Reviews for The beginning of a legend
Primus2021 chapter 2 . 8/1/2014
NaruHina Please!
Guest chapter 1 . 6/21/2014
so Naruto is like part sayin or something so this is going to be interesting but when they fight could u put Naruto V.S Sasuke in the final round and Naruto will win easily and then he will become insane and evil and join Orochimaru then Goku and Vegeta visit him and Vegeta tells him to follow the path of hatred and darkness ect and Goku tells him to be loyal to Konoha and follow the path of justice and Naruto reflects on his life and of course take Vegeta's advice then in the end on the like 20th chapter Naruto destroy's the leaf obtains the sharingan and becomes immortal just a few suggestions 0kay a lot but just putting it out there oh and make naruto bloodthirsty. I LOVED THIS CHAPTER JUST A FEW UPDATES ;)
Teres22 chapter 2 . 6/16/2010
nice would be nice if there were another chapter .Still thanks for the 2 chapters
tocool4ice chapter 2 . 2/26/2010
oh this is going to be a good story
ForeverFallen76 chapter 2 . 2/23/2010
I do like your story as its original, but it needs some work. Your sentence structure is very jumbled and at times difficult to understand the meaning. Take your time when writing out each chapter. When you finish each chapter, reread it aloud and you'll find most of your mistakes that way. Also, find any story that has a great writer and compare what you just wrote to theirs. adrien skywalker, bestifreplaced, SaiyanWarrior200, Agent-G, James D. Fawkes, and animefan29 are some really good writers you can learn to write better from by reading their stories. Just a thought. Later.
music and reading chapter 1 . 2/22/2010
I likey. Keep up the good work!
kurokitsune666 chapter 2 . 2/22/2010
Its an interesting story UPDATE SOON!
kin-kinna chapter 1 . 2/19/2010
Interesting.
katsdead chapter 1 . 12/24/2009
awsome update soon please
tocool4ice chapter 1 . 11/18/2009
hehehehehe lovely story lots of violence lol good job so far
deadw8 chapter 1 . 11/11/2009
so orichmaru was not orhc but mayuri and naruto is the desnet of kenpachi and goku whos side of the family will naruto be evil and is the curse seal there still or was it antempt top awakein his poweres