Reviews for A Sudden Focus
MaliciaRoxasSasuke chapter 1 . 8/20/2011
Kyyyyyyyyaaaaaaa ! So great !
Naiyenne chapter 1 . 11/11/2009
I like it, really. Yuffie's just being Yuffie again.

I was a little like herwhen I was young (at least my best friend says it, and she always says what she's thinking, so I guess she's right).

Anyway, I REALLY, REALLY like it. Well done.
Suicidal Muffin-chan chapter 1 . 11/10/2009
D'aw.

D'aw.

D'AW

It's just so cute and sweet that it makes me want to cry! X3

Nicely done!

The only constructive criticism I can think to offer:

1.) There were a couple places that read awkwardly; maybe try reading aloud? That usually helps to rephrase/reword.

2.) The little breaks where it would switch the focus from Leon to Cloud to Leon kinda made it seem a little choppy to me. It didn't really hurt anything, but I'm of the opinion that breaks to switch focuses are unnecessary in third-person POV. But that could just be me being picky XD

Like I said, very nicely done. :3 I enjoyed it a lot!
NinjaSheik chapter 1 . 11/9/2009
OH...MY...GOD...

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THAT WAS TOTALLY AWESOME! BELIEVE IT! AWESOME! KYAA! KYAA!

Blushes

KYAA!