| Autoboticon chapter 3 . 5/14/2012
Hey there! just wanted to let you know that I'm really enjoying this story.
I love TracksxRaoul's fics¡
So pretty pretty please, update soon!
| FluffysBijin05 chapter 3 . 3/29/2012
I really enjoy this story I started off reading the new one with tracks and raoul and firgured there must be one before it. I don't know it you're still updating this but it's great and I can't wait to see how it connects to the other story. The characters are great, very lively and I always enjoy and the teletran thing reminds me of plum from chobits.
Please keep up the great work.
| Revak chapter 1 . 3/6/2012
I LOVE this story!
I only recently discovered this pairing (I'm sorry to say), but I find it utterly adorable. Please please PLEASE continue!
| haruharu chapter 3 . 11/20/2011
Fun stuff thanx for the new chapter. I do love Raoul and Tracks haha. The idea of TF porn is kinda silly to me because obviously anything we'd find hot would be alien to them because well...they're aliens haha! So its kinda fun to read how you try to explain what constitutes as 'porn' to them haha.
| Lily Carroll chapter 3 . 11/20/2011
Was great recive alert of the new chapter!
The cross of stylle is different and interesting. The idea of the chatroon is nice! (Red Alert is pain in the ass).
I hope for more scene and interaction between Tracks and Raoul.
(and sorry for my bad English)
| haruharu chapter 2 . 8/29/2011
Please update soon. Like super soon! I love this story so much, Raoul and Tracks are the best of Human/autobot relationships. Please update soon!