|Reviews for Bee Pregnant|
| Artemis Jane chapter 2 . 3/23
Not to be rude, I promise, but have you ever heard of paragraphing? Everytime the speaker switches it's a new paragraph. The way you wrote is confusing and I'm not exactly sure what it means. I could edit it if you want just pm me if you want me to. I really like it it just needs a little work. Trust me, if I didn't think you were a good writer I wouldn't give you constructive critisism
| Artemis Jane chapter 1 . 3/23
Like it but that was an unrealistic convo and moved way too fast
| Guest chapter 2 . 4/14/2013
It's a little cheesy but please continue!
| aholebullsheet chapter 2 . 9/7/2012
| McKessie Taylor chapter 2 . 7/29/2012
| Monkey55 chapter 2 . 11/13/2011
I thought it was a little confusing, but the part I got was very good!
| not.in.hufflepuff chapter 2 . 10/2/2011
I really liked it. The whole time I was reading the book I was waiting for a moment like this! But for 1. Type your story into Word first and use SPELL CHECK! 2. Space your story into paragraphs. Each time someone new is talking start a new paragraph. It will make it a lot easier to read. But yes this is great! Keep writing!
| GilmoreGirlsAddict - Rogan Fan chapter 1 . 3/28/2011
| Hannah Dewe chapter 1 . 1/31/2011
you need to make your storys bigger
| kkkkkkklll chapter 1 . 8/1/2010