Reviews for Red
Wyntirsno chapter 6 . 5/1/2012
If your in love with so much in this story, you need to continue it. :D

I love this and all the others that are connected to this story.

I'm glad that Setsuna came and stopped their fighting. She is very strong, will they figure out that Angie didn't do anything to them? Or did she?

Yay Aaron, he is doing great, I hope they don't get stuck down there. You have to write more, we have to know they get out. :P
wiz-witch in training chapter 6 . 4/30/2012
Yay! You updated!

Robin: What's this and WHY was Nightwing mentioned in the summary?

You are being ignored because this isn't your world.

Mary: Why's he even in here?

He keeps hacking things.

...

"they have to be spies from the Nightwings,"

Sierra: Like Ellie?

Ellie: *sarcastically* Ha ha, that's SO funny.

Don't fight...

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"Probably something the Nightwings did,"

Mary: *punches Robin* You evil!

Robin: ...When will you guys stop with the jokes?

Soon, hopefully.

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"Though, Aaron wondered why Zack was also affected if Cody was the only one she used magic on."

Mary and Sierra: Twin telepathy.

Mary: It allows one twin...

Sierra: ...To feel what the other is feeling.

Something tells me it's stronger in identical twins because they have identical genetic make-up.

Ellie: Yeah, that messes me up easily. *turns to Mary* Right, Si?

Mary: I'm Mary.

Ellie: See?

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"Was it because they were dimensionals, and therefore more susceptible?"

Didn't we suspect that?

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"So you beat that out of them,"

Robin: We have many, many, MANY more efficiant ways of getting information like that.

Mary: Really?

Robin: Well, Batman does.

Ellie: And you learn them when a spy for the JL.

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"You have a plan, don't you?"

I'm thinking "run in and beat the crap out of everyone" *everyone stares at me* What? It's a plan!

Ellie: ...I'm fearing for my life.

Mary, Sierra, and Robin: Join the club.

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"Let me guess, there's a catch,"

You need timing so precise FLASH would have difficulties doing it?

Wally and Willa: Hey!

Ellie: She's got a point.

Mary: Why's the Junior Justice League in here?

Sierra: Just Robin, KF, and her OCs, Mare. Besides, they're fun! *grins*

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"the thought of being imprisoned by Ryo coming back to the forefront of her mind"

Young Justice characters: Huh?

*deep breath* Mary, Sierra, Muse, can ONE of you explain everything to them?

Mary: *talks in French with Sierra* Fine, I'll do it.

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"Really? It will be at least a few more hours,"

She was trying to be supportive, Setsuna.
Waldojeffers chapter 5 . 5/19/2011
Well, I was confused at the start of this chapter... Guess that's what long breaks can do with you. Nice chapter, long fighting scene though. That long that I was considering it might've been better to make it short. Reading it a 2nd time learned that that might be not such a good idea: it's good like it is now. :)

I guess we should be happy that mysterious person (who I really don't know at all) showed up. Hate to think what would have happened to the 3 boys if she didn't stop them. Some bravery by Aaron there though, maybe stupid but still brave.

Nice chapter, looking forward to more. :)
wiz-witch in training chapter 5 . 5/9/2011
Mary: Looks like SOMEONE'S rubbed off.

Me (trying to speak French): Excuse moi.

Sierra: Ignore her.

Me: Whatever. Anyway, good job, although I wonder who this new girl is...

Cassidy: Is that all you have to say?

Me: No. I was also going to say that I wonder what's going on with Zack and Cody. I mean, if it wasn't for the girls coming in-

Mary and Sierra: DON'T SAY IT!

Me: *face palm* And I thought the other two were annoying.

Trey and Mitchell: *walk in* Who's annoying?

Me: Well, at least Mary and Sierra can go...Anyway, good job, and I can't wait to see who this new person is.
Wyntirsno chapter 5 . 5/9/2011
I'm glad you started writing on this story again. Good for Waldo for getting you started again. :)

Poor twins, their power just isn't acting normal in this world. I wonder when they will figure out what happened to it? Aaron, such a good brother and friend willing to give himself to save the others. I'm glad the mysterious lady showed up to stop him from having to do it. At least I hope so.

Good chapter, can't wait for your next one.
Wyntirsno chapter 4 . 3/6/2011
That was good. The twins are having a hard time of it in this new world. That would be a scary nightmare. Does Zack know about Cody's other nightmare that he had in the hospital?

How many people know Noah? He affected more people than we thought, tho not all in a good way. I guess he was always perceived as a bully, poor kid.

