Reviews for Defeat Never Has to Remain So
puiwaihin chapter 1 . 9/11/2011
This is a very good idea. You should rewrite this as a serious piece and expand it into a novella.

BTW, why the 'M' rating? This is quite tame.
simply Eric chapter 1 . 11/11/2009
i think you got a good concept here. i think you should also write it in 3rd person (he,she,they,etc.).
Guest chapter 1 . 11/10/2009
to constantly read our surface thoughts the bloody beatles easily
you use the band 'the beatles' alot... i think you mean beetles, cause 'cant buy me, love' did not enslave a race..