Are these new people the owners of the place they are staying? Can't wait to see.
Elianna22 chapter 4 . 3/4/2011
Once again, splitting up this chapter was a great decision flow-wise. I like the parallel between both sets of siblings having meaningful, bonding conversations, showing how important they are to each other. Emphasizing their bonds also forebodingly suggests they will be endangered as the action continues.

Good use of abstract questions. There is no hard and fast rule that decrees the "good" guys always win, however tempting it is to believe so. The reference to Noah made me go "A-ha" - some of us already know of his sad fate.

I'm going to guess that the two approaching strangers live in this underground house, but that their parents built it since they're both teenagers. Now, the big question is, will they turn out to be allies or foes? I think their arrival also ties into the chapter title "Not Alone", along with the siblings relying on each other to feel less alone in this new world. Update again soon :)
wiz-witch in training chapter 4 . 3/1/2011
You mean the Black thing? Anyway, I like it when Zack acts like the older brother he is.

Mary: Zachary's older?

Me: By 10 minutes. Unlike your TWO.

Mary: Are you sure Cody's not the older one?

Me: Have you met Trixie yet?

Mary: *leaves*

Me: And THAT, my dear friend, is how you get rid of an OC that hates you. Like I said, like the Zack acting like the older brother. He doesn't do that enough in the show. Looks like the next part's going to be fun. Between the twins' energy problem and Cody's injuries, they may need some luck as well...
wiz-witch in training chapter 3 . 3/1/2011
Very interesting with the under ground house. I REALLY hope that the earth elemental doesn't come back...unless (s)he could be an ally... I love how Heather checked the see if they were there. I laughed so loud.

Again withe the boys being tired. Are you sure it's not because they're demensionals?

Mary: What else could it be? It could be...no.

Me: QUIT HOVERING! Sorry, she found my number one pet peeve. Anyway, onto chapter four!
Waldojeffers chapter 4 . 3/1/2011
That was earlier than I expected this to come actually. I think that's good news. ;)

This chapter read like it's a quiet time right before the storm arrives. In fact this reminded me of a certain scene of the Lord of the Rings-movies where 2 characters were standing outside a castle, talking about the upcoming war, their fears... And suddenly 'storm' arrived. This chapter totally gave me that feeling: nice! :)

It's only natural for our twins and our other siblings to feel scared now. They've just been in a war and are dropped into a new world: must be very intimidating for them! So um, this Noah Heather encountered in school, this doesn't happen to be the same Noah Sydney met too?

Great chapter, I feel the action is coming closer and closer. Can't wait for more of this epic story. :)
Elianna22 chapter 3 . 2/26/2011
As I've said offline, I really liked seeing where this chapter left off. Heather's and Aaron's characters are developing nicely, giving us a deeper look at their pasts and personalities, and this new world is being shown to us bit by bit.

I wonder who built the underground home. And why the twins are so exhausted. Good continuity with building up this mystery, I sense it's going to play a key role in how the twins fare on this quest. Looking forward to more :)
Wyntirsno chapter 3 . 2/22/2011
Wow it almost seemed that their hiding place was made just for them. I'm sure it wasn't tho, whats going to happen when the owner comes home? Were the Nightwings flying over looking for them or just on a regular patrol? Hope the twins get some of their energy back. Good chapter. :)
Waldojeffers chapter 3 . 2/22/2011
Looks you're taking a slow approach with this story this time. Have to say I like this. Because even though we go slow now, there are enough elements mentioned to make us curious for more.

Just like the others I'm not really sure of this Nightwing medicine either. But even without that there is something weird going on in this world.

Anyway, good chapter! Let the action (and the answers) arrive! :)
wiz-witch in training chapter 2 . 2/8/2011
Okay, I know I should be worried about Cody, but all I could think was ", brotherly love!" Then I mumbled under my breath a bit. I like the idea of using their real names for fake names, although I expected Heather and Aaron to say "Emily and Jason." Oh well. Okay, really? I was thinking of doing something, and in it, Bailey was a girl named Debby, but she forgot her name, so she was called Bailey. I wonder what was making the twins tired, though. Hm...
Elianna22 chapter 2 . 2/3/2011
Now that I've reread Chapter 1, it seems like even more of a teaser :P How do these two chapters link up... I guess we will have to wait a while to find out.

Like the other reviewers, I am curious to see why Zack and Cody are affected by a mysterious force in this strange land. Seems like it could really put them in danger, if they can't keep their strength up. Now that we've seen one Nightwing, I wonder if we will learn more about Mr. Moseby's part. As you know, I quite liked his reveal as a Nightwing in DE.

Good luck with the next chapter in this interwoven saga! :)
